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(23-07-2020, 08:10 PM)manasi Wrote: I could not follow your "2 sentences of your description where I changed the colour". There are something missing. If possible, kindly clarify. I dont visit the forum regularly and must have missed some important points.
@Man4u90036
I do remember both the incidents and they will be addressed.
breville1 was good in expression and devlepment of the story. his logical conclusion was fantastic. However, I find him shying away explaining the motive of Kavita. Though this may be attributable, to some extent, to amethyst1982. Unfortunately, breville1 continued from from the reins of amethyst1982.
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The ones you mentioned " NO MORE HUMILIATION. I HAD ENOUGH"....I was talking about those sentences. Even I too felt it's too much for a human being to suppress so much of humiliation Manu faced. Some other person in his place would have killed himself or killed both Kavita, Prem/Amir or atleast one of them or would have definitely became insane/mad due to the continuous manipulations, bullying, torcher and humiliation.
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(24-07-2020, 08:25 PM)Uday Wrote: The ones you mentioned " NO MORE HUMILIATION. I HAD ENOUGH"....I was talking about those sentences. Even I too felt it's too much for a human being to suppress so much of humiliation Manu faced. Some other person in his place would have killed himself or killed both Kavita, Prem/Amir or atleast one of them or would have definitely became insane/mad due to the continuous manipulations, bullying, torcher and humiliation.
Yes.. Is love really that blind....
From the starting manu was projected as one with kow confidence, when it comes to himself, thissshows along with career how important it is to have confidence to stand for himself and take control.
One of the old readers who followed the original authors updates said that he stopped writing after facing hurls and abuses in comments section, he too responded in aggressive manner.....
Found on reditt discussion that he was asking for a writer to continue this...
Going by the title.. I sincerely feel that everything would have settled like breville1
Manasi also seems to be chalked out everything, taking 2, 3 months to plot perfectly is really appreciable dude... ?
Waiting eagerly
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To me Kavitha appears as the ultimate Female Dom and Don, Boss in office, Boss in House and even has control on her Bull. just a Bull for her physical needs, may be. But to everyone there will be a limit and surely even Manu will have. So waiting to see how the plot unfolds.
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I am grateful for reposing faith in me. I promise to continue by Oct 2020 to complete by Dec 2020. In between I may go off for some time. It will be required to meet my other necessities of life. So please have patience and continue with your valuable inputs.
(23-07-2020, 09:27 PM)kittepo Wrote: Hi Manasi, here are my (probably final thoughts)
In this case - Kavitha is the "hot wife" - brains behind entire thing. Prem/Amir is a "bull" for her needs. I think she truly loves Manu -- but she wants Manu to be a her "cuckold" or control him unconditionally. She is not a "slut". She wants Prem to satisfy her "sexual" needs. But she wants Manu for everything else. When Prem wanted to leave (while taking Manu to hospital), she wanted him to stay. She was training Manu to be at "her" beck and call. The person who can do that is Prem. With Prem she exudes control as well. Prem likes women and she knows if she can feed his ego, she has him as well. This is where Gauri, Rachna and other girls in Prem's photo album comes in.
Did Gouri appear in Prem's photo album? I doubt. Kindly give me the episode no. I may have over looked.
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(25-07-2020, 12:42 PM)manasi Wrote: I am grateful for reposing faith in me. I promise to continue by Oct 2020 to complete by Dec 2020. In between I may go off for some time. It will be required to meet my other necessities of life. So please have patience and continue with your valuable inputs.
Did Gouri appear in Prem's photo album? I doubt. Kindly give me the episode no. I may have over looked.
No dude Gouri was not appear in prem's photo album. She was colleague of prem working place. That what Kavi share information to manu on the 1st first time when prem bring Gouri to Manu home for the weekend.
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(25-07-2020, 11:33 AM)twinciteeguy Wrote: To me Kavitha appears as the ultimate Female Dom and Don, Boss in office, Boss in House and even has control on her Bull. just a Bull for her physical needs, may be. But to everyone there will be a limit and surely even Manu will have. So waiting to see how the plot unfolds.
kavita was not a boss in office..............in original story by indiansubmale................kavita was housewife..........and surviving by manu's earnings
even her BF aamir was a trainee..............so both were fucking on manu's expenses
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(25-07-2020, 12:42 PM)manasi Wrote: I am grateful for reposing faith in me. I promise to continue by Oct 2020 to complete by Dec 2020. In between I may go off for some time. It will be required to meet my other necessities of life. So please have patience and continue with your valuable inputs.
Did Gouri appear in Prem's photo album? I doubt. Kindly give me the episode no. I may have over looked.
gauri was not in the amir's photo album ................findout by manu....by searching his trunk............. in the starting by indiansubmale
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(25-07-2020, 12:46 PM)Redbull_69 Wrote: No dude Gouri was not appear in prem's photo album. She was colleague of prem working place. That what Kavi share information to manu on the 1st first time when prem bring Gouri to Manu home for the weekend.
exactly...............
