[Chandan]

Waiting for the next bro

[abcturbine]

Missing your writings....

[abcturbine]

Kindly update....

[KGB]

Amazing update! Dashing story!Thrilling writing!

[abcturbine]

Kindly continue the story.....

[abcturbine]

Waiting for continuation......

[rachitha]

aage bolo kay hoo raha hey
Continue this ......

[abcturbine]

waiting for continuation.......

[abcturbine]

Kahan chale gaye sablog.....

[hibrid1]

I will upadte soon... Kuch days me

[hibrid1]

Wait kriye thoda update coming soon

Waiting for continuation......

aage bolo kay hoo raha hey
Continue this ......

waiting for continuation.......

Kahan chale gaye sablog.....

[abcturbine]

Waiting bro desperately for continuation...
Please....

[momass]

update

[doctor101]

Update kab aayega

[sri7869]

Good story

[Amit Sir]

Waiting for the next update

[hibrid1]

update-5

Ab aage....
 
Archana apne kamre ke andar...

Archana ab jaise hi door kholne lagti hai door ke knob khul hi nhi paa rahi thi....

kyunki door ki knob bhut hi tight ho chuka tha... Udar niche  pusph arpit hone hi jaa rahi thi... Archana door ki knoob ko kholne ki puri koshish kar rahi thi.....

Par unki dono Hatho ki hatheliyon me tel lage hone wajah se unki hatheli knob se phisal rahi thi archana ki koshish bhi nakaam hoti jaa rahi thi.
Archana ko ye samaj nhi aa rahi thi ki wo door khole  to  khole kaise...
 
                            .... NIYATI ....
-"ha ha ha...meri pyaari archana...tu itni koshish kar bhi kyu rahi hai...
maine hi is darwaje ko band kar di hai....tumari raksha ke liye..jab tak ki ye samay nikal nhi jaata tu yahi kamre ke andar band  rahegi...
...Ha ha ha...aur yaad rakh tu ye punyakarmo ke raste nhi..balki..tuje sirf aur sirf jismani paapi nazayaz sambando ke raste jana hai..maze lutne aur lutwane ....ha....ha...ha.."

......................


Idhar pushp arpan ka samay ho chuka tha.... Aur Niche Archana ke saas aur sasur archana ki aane ka intezar kar rahe the...
 
Babaji -naam BALLU baba (phele khumbhar ka kaam kiya krta tha...ab gaw ka  ballu baba ban gya hai...AGE 59...  baba mante hai wo apne  andar bhut saare shaitani atamao ko kaid kar   rakhe hai... Aur un sabhi sahitani atmao ko gulam banaye hain...)

 


(BALLU-THE BABA)



(Baba JI) -" ...pusp arpan ka samay ho gaya hai.... Aplog pariwar ke sabhi sadasyagan samne aayein aur ishwar ko pushp arpan krien..."

 


Manjula devi -" thoda rukiye.... Baba jee.. hamari haveli ki nayi  bahu abhi tak aayi nhi hai....thoda sa rukhiye avi  bulwa lati hu...."
   


(Aj manjula devi  aisi saji thi jaisi.. badi maalkin khud hi nayi dulhan ho.... )

(Baba JI)-" thik hai.. putri... par hum ab jyada der intejar nhi kar sakte samay nikla jaa raha hai...."

Manjula devi- "jee baba jee.. jald hi hamari bahu aati hogi..."


Manjula devi (Bhanupratap ko  dire se )- "pata nhi ye bahuraani bhi....itni der kyun kar rahi hai...mai abhi shanta se bahu ko bulwa leti hu..'


Manjula devi - "shanta suno toh...."

  

Shanta-" jee badi malkin.....!!"



(Shanta  kuch soch rahi hai- kuch toh gadbadh hai,choti malkin archana...)


Manjula devi -" shanta jaldi se hamari bahu ko bula lao....pusp arpan ka samay ho chuka hai aur ab itejaar nhi kar sakte baba jee bole hain....jaaw jaldi...'

Shanta- "jee badi malkin...mein avi choti maalkin bula ke le aati hu.''

Aur phir Shanta jaldi jaldi upar Archana ki room ki traf jaldi jaldi sidiyaon se chad kr jaati hai..

 

Idhar samay ab nikalne hi wala hai hi hota hai...

Niche..Manjula devi aur Bhanupratap vayakul the.. apni bahu Archana ki aane ko lekar....


