[Blue Bull]

WOW WHAT A STORY BRO REALLY AWESOME YOUR NARRATION IS JUST AMAZING WAITING FOR MORE STORIES FROM YOU PLEASE DONT DISAPPOINT US

I am not a real player dude ...... like to watch the match sitting in the box ..... actually I like to analyse the stories and to encourage the writers ..... my writing Guru is Shree and Theme n Concept master is Pinuram ....... better to ask them active here again ........

[Blue Bull]

This night has to be like their first night. I expect both explore each others body fully and lick and kiss each other fully. He teach her blow job and she enjoy it and drink all his juices. He eat her mangoes and vertical lips and asshole and make her moan and cry with many thundrous orgasms. Original story did not have things in details. Hope this has more in detail on each other point of view. She will get whatever her husband did not show so far. Siraj will show complete love like his wife and make her fall for him.

Gandhi, the story is now complied .............what is ur feelings now ..... Is my narration is up to ur mark .......?

[Blue Bull]

Thanks for completing the story.
Naina is more playful, teasing in this version. The real emotions was only from Siraj.
The last scene where they parted did not make a punch like original. Not sure it is because its second time read.

Actually this is the story of two different variants ...... Siraj, a seasoned veteran known as Playboy in his organization but with strong ethics and with vast experience with gals ...... where as Naina is quite nave and sexually starved for long time of which she was quite unaware and also not aware of the basic needs of a person and required amenities for a healthy leaving ..... They both are north and south poles ..... so such reactions from them is evident .......

As far as the punch from the last scene ...... I could not understand your feelings ..... I think it was just the original with a slight change in added naration .... do not think that diluted the closing punch .... will u pl explain that little bit in details ........

[Blue Bull]

There will be a thread of tension that would be running between the two main characters. i think it is missed somewhere. Naina behave more like a slut for the reason not known. Her plan to take his child and her explanation for giving her was appreciable.

I think all ur dilemmas are answered in the story itself or in my previous explanation to Thangaraasu ......

[Blue Bull]

Wonderful story

Thx dude .......

[Blue Bull]

Lovely story.. well written and sensible conckusion though could have been continued and would have loved to read as wwell..nevertheless well done...plz keep writing.

Thx Sir for ur compliments ...... Yes, lots of question to be answered ....... What happened to Siraj n Naina after they departed ......? How Naina's relation with Karthik was ?...... Whether she got impregnated or not? If yes, how she managed that and what is Karthik's reaction ?.... Whether Siraj forgot that onenight incidence as a nightmare ? ...... etc. many things .........

[Blue Bull]

A testimonial for the original story .........

[Blue Bull]

[Blue Bull]

All writers' should realize this ..... difference between Porn Stories and Erotic Stories ...... though both belongs to Sex stories .........

Of course, ‘sex stories’ remain alive because it is so wonderful compared to video content. A wonderfully written story can give a long-lasting effect making one recall the story and enjoy numerous times. It is a powerful way to communicate emotions, feelings, romance intimacy and erotic things.

A thoughtful story creates a warm feeling with the readers and if the medium is used thoughtfully with the right plot, characterization, situations, dialogs, conversations, and emotions. We can create a fabulous sex story where readers can immerse themselves deep into the plot and enjoy them being one of the characters in the story.

Unfortunately, it is very rare to find such high-quality story-driven content for sex stories. Very professional writers write nonsex stories involving sentiment, emotion, love, and all other feelings. But they wont touch on XX rated stories. Sex stories can be entirely different than explaining just pure intercourse explanation.

Many novice writers misunderstand the difference between sex story and sex narration. They are entirely different. Writing pages of content explaining what boy and girl did to each other in sex is sex narration and not sex story. That is too boring to read.

A writer needs to think of the situation, position, conversation, action, and many other things. In the course of thinking this will make a writer think about sex all the time. This will definitely take their productivity out from their life. They will be always thinking about this. Writing requires a hell lot of time from their daily activity.
I personally felt that I gave the least priority to real life thinking and writing porn. I forgot to progress in career, forgot to service vehicle on time. I thought writing is too injurious to personal and family well being. So I decided to step away from writing to get rid of the addiction.

I managed to be away from writing for a long period. Now I feel a bit of thirst to write again. I want to cautiously balance and spent on writing. Hence decided to time-bound and write one decent story.

[Blue Bull]

Amazing finish. You did it without spoiling the classic. Hats off.

Thx dude ...... great understanding .........

[Blue Bull]

Very brilliantly narrated erotica comes to an end.. kudos to the writer for his super skillful writing skill and the way we carried away with each n every moment of encounters with both the characters.. it creates love for both haiw maturely they dealt with their situation from mingling to departure.. but we definitely expect more such stories for writer in future.. thank you..

Thx bro for ur nice compliments butiful analysis ......... I am not a regular player in the field of writing field but like to read great sex stories and encouraging and guiding the writers by proper analysis of their works .......

[Blue Bull]

Very nice writing

Thx dude ......

[Blue Bull]

Super erotic story. North and south cannot meet always.

Yes dear ....... but an accident happens accidentally ........ some times .......

[Blue Bull]

Good finish. Thanks.

Welcome Vicky ....... thx for the compliments ........

[Blue Bull]

Can't you just give it a happy ending kya jata yrr

Dear, actually its' a modified one so i can not change the original climax or ending ...... but in my opinion being its a realistic and emotional one the ending perfectly math the concept/theme .........

[Blue Bull]

very nice story so well written
really you are great writer, your writing skill is hidden talent now being exposed here.
the way you carried it is super and the ending is also really heart touching, after so much of expression about love and care, the pain of departing is very nice. at last moment call history being deleted is token of love towards each other and decided not to re-enter in each others lives
if you had changed the end like happy ending, it would be like Indian films
keep writing and entertaining
thanks for your both stories
this one as well my story

Thx Shree for your nice concern ........

[Blue Bull]

We can except sequal to this story sooon.

No problem in expecting ........ problem is, as I am not a regular player in writing field ..... nit yet prepared for the future course ........

[Blue Bull]

Please am requesting that not to sequel of this story sir, because we are exceptions more more high , and due to somouch of time to given this story, so wait for another subject story feel happy to read

Think it's postive for next story.

Waiting for ur new r sequal.

Thx for ur kind concerns Sirs .... Also getting few PMs for the next part of the story with a happy ending ....... but as I mentioned, I am not an expert in writing stories, so do not have any concept or theme in mind for a new story ..... also few suggested new themes for a new story which are not acceptable by me ....... just influenced by this story and pleased to reproduced it for ur entertainment with slight modification .......

[Blue Bull]

Please accept my appreciations Blue Bull. amazing writing. Wonderful choice of words. Not disgusting at all.  You involved me into reading this story. You rock Brother. Keep writing excellent stories. Well done!!!

Being newbie to writing field, do not have any nice concept/theme of mine ...... inviting same from u n other readers ..... yes also thinking the 2nd part of this thread but also not getting any suitable story line ..... problem is not in favour of unnatural, unethical sex(porn) stories ........

[Blue Bull]

You are absolutely right. Unnatural & Unehtical stuff should be avoided. Will share if i come across something. Cheers!!!

Thx dear ...