Adultery The Rural Posting: Shipra's ordeal.

[Suraj76626]

Dear Author, 
Kudos to your writing skills. The intriguing twists and thoughtfulness in the story shows the effort you've put into it. 
The narrative is engaging, and you clearly have the potential to make this story an epic.

However, I have a few suggestions & viewpoints that I hope you’ll consider positively:
1(a) In the first sex episode, I think you went overboard.  For instance, letting that guy Atul smooch Shipra was understandable but taking Shipra to bedroom just because he shared the same name as her husband seemed a bit far-fetched. Given Shipra's level of intoxication, this scenario felt somewhat implausible. It could have been avoided. 

1(b) Later, Shipra’s behavior of rubbing her pussy while Pataode was fucking Namrata seemed out of character. It gave an idea that Shipra after all is not that hard to break, which gives disappointment and gives a feeling that Shipra would open her legs if things go even a bit raunchy in future. Thankfully her Mangal sutra saved her. That was actually innovative, I must say


2. In the beginning, Shipra and Atul were portrayed as a deeply connected couple, which was central to the story. Now, it appears that their relationship is losing its authenticity, as if their love is fading or was never truly there. This shift is disappointing and makes their earlier bond seem less credible. It has started sounding as if they both hide their true feelings from each other which is not good.
Shipra was shown to be a mature and understanding woman but after confronting with Namrata, she like a naïve dumb person got so easily manipulated that she actually feels that Atul tries to control her.

Atul on the other hand, just because Shipra didn't answer his phone calls or message like an immature will surely heighten seeds of suspicion on her wife. Moreover, Shipra now would be unavailable for the weekend and this surely would fuel Atul's suspicion and will eventually lead to some fight which will further worsen the relationship of husband and wife.
Shipra assuming lack of support from husband would eventually make her weak and it would lead to break her resolve. This all looks so predictable & thus boring, if it happens this way.

I would request author to avoid creation of unnecessary tension and bitterness between Atul and Shipra. Their love is the core essence of the story, and maintaining a strong, genuine connection between them would be more compelling.
Real fun would be if the couple is actually in love and still Patode tries to woo Shipra in some way.


Creating rifts between a couple may not add excitement to the story. Instead, focusing on the genuine emotions and the depth of the couple's relationship will enhance the overall appeal and keep readers more engaged.

The plot is strong and the story is logically structured. It just doesn't revolve around sex. The more emotional it will be, the more readers will get attached to it.

Thanks

Thanks man,  I'll reply to you pointwise. Short of time this time around.
Appreciate your suggestions.