Manjula devi(muh banate huve)-" lagta h hamari bahu ko ye sab pasand nhi....jab bhi ghar me aisa ayojan hota ha... Usi samay bahu kuch na kuch ye bahana bana leti hai.."

 

Bhanupratap -"manjula tum chitna na kro...hamari bahu aa jayegi....sayad thodi time lag raha hoga usey.."



 



Manjula devi -" aeji samay nikalne baad aayegi kya wo..mein toh tang aagyi hu hamari  is bahuraani se.... Aap hi bataye baba jee ab kya hum aur  intejar kar sakte hain ki nahi...."




(Baba JI) - "nahi nahi...ab hm aur intejar nhi kar sakte yadi yeh uchit samay paar ho gayi tho phir se apsagun hoga is haveli ke liye..."


Manjula devi - "subh!  subh!...boliye baba jee....kuch upay batayei hume...hamari bahu ke liye..baba ji..bahu ko aane me pata nhi kitna der karegi...wo sajne sawarne mein hi samay laga di hai usey toh bas(phir kuch soch kar chup ho gyi).... 

  
..Ap hi batayie baba jee ham kya krien....."


(Baba JI) -" putri...yadi ye subh samay ke  saath pusp arpit nhi kiya gya... toh ye apsagun hoga yadi haveli ke sadayso ko anarth se bachna hai toh is vakt aap apni bahuraani ke bina upsasthi bhi ishwar ko pushp arpit kar sakti hain  lekin...bas baad me mai apko wo upay bata dunga apki bahuraani  ke liye .."

Manjula devi-" jee..thik hai..baba jee"


Iske baad pushp arpan hota hai.. Phir  manjula devi aur bhanupratap hi yash pardada ke photo frame ko ache se saja ke uspar mala laga kar phir se diwar par laga dete hain....

Ab manjula devi baba se us upay ke liye puchti hai...

Iske baad  baba ji apni  jhole se ek choti si kale rang ki kapde ki potli  nikal kar manjula devi   ko deta hai..

Babaji - ise Pakdo putri...

Manjula devi -"isme kya hai baba jee.."

Baba- putri ye tumari bahu Archana ke liye hai
 is haveli me kuch to gadbad hai..... jo tumari bahu ko prabhawit kar raha hai.... aur ye choti potli me rakhi huyi wo vastu hi tumari bahu ko buri saktiyon se bacha sakti hai...

[hibrid1]

Manjula devi ne woh kali kapde ki chhoti potli haath mein li aur use gaur se dekha
 
Uske chehre par chinta aur utsukta dono thi. Potli bilkul halki thi, jaise andar kuchh sookhi jadi-bootiyan ya koi chhota sa taweez ho.

Manjula devi(thoda ghabraate hue) - "Baba ji, yeh kya hai? Kaise yeh meri bahu ko buri shaktiyon se bachaayega? Aur yeh gadbad kya hai haveli mein? Pata nahi kyun, par  kal raat se hi Archana bilkul alag si lag rahi thi.. jaise koi uske andar ghus gaya ho."

Ballu Baba 
 (apni aankhon mein chamak laate hue, awaaz ko dheema aur gehra karte hue) - "Putri, yeh potli mein ek vishesh 'kaala til ka tel' hai, jise maine apne andar kaid shaitani aatmaon se hi taiyar karwaya hai. Is tel ko Archana ke maathe par lagao, aur uske pairon ke talvon par bhi thoda sa chhed do. Yeh tel uske sharir mein ghus kar us par chhaayi hui burai ko bahar nikaal dega... lekin yaad rakhna, yeh sirf bahar nikaalega nahi, balki us burai ko badla dega. Jo shakti us par haavi hai, woh ab Archana ke zariye hi apna mazaa legi... aur yeh haveli ke sabhi paap ko ujaagar karegi."

Manjula devi ki saansein tez ho gayi. Woh samajh rahi thi ki baat kuchh gehri hai, par woh apni bahu ko bachana chahti thi... ya shayad haveli ke raaz ko chhupana.

Manjula devi- "Theek hai baba ji... main abhi jaati hoon Archana ke kamre mein. Par agar yeh kaam na kare toh?


Ballu Baba (muskurate hue, daant chamkaate hue) - "Toh phir niyati apna kaam karegi, putri. Niyati... jo sab kuchh tay karti hai. Ab jao, samay kam hai. Pushp arpan toh ho gaya, ab asli puja shuru hone wali hai."

Manjula devi ne potli ko apni anchal mein chhupa liya aur tezi se seedhiyon ki taraf badhi. Upar pahunchte hi usne dekha ki Archana ka kamra band hai. Bahar se hi awaaz aayi thi pehle – hasi, woh ajeeb si hasi jo Archana ki nahi lag rahi thi.

