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I completely get your point...and if you remember i said i can be wrong... But what i felt was that bit more interactions were required in that scene...its just like serving a dosa in platter without preparing sambar...sambar enhances the taste of Dosa... description can be monotonous in slow burn treatment..what keeps engaging is a conversation through which emotions and desires are depicted for the readers...now coming to why i don't relate somehow is all the charectors are simply falling for Ravi married or unmarried...it seems husbands have no impact left in their life and as if they are looking for a guy like Charles Shobhraj who can be like a magnet and pull them out of their marital fidelity....i completely agree its quite possible but to create such a moment a strong background is required i can agree with one women geeting attracted but all your charectors walk in same path...

I know its your story and you have full right to create anything out of the charectors but if you just add few detail conversation and dailogues amongst the charectors then the background is established before action...its just a suggestion...

I won't intrude again please continue the way you think is best... your write-up is go very good i can't Stop my self from indulging into what i feel...

Thanks again for your efforts...i truly mean it...

Hi Raj

You are not intruding, you are giving your feelings. I can understand. You are just asking for some conversation there in that scene, right?

That's what I understood from your response. I can definitely add that. If it adds the required flavor by adding some conversation, I can definitely do that. I will update that scene later today.

Please let me know is that all you are asking for? Or anything else?

Thank you for your support. I don't want to disappoint you.


With warm regards

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Hi everyone

I see there are 3 of you gave me go ahead with this flow.

Two of you mentioned it's going too fast.

I will wait a little bit more before giving the next update to see which way to go.

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

While the story is great, I feel this part is bit rushed...
Nevertheless.. would like to go with your flow ..

Thank you very much your feedback. This is really helpful to shape up the story.

I will definitely keep it in mind as we continue with the story.


Warm regards

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

No no... don't have to re-write just make it dialogue based in upcoming episodes so that the scenes are more realistic and relatable...thanks for your consideration...i am truly touched by your gesture ?

Hi Raj

Thank you very much.  I will do my best in this area. 

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

While the story mainly about the priya didi and Ravi. I feel the main character kept aside for long time. I am eagerly waiting how priya moves after that incident. Atleast make a chat conversation between them. Since she was already little jealous. Bring Priya as early as possible to the story. So that story will be more interesting and hot.
Ofcourse current story going well. Let them cross the line and Ravi can get more experience to handle Priya didi on bed.

Hi Srinivasulu

Thank you for sharing your thoughts! You’re absolutely right that the story between Priya and Ravi is the main focus. 

Neetu and Sirisha were introduced to add some extra heat to the plot, which is why I’ve been speeding things up a bit between Neetu and Sirisha. 

However, I understand it might feel a bit rushed, so I’ll take a step back and figure out how to bring things back to even for Neetu and Sirisha's arc.  I will also bring the main story line soon to front line. 

I appreciate your patience, and I’m excited to get Priya and Ravi’s journey back on track soon. Stay tuned for what’s next!


-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Dear Shailu,

Your commitment towards the story and consistency in giving updates is highly appreciated.

From my point of view, the level of excitement and anticipation was much on the higher side while the story was exclusively focused on Priya. Particularly, the Auto journey was one of the best parts of the story.

However, the excitement graph went down once Srisha was introduced in the story. She is very much childish in nature, which is a turnoff. The portions of Srisha in the story were boring ones. Either sideline her completely or build a better character arc for her.

Neetu has the potential to deliver quality erotic adventures.

Kindly remember that Priya is the soul of this story.
I strongly believe that almost every regular reader of this story got attracted into this because of your narration style & well-designed personality & character of Priya. Please bring her back at the earliest.

Hi magneticpersonality

Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback. I truly appreciate your insights and the time you've taken to share them.

I’m really glad to hear that the parts focused on Priya, especially the auto journey, were a highlight for you. It’s always great to know what resonates with readers, and I’ll keep that in mind moving forward.

As for Sirisha and Neetu, they were introduced as diversions to build up the story’s tension and further ignite Priya’s arc. I understand your concern about Sirisha’s character feeling a bit childish, and I’ll definitely revisit her development to make sure she serves her purpose more effectively.

