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[Rishabh1]

Dear Author, Flow of the narration and vocabulary have greatly improved compared to previous updates, so thank you for acting on the feedback and honestly very very few writers would do that and it takes great humility and commitment! well done.

Now coming to where we are with the story, I personally feel Valli is still shrouded in mystery, we dont know what's happening in her head so you need to get her talking more often and express what she is thinking in her words. I get it, it's psychological dilemma for large part and I believe Ranga rao character served it's purpose i.e. igniting the fire in valli (if it hasn't yet, may be with further 1-2 episodes with ranga rao) then with Ravi she truly finds her mating equal. It can be interesting whilst ranga rao keep igniting the deepest desires in valli and make her vulnerable, and ravi keep seizing small moments of tease and intrigue with atta and testing his luck and the growing sexual tension between them can be truly erotic especially when ravi learns the fact that valli was being devoured by albeit aged ranga rao and then valli learns that now ravi knows it too, this changes the dynamic completely and sexual tension will make it much more erotic and the eventual encounter between them two more realistic and satisfying. Then it's up to you if you want to bring in new characters to satiate the unquenchable fire in valli.

Thank you for all your efforts and all the best.