Manjula ne darwaza khatkhataya.
 

Manjula devi- "Archana beta, meri bahuraani .. darwaza kholo! Pushp arpan ho gaya, sab intezaar kar rahe hain. Kya ho gaya tumhe? Itni der kyun?"

Andar se pehle toh chuppi rahi, phir wohi ajeeb awaaz aayi – ab yeh Archana ki awaaz thi, par usmein ek ajeeb si masti thi.

Archana(andar se, halki hasi ke saath) - "Saasuma... aap fikar mat karo. Main aa rahi hoon... bas thoda sa taiyaar ho rahi hoon. Aap niche jaiye, main abhi aati hoon."

Manjula ko kuchh galat laga. Archana ki awaaz mein woh purani sharam nahi thi – balki ek aag si thi, jaise woh ab control mein nahi thi.

Tabhi andar se woh hasi phir se goonji – "Ha ha ha... meri pyaari saasuma... ab darwaza kholne ki koshish mat karna. Yeh darwaza ab sirf tabhi khulega jab main chahti hoon. Aur main... abhi bahut masti mein hoon."

Manjula ne darwaza dhakka diya, par woh nahi khula. Usne potli kholi aur tel ki shishi nikali. Usne socha – shayad abhi yeh kaam karna padega.

Par tabhi niche se Ballu Baba ki awaaz aayi – zor se, jaise poori haveli sun sake.

Ballu Baba - "Putri Manjula! Jaldi aao! Yeh tel ko pehle mere paas laao... main ismein ek mantra daal deta hoon. Warna yeh asar nahi karega!"

Manjula wapas mud gayi, par uske man mein shak tha. Kya yeh baba sach mein madad kar raha tha... ya yeh sab haveli ke paapon ko aur gehra karne ka naya tareeka tha?

Idhar kamre mein Archana akeli thi. Uske haathon mein ab tel nahi tha – woh sab saaf ho chuka tha. Woh mirror ke saamne khadi thi, apne aap ko niharti hui. Uske chehre par ek ajeeb si muskaan thi.

Archana(apne aap se baat karte hue, dheemi awaaz mein) - "Niyati... tu sahi kehti hai. Ab yeh haveli meri hai... aur iske sabhi mard... mere. Karim chacha toh bas shuruaat the. Ab asli khel shuru hoga."



  

Woh dheere se apne lehenge ko upar uthane lagi, jaise koi naya irada ban raha ho...

Ab aage kya hoga? Kya Manjula tel leke wapas aayegi? Kya Ballu Baba ka asli chehra saamne aayega? Ya Archana ab poori tarah niyati ke haathon mein hai?

[hibrid1]

Ab aage...

Archana (mirror ke saamne khadi, apne lehenge ke pallu ko dheere se neeche girate hue, halki si hasi ke saath) - "Niyati... tu bilkul sahi keh rahi hai. Ab yeh haveli, yeh log... sab mera khel hain. Bas thoda sa intezaar... saasuma bhi aa rahi hongi ab tak."

Tabhi bahar se seedhiyon ki awaaz aayi. Manjula devi tezi se upar chadh rahi thi, haath mein woh kali potli tightly pakde hue. Uske chehre par ghabrahat thi, par saath hi ek ajeeb si jidd bhi – jaise woh apni bahu ko "bachaane" ke naam par kuchh bada karne ko taiyaar ho.

Manjula ne darwaze par zor se dastak di.
Manjula devi (sakht awaaz mein) - "Archana! Bahuraani! Ab bas karo yeh nautanki. Darwaza kholo jaldi se! Pushp arpan ho chuka, sab intezaar kar rahe hain. Aur yeh kya bakwaas kar rahi ho andar? Awaaz bilkul badal gayi hai tumhari!"

Andar se pehle chuppi, phir dheemi, madhur, lekin bilkul nangi si awaaz aayi.
Archana - "Aa rahi hoon... saasuma. Bas thodi der aur. Aap itni jaldi kyun kar rahi hain? Kya itna bura lag raha hai ki aapki bahuraani thodi si masti kar rahi hai?"

Manjula devi ka chehra laal ho gaya. Usne potli kholi, tel ki shishi nikali aur darwaze ke neeche se thoda sa tel andar ki taraf chhidka, jaise koi purana totka kar rahi ho.