I also want to reassure you that Priya is absolutely going to return to center stage. She is, without a doubt, the soul of this story, and I am working on wrapping up Neetu and Sirisha's arcs as they were meant to be short-term distractions. Unfortunately, this led to a bit of a rush in their development, but I’m committed to balancing things better moving forward.

Priya will definitely be back soon and will take the lead role in the story again, so please stay tuned for that!

Thanks again for your valuable feedback and continued support. It means a lot to me as I work on refining the story.

Warm regards,

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Hi everyone,

I just wanted to give you all a quick update. 

Unfortunately, I’ve come down with a cold and cough, and I’m not feeling 100% at the moment. 

On top of that, we’ve been experiencing a lot of rain and bad weather here, which is making things a bit tougher to manage.


That being said, I’m doing my best to push through and keep providing updates as my health allows.

I really appreciate your patience and support during this time, and I ask that you bear with me as I recover. Your continued engagement means a lot, and I’m grateful to have such an understanding and supportive community!


Thanks again, and I’ll keep you all posted on any updates as soon as I’m able.

PS: For now, I will move forward with the story as I planned. The number of updates I can give may be less now, as I am really down.  I will still try my best.  

Take care,

Warm regards,

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

A Conflict of Desire and Duty


Neetu sat still on the couch, her fingers still grazing her lips,

The sensation of Ravi’s kiss lingering like a sweet ache.

She could still feel the burn of his touch on her skin,

And it made her pulse quicken again, even as her mind spun with guilt.

“What have I done?” she thought,

Her head swirling with confusion. “I kissed him. I actually kissed Ravi.”

Her fingers trembled slightly as they traced the outline of her lips.

The taste of him, sweet and warm, lingered, like a phantom she couldn’t chase away.

The kiss had been intense, yes—but the need it had awakened inside her was even more unsettling.

"It was just a kiss",  she tried to convince herself.

“Just a kiss.”  But that didn’t make the heat between them any less real.

That didn’t take away the fact that her body still burned, still longed for more.

Her mind jumped to Vamsi, to her husband, the man she loved, the man she had promised to be faithful to.

"I love him, don’t I?", she asked herself,

But the answer felt less certain now.

Vamsi was everything she had thought she needed, yet something had been missing.

A part of her that she had hidden away for so long, buried beneath the weight of her marriage, now demanded to be heard.

“But this?” The guilt swirled, but so did something else.

Something darker. “I’ve been pretending for so long that I don’t want this. But I do. I do want it.”

Her thoughts ran wild, each one crashing into the next.

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“Vamsi deserves better, though. He loves me. He trusts me. I can’t do this to him.”

“But... can I really keep pretending?” The question snaked its way into her thoughts, refusing to let go.

She shifted uncomfortably, the pressure of the decision closing in around her chest.

She couldn’t stop the images of Ravi from replaying in her mind,

The way he had kissed her, the way he made her feel alive.

How had one kiss undone so much? How had she let it happen?

"What if I’m not enough for him anymore?" That voice inside her,

The one that had been whispering for weeks now, grew louder.

"What if I’ve been starving for something more than Vamsi can give me?"

The guilt twisted deeper. She closed her eyes briefly,

But the image of Ravi, his eyes dark with desire, his lips soft against her skin, flashed behind her eyelids.

“I can’t keep lying to myself. I want this. I want him.”

She opened her eyes and glanced at Ravi.

He was sitting there, relaxed but with a hint of something in his expression—patience, maybe.

Or was it something else? “Hunger? Desire?”

It was the way he waited, giving her the space to decide.

The way he made it clear that he wasn’t rushing her, wasn’t forcing anything. It was... seductive.

“God, he’s dangerous.”

"But I’m just as dangerous, aren’t I?" 

She thought with a sudden spark of mischief in her eyes.

The thought caught her off guard, but it was there, as real as the heat pooling in her stomach.

“I’ve spent so much time fighting what I want. Maybe I should just let go. Let myself enjoy this for once.”

The guilt was still there, clawing at her heart,

But now there was something else, a rebellious streak, a little flicker of excitement.

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She met Ravi’s gaze. 


“What if I didn’t stop? What if I didn’t turn away this time?” The thought both thrilled and terrified her.

"What’s the worst that could happen?" Her internal voice, tinged with mischief, nudged her forward.