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(25-07-2020, 08:33 PM)kamdev99008 Wrote: kavita was not a boss in office..............in original story by indiansubmale................kavita was housewife..........and surviving by manu's earnings
even her BF aamir was a trainee..............so both were fucking on manu's expenses
yes, she is just housewife. read original before reading continuations.
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26-07-2020, 12:48 AM
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Hi
Manasi it is a great challenge for you to continue the story and justify all questions in readers mind but i have faith in you. i read your past comments in other threads your views and reviews about the stories are good. hope all go well. start the story when you are ready and make sure you have couple of updates before posting your first update.
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(25-07-2020, 08:33 PM)kamdev99008 Wrote: kavita was not a boss in office..............in original story by indiansubmale................kavita was housewife..........and surviving by manu's earnings
even her BF aamir was a trainee..............so both were fucking on manu's expenses
Thank you for the clrification. I think I possibly forgot some parts of the old story.
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(26-07-2020, 12:48 AM)Ramesh_Rocky Wrote: Hi
Manasi it a great challenge for you to continue the story and justify all questions in readers mind but i have faith in you. i read your past comments in other threads your views and reviews about the stories are good. hope all go well. start the story when you are ready and make sure you have couple of updates before posting your first update.
I am overwhelmed with your worm gesture. I will try with my limited knowledge to justify all questions in readers mind, provided the questions are put in black & white in this forum.
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Jaldi suru kar yar.... ? please don't mind for selection of my words..
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(27-07-2020, 08:02 PM)MASTER90 Wrote: Jaldi suru kar yar.... ? please don't mind for selection of my words..
Language should not be viewed as shortcomings expressing our moods. You are welcome in your selection of words.
Please wait till Oct 2020. A very few persons are bestowed with literacy skills and definitely I don't fall in that category. Moreover, my tribute is in justifying the characters pictured by great 'indiansubmale'. Inflicting fresh sex and humiliation is not in my schedule. I request you to refresh your memory with the original story avoiding contribution from other writers built on this storyline to avoid mixing up. And definitely don't forget to raise your concerns.
Looking forward for valuable contribution to picture the characters concisely.
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Just a request to you manasi if possible
Don't make it a happy ending for any of the character
As much as it looks like manu should get justice
For the humiliation. I personally have no sympathy for pathetic people like manu who can't stand up for themselves and give excuses of love and always pleasing the person like kavita who don't give shit
And as for as kavita which manu describes as loving beautiful and smart with full self respect. Well her actions seems very funny. At this point some might say negative things about her but for me they don't deserve even ounce of my attention and respect that is out of question i won't even hate her just remove her like a bed bug surviving on others.
Coz seriously if she was as manu describes as full of esteem would she fall to such low degree to be a cocunbine of idiot like prem that's right an IDIOT.
if she was devoid of physical satisfaction for long time and had tried every options to overcome then she should have just divorced manu and marry someone else who could provide all the things women yearn for.
And last but not least the IDIOT PREM who has to always convince himself that he is a real man by fucking as much as free pussy he can get if that were the case then male escorts would have been called real man instead they are called gigolo and women who have have to sell there bodies are called prostitutes and not real women.
And for his shallow ego he has to assert domination over weak man so he could be stronger
As for as i think strong men either motivate weak men or they don't give a shit about weak men
So the reasonable ending would be that they all burn themselves due to their own deeds.
Of course its what i think and hope you can write as you please.
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@Theflash
Your request is thought provoking and interesting.
I would like to emphasize on a few things here.
I have made some basic assumtions.
1. The srory has some truth in it. Otherwise, it will be meaningless, to justify the characters in real world.
2. The characters mostly accepts the truth, when they speak to their mind.
3. Every character has even chances to go wrong while reading other's mind. The perceptions go in line with the character's own mental state at that point. For example you see somebody smiling at you. It can be jovile, hostile, crucked, pleasant, sly, grin, twinkle etc etc Not necessarily character's perception is always correct. He may construe a hostile one as crucked.
The story is described in Manu's version. He is expected to be biased on certain aspects. If the same story is presented by Kavita or Prem, even in real sceniaro, they will differ quite widely. Folw of communications are always aberrated. No communications are exact replica of originals.
In science we call for best fitting curve matching with a set of given points. In two dimensions we search for line. In three dimensions we go for fitting surface. Here Manu has provided a set of incidents involving Kavita, Prem, Gowri and some other characters introduced at different points. My effort is to find a fitting geometric (psychological ) relationship logically acceptable explaining as much incidents as much as possible. The incidents ( I say points ) are already generated and existing. I can't change the coordinates of said points. Maximum I may allow some deviations to find the fittest relationship.
So I neither accept your request nor reject.
Thank you. Please continue with your valuable suggestions.
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