Manjula devi (zor se) - "Bahuraani suno! Yeh tel laga lo maathe par. Baba ji ne kaha hai yeh tumhe buri nazar se bachayega. Jaldi se darwaza kholo, warna main yahin se chillati hoon poori haveli ko!"

Andar se ek lambi hasi goonji – ab yeh hasi bilkul Archana ki nahi thi. Yeh wohi gehri, shaitani hasi thi jo pehle darwaze ke knob ke saath aayi thi...

Niyati ki awaaz (archana ki muh se oar dire se taki manjula devi dire se sune aur confuse rahe)- "Saasuma... aap bahut pyari hain. Bahuraani ko itna pyaar... lekin yeh tel? Yeh toh mere liye nahi bana. Yeh toh aapke liye hai... taaki aap dekh sako jo hone wala hai. "

Manjula devi -pta nhi ye bahuraani,kya badbada rahi hai, kamre ke andar....

Lekin ab, Achanak darwaza khud hi dheere-dheere khulne laga. Knob ab tight nahi tha – jaise kisi ne andar se hi chhod diya ho.
Darwaza khulte hi Manjula devi ne dekha – Archana bilkul taiyaar khadi thi. 

 

Par yeh wahi Archana nahi thi jo kal tak sharmili dulhan thi. Uske baal khule the, aankhon mein ek aag si chamak rahi thi, aur lehenga itna neeche gira hua tha ki uski kamar aur navel saaf dikh rahe the. Haathon mein abhi bhi thoda sa tel laga hua tha – par woh tel usne apne sharir par malish karne ke liye istemal kiya tha, jaise koi tel malish kar rahi ho.

Archana (muskurate hue, dheere se paas aate hue) - "Saasuma... aap fikar mat karo. Main bilkul theek hoon. Bas... thoda sa naya roop dikhana chahti hoon aaj. Aapke saath, sasur ji ke saath... aur poori haveli ke saath."
Manjula devi peeche hati, uske haathon se shishi girne wali thi.

Manjula devi (ghabra kar) - "Yeh... yeh kya bakwas hai bahuraani? Tum... tum bilkul badal gayi ho. Yeh sab kya ho raha hai?"
Archana (ek kadam aur aage badhte hue, awaaz mein masti bhar kar) - "Niyati ho rahi hai, saasuma. Jo hona tha, woh ho raha hai. Ab aap niche chaliye... main bhi aa rahi hoon. Aaj pushp arpan nahi... asli puja hogi. Aur is baar... main khud pushp arpan karungi... sabke saamne."

Manjula devi ka munh khula reh gaya. Woh kuchh bol nahi paayi.

 

 Archana ne uske haath se tel ki shishi cheen li, usmein se thoda sa tel apni ungliyon par liya aur apne honthon par laga liya – jaise lipstick laga rahi ho"

Archana - "Chaliye saasuma... niche sab intezaar kar rahe hain. Aur aaj se... yeh haveli meri hai. Niyati ne yeh faisla kar diya hai."

Manjula devi ko ajib laga phir  socti huyi -kya ho gya hai, humari bahuraani ko, jarrur kisi buri sakti ne bahuraani ko apne prabav me kar leyi ho...

Ab,Woh dono seedhiyan utarne lagi.aage Archana, piche uski saas manjula devi,Niche Ballu Baba khada tha, muskurata hua, jaise sab kuchh jaanta ho. Bhanupratap aur baaki log bhi abhi tak wahi the, pushp arpan ke baad bhi.

Archana ne niche aate hi sabki taraf dekha – uski nazar sabse pehle Karim chacha par gayi,

 


jo kone mein khada tha, aankhen jhuki hui thi. Phir usne Ballu Baba ki taraf dekha aur muskurayi...

Karim (dire se, fusfusate huye) - "Baba ji... aapka tel bahut acha kaam kar raha hai. Ab asli khel shuru hoga haveli me"

Ballu Baba ne sirf muskuraya... aur dheere se bola – "Niyati apna rasta chun leti hai karim,Ab dekhte hain... kaun kiska gulam banta hai."

Rangin haveli ki Kahani ab aur gehri hone wali hai...NAYATI ka agla naya khel kya rachne wali hai
Ab aage kya hone wala hai? Archana ka agla kadam kya hoga?kya karim chacha aur ballu baba sath me mile huye hain??



Ballu Baba ka asli plan kya ho sakta hai? Ab Manjula devi kuchh karne ki koshish karegi??aur shanta kha gyi??

[Vissle]

Bhai tujhe kasam hai. Please aage update karte rehna. Please