“Maybe I need to stop pretending to be the perfect wife. Maybe I need to embrace the fact that I’m not perfect. And that’s okay.”

Her chest tightened with anticipation.

She could feel the pull of this moment, the tension hanging in the air between them.

“I’ve made my choice. I’m not going back. But I’m also not just going to sit here and feel guilty about it. This... this is my chance to finally let go.”

She felt a smile tug at the corner of her lips.

It wasn’t a smile of guilt or regret.

It was a smile of something more daring.

A smile of anticipation.

“I can’t keep doing this, Ravi,” she whispered, her voice low,

But there was an unmistakable challenge in her tone. “But… I don’t want to stop either.”

Ravi’s expression softened, but there was still that glint of understanding in his eyes.

He didn’t speak.

He didn’t need to.

He could see it.

The shift in her.

The moment when she had made her decision.

Neetu shifted slightly on the couch, moving a little closer to him.

The space between them felt different now, less like a barrier and more like an invitation.

“This is just the beginning”, she thought, and the thrill of it made her pulse race.

"What am I waiting for?" Her inner voice was now laced with mischief and something else, something that felt dangerous.

She knew exactly what she wanted.

She didn’t need to think twice about it anymore.

The tension between them thickened.

She could feel it in the way her body responded, in the way her breath quickened.

“This is my choice”, she reminded herself,

 “and I’m not going to fight it any longer”.

-- oOo --

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[shailu4ever]

Hi Everyone

I’m really sorry, I’ve come down with a bad cold and can’t think straight today. I did write the next part, but it didn’t feel right, so I decided to scrap it for now.

I’ll get some rest and try again in the morning. Apologies for keeping you waiting, and thank you for your patience.


With warm regards

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Excellent update Shilu. I read with holding my breath. Excited for the next update. Thank you

Hi Srinivasulu

Thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. I'm so glad the update kept you hooked — your excitement genuinely motivates me to keep writing. Can’t wait to share the next part with you soon after I feel a bit better

Warm regards

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Get well soon, health comes first..once you are completely fit and fine then continue with the story....

Thank you Raj

But cold takes a week or so to fully recover. I don't think I need that much time.

I will write some updates today based on how I feel.

Once again

Thank you very much

Best

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Get well soon Shailu

Hi Srinivasulu

Thank you.


-- Shailu

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Neetu leaned back against the cushions


Her chest rising and falling with a mix of guilt

And something darker that she couldn’t ignore.

The weight of her decision,the one she’d made moments ago,

Still hung heavily in the air,

But now it was mingled with a strange kind of excitement.

She wasn’t just pretending anymore.

She wasn’t pretending that she didn’t want him.

She wasn’t pretending that the fire between them hadn’t been lit.

Ravi, still sitting beside her,

Seemed just as caught in the same web of unspoken words,

The same tension that neither of them dared to acknowledge.

Their eyes met briefly, both of them silent but fully aware of the shift in the atmosphere.

“Are you sure about this?” Ravi’s voice was low,

Cautious, yet there was an edge to it—a hint of desire that he couldn’t hide.

Neetu’s lips curved into a smile, small but defiant.

“I think I’m starting to be,” she replied softly, the words teasing but confident.

There it was again—the challenge in her voice.

It echoed through the space between them, daring him to keep playing, to keep pretending.

Neither of them was ready to admit how much they both wanted it.  

The tension hung thick between them

-- oOo --

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[shailu4ever]

The Next Step: A Deliberate Mess


Ravi’s pulse was still racing,

The lingering taste of Neetu on his lips a reminder of the electricity that sparked between them.

His fingers were still trembling,

An undeniable sign of how much the game had affected him.

The air around them felt charged with anticipation,

As though every small move they made was only intensifying what was slowly becoming something neither of them could ignore.

Neetu, however, seemed unbothered by the weight of the tension.

She sat there, relaxed yet poised, a slow, teasing smile on her lips.

She had that effect on him, her calm demeanor only made everything feel more intense,

As though she was in control of every moment, every second.

He could see the challenge still lingering in her eyes, though.

It was like a game to her, a dangerous, electrifying game that he had no intention of losing.

