24-02-2021, 02:23 PM
(23-02-2021, 10:19 PM)Lollobionda Wrote: Hi Manasi,
I'm now at chapter 34 and have to conclude (after reading the other versions by
other authors) that your version is more or less a pschyanalysis.
The explanations are much too long and also dry.
I have the feeling that you (perhaps from the subconscious and unintentionally!)
When explaining the relationship between Kavita-Manu-Prem-Jaya-Gajra and the
events general, indirectly looking for a justification.
That would be with the visit of Jaya, the long conversations and the attempt Kavita
everything to pay back, what she did to Manu before quite clearly.
I think that one should not fight injustice with another injustice and clear.
In the end, it is about a partnership and about mutual love. (even if this love is a little unconventional !)
Let the events in this relationship a little free run WITHOUT the long psychoanalysis but more love and erotic.
A little cuckolding WITHOUT humiliation and disrespect will do the story good and make
it more charming and interesting...
I look forward to the coming chapters.
Greetings from Berlin - Germany
Lollobionda
Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator (free version)
Your interest in Indian erotic literature is commendable.
India is a diversified country with vast socio-cultural differences across the length and breadth of the country. Western influence have its effect on the lives of Indians. The so called educated better earning Indians are in a torrid confluence of western society and old native values. Being an Indian, i am sometimes confused on my values and priorities. Being aligned to a different society, it may be very difficult for you to understand the psychological complicity an average Indian is faced now-a-days. I appreciate your willingness to understand and contribute.
We may interact more once you are through.