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Super end.
I thought you will explain the reason for divorce. If siraj love his first wife, why should he divorce.
Did he have any child from first marriage
How many years since he divorced. His first wife married again? etc..
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She spoke about her divorce, it means she has made up her mind for it in future. Hope you can come out with another version.
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Now a days truth .
Actually happening in real life.
Good conclusion with heart touching ending.
Waiting for u next story
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WOW WHAT A STORY BRO REALLY AWESOME YOUR NARRATION IS JUST AMAZING WAITING FOR MORE STORIES FROM YOU PLEASE DONT DISAPPOINT US
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Thanks for completing the story.
Naina is more playful, teasing in this version. The real emotions was only from Siraj.
The last scene where they parted did not make a punch like original. Not sure it is because its second time read.
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There will be a thread of tension that would be running between the two main characters. i think it is missed somewhere. Naina behave more like a slut for the reason not known. Her plan to take his child and her explanation for giving her was appreciable.
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Lovely story.. well written and sensible conckusion though could have been continued and would have loved to read as wwell..nevertheless well done...plz keep writing.
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Super erotic story. North and south cannot meet always.