“You’re doing well, Ravi,” Neetu murmured,

Her voice smooth, almost languid as she reached for another small bite of Rasmalai.

Her lips parted slightly as she took the bite,

Her eyes never leaving his.

“But I think you can do better. You’re still not quite… thorough enough.”

Her words were playful, but they carried an unmistakable edge,


A challenge he couldn’t resist.

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[shailu4ever]

Ravi was determined to prove himself


To show her that he could master the game she had set in motion.

With a steady breath, Ravi picked up another piece of Rasmalai and dipped it into the syrup.

As he brought the spoon to her lips,

He couldn’t help but notice how the thick sweetness clung to the dessert,

The syrup glistening under the light, almost daring him to be bold.

Neetu opened her mouth to accept it, but this time, as she pulled the dessert into her mouth,

A larger drop of syrup fell, this time, deliberately, it seemed.

The syrup trailed down her chin, but instead of stopping there, it continued its path downward,

Falling onto her neck, slipping just beneath the edge of her saree pallu, near the low neckline of her blouse.

Just on the starting point of her cleavage.

Ravi’s eyes widened as he watched the syrup slowly pool near the delicate valley of her chest,

Just above the exposed skin where her blouse met the saree.

The sight was both an invitation and a challenge.

The syrup was now in a place that was almost impossible to reach without taking things further.

He could feel the heat rise in his body as he watched her,

Trying to keep his composure, but his body betrayed him, he wanted more.

Neetu, however, remained completely still.

She could see the conflict in his eyes

The desire building in him with each passing second.


But she was calm, as though she was waiting for him to make his move.

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“Well,” she said, her voice slow, almost purring with satisfaction,



“I think that’s more like it. But, you know… this is a tricky spot.”

Ravi swallowed hard, his fingers twitching,

As his gaze flicked to her neck and the syrup pooling against her skin.

His thoughts raced. How do I clean this properly?

Neetu tilted her head slightly, a knowing glint in her eyes.

She seemed to sense his hesitation, and her smile widened, the challenge clear.

“You’re going to have to be more thorough this time, Ravi,” she said softly,

Her voice teasing but also coaxing him into action.

“You’ll have to remove the pallu to get close enough, or… well, you might not clean it properly.”

Ravi looked at her, his breath catching in his throat.

He had never been so captivated by a simple gesture before.

The way she just casually mentioned removing her pallu made his body react in ways he hadn’t expected.

He could feel the heat of the moment pulsing between them.

But this was practice, wasn’t it? And practice was important.

Neetu leaned back slightly,

Almost giving him an unspoken permission to move forward,

The glint in her eyes daring him to take the next step.

“Go on,” she whispered. “I think you know what you need to do.”

Her voice barely audible. “It’s okay. I’m not stopping you.”

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[shailu4ever]

Nice one. Waiting for the final action

Hi Srinivasulu


Thank you so much! Glad you’re enjoying it. Next updates are on their way, hope they live up to your expectations!

-- Shailu

[shailu4ever]

Ravi didn’t need further encouragement.


His hands, now steady but trembling with anticipation, reached for the edge of her pallu,

His fingers grazing the soft fabric as he began to pull it away from her shoulder.

The slow, deliberate movement of the fabric sliding off her shoulder made his heart race.

Neetu (smirking):
“Oh no... looks like the student has to get his hands dirty now.”


Ravi (light chuckle):
“Pretty sure this wasn’t in the syllabus.”


Neetu (tilting her head slightly):
“It’s called advanced practice. Only for those who can keep their nerves... and hands steady.”


Ravi (his fingers brushing the fabric):
“I’m steady. Just... cautious. Don’t want to fail the final exam.”


Neetu (voice smooth, teasing):
“Failing this kind of exam? That would be... messy. But maybe I’ll let you retake it.”


Ravi (smiling as the pallu slides off her shoulder):
“You make it sound like a punishment.”


Neetu (leaning in slightly):
“Oh, it can be... depending on how thorough you are.”


As Ravi carefully pulled the pallu from Neetu's shoulder,

The fabric glided off with deliberate slowness, revealing more of her skin.

The soft, shimmering fabric of the saree pooled at her side,

Leaving her exposed in a way that felt both intimate and bold.

She remained still, watching him with a knowing smile,

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