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The story is superb and the narration is great but sometimes it feels like Riya is dumb and easy
You could have added half the sex scene in next part, I mean the scene where she greedly sucking . I felt like she is fully submitted to the minister like a slut
Again narration is really good but please don't move the story in a fast pace.
Pranitha Subhash is soo cute to portray as Riya
Just my thoughts I am not ruining your writing sense
Anyway good job waiting for the next update
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28-08-2023, 05:53 PM
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(28-08-2023, 02:58 PM)nerdblunder03 Wrote: The story is superb and the narration is great but sometimes it feels like Riya is dumb and easy
You could have added half the sex scene in next part, I mean the scene where she greedly sucking . I felt like she is fully submitted to the minister like a slut
Again narration is really good but please don't move the story in a fast pace.
Pranitha Subhash is soo cute to portray as Riya
Just my thoughts I am not ruining your writing sense
Anyway good job waiting for the next update
Thanks for your feedback dear ,
In this story I portray Riya as an intelligent ,But Riya had aim to join in security officer department , because of his father she can't achieve her goal , So Minister knew very well , So he played well ,
This story is not going to stop here ,This is only a 15 % of story, I will come with a new update ...
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(28-08-2023, 08:57 PM)sri7869 Wrote: Waiting for Update
Working for that.... Will update you soon...
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(29-08-2023, 01:16 PM)Kalyan143 Wrote: continue bro
Working for that....
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The crucial part of the story "A Chaste wife losing her chastity" has come. I was anxiously waiting for this part. From the title I knew it will happen, but the question was how is it going to happen ? Yes the answer has come
Anoop Nair Wrote:Riya screamed loudly as Minister entered his 10 inch lengthy and 3 inch fat in to Riya warm pussy hole ..
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Riya blasted... Another game was finished as minister dispatched a huge load of sperm inside...Riya ...
Riya was ...shocked by the sperm volume...Riya was drenched with sweet ,she was shining under the light ...Minister complete cummed inside her...
Minister got off from her.. his sperm still oozing out her pussy and then thighs,,finally on the bed sheet , Riya was sweating , her mangalsutra was highlighted in her naked body .
Yes ! It has happened !
Under the influence of alcohol Riya, a Pathni, chaste housewife, could not resist a man other than her husband opening her legs and ejaculating his semen deep into her womb.
Since this is the first time, her awkward feelings are understandable. After a few such events, she will get accustomed to it. Now the next suspense is, how her husband will take it ? Will she inform him this ? or not ? As it has already happened, there is nothing much he can do !
The story is progressing well Awaiting for the next update
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01-09-2023, 10:18 PM
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Next update will come on Sunday Evening ,
Any suggestion please post below ,,
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Amazing bro, fantastic one
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Awesome update waiting for the upcoming one
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Nice update.
If you want to get something, you have to lose something. Without even knowing whether she is capable of becoming a DSP, this bitch is eyeing for it. She has to open her legs to many men and finally everyone will betray her after using her thoroughly. Her husband will come to know the truth and throw her out of life and she will become a full time prostitute. Minister now has all her certificate and he can record her in his own home to blackmail.
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