[Sumit1234]

Bro iss kahani AAP Jese chala rahe bhut kabile tarif h par ISS bacche ko lekker jo behrahmi hai wo bhut galat h so please iss kahani me se baccha kiredaar hata ho please

[Baban]

Bro iss kahani AAP Jese chala rahe bhut kabile tarif h par ISS bacche ko lekker jo behrahmi hai wo bhut galat h so please iss kahani me se baccha kiredaar hata ho please

Brother... aap apni jagah pe bilkul sahi ho. Lekin iss story se reality bhi juri hai. Main to ek kahaani likh raha hu lekin vaastabik zindagi to issebhi zyada kathor aur behrahem hoti hai. Maa- baap apne hi baccho ko kachre mein fek deta hai, ladki hine par mar dalte hain,  paraye mard ke sath maa ko dekh lene par jaan jati hai masoom zindagi ki. Aise kitne news hum padte hai. Kyun hai na? 

Is story ko ek erotic story ki tarah hi enjoy kare. Feel the moment. 

[rabiakhan338]

very nice dear

[Baban]

Naya erotic update kaisa lag raha hai?

[obsessed]

Absolutely erotic story.Your writing is extremely exciting and dick raising.

[Logan555]

Story ka plot jabardast chuna hai, Anupama ka charectar bhi badiya hai aur raka ki entry bhi achhi dikhai gai but kuchh kumi dikhi jinme sudhar ki zarurat hai. If u ask my suggetion.
1- Story me pics ki absence hai pics story ko jada kamuk real aur readers se jada connect bana dete hai. Kai baar readers pics dekhkar hi story ki taraf akarshit ho jate hai. Story ke main charectars ko bhi pics ke madhyam se ek face diya ja sakta hai isse bhi readers un kirdaar se jada relate kar leta hai.
2- Raka ghar ka main seciurty incharge hai aur usne jo bhi kara wo bina kisi plan ke kara aur bachhe ko marne ja raha tha bina kisi plan ke. Agar ghar me bachhe ka murder hota to pehla sawal security incharge se hota. To thoda preplan hona zaroori tha. Sex scene dene ki jaldi me Raka ke kirdaar ko khulne ka mauka kum mila. Aur story ke jo main jamidaar hai unke baare me bhi jada nahi bataya gaya.
3- Sabse jada weakpole Anupama ke kirdaar me laga ki usne badi jaldi samarpan kar diya. Pehle use ek achhi maa dikhaya gaya jo apne bachhe ko batane ke liye sex karne ko tayar ho gai aur agle hi page jab uske saamne uske bachhe ko maarne ki baat kari ja rahi hai to bajae uspar kuch kehne ke wo keh rahi hai aur zor se andar dalo aaahhh aaahhhh,  ye thoda sex ki jaldbaazi ho gai. Agar waha par sex scene ki jagah ek bang scene hota to jada realistic hota par waha par anupama ka maza lena thoda galat laga. Ya to anupama ko ek charectarless shatir aurat ke roop me pesh karna tha jise apne bachhe ki bhi parwah nahi.

Bhai agar tum sex scene ke hisab se dekho to sahi hai par agar story ke hisab se dekho to thoda jaldbaazi hai.
Maine har update padkar comment kara hai jo mujhe sahi laga i hope u taking it positively.

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[Logan555]

U gave me an awosome pic of my id LOGAN 555 isliye maine bhi net par kafi search karne ke baad tunhari story ke do main charectar Anupama aur Raka ke liye do face chune. Agar tumhe achhe lage than use them in ur story.

[Baban]

Story ka plot jabardast chuna hai, Anupama ka charectar bhi badiya hai aur raka ki entry bhi achhi dikhai gai but kuchh kumi dikhi jinme sudhar ki zarurat hai. If u ask my suggetion.
1- Story me pics ki absence hai pics story ko jada kamuk real aur readers se jada connect bana dete hai. Kai baar readers pics dekhkar hi story ki taraf akarshit ho jate hai. Story ke main charectars ko bhi pics ke madhyam se ek face diya ja sakta hai isse bhi readers un kirdaar se jada relate kar leta hai.
2- Raka ghar ka main seciurty incharge hai aur usne jo bhi kara wo bina kisi plan ke kara aur bachhe ko marne ja raha tha bina kisi plan ke. Agar ghar me bachhe ka murder hota to pehla sawal security incharge se hota. To thoda preplan hona zaroori tha. Sex scene dene ki jaldi me Raka ke kirdaar ko khulne ka mauka kum mila. Aur story ke jo main jamidaar hai unke baare me bhi jada nahi bataya gaya.
3- Sabse jada weakpole Anupama ke kirdaar me laga ki usne badi jaldi samarpan kar diya. Pehle use ek achhi maa dikhaya gaya jo apne bachhe ko batane ke liye sex karne ko tayar ho gai aur agle hi page jab uske saamne uske bachhe ko maarne ki baat kari ja rahi hai to bajae uspar kuch kehne ke wo keh rahi hai aur zor se andar dalo aaahhh aaahhhh,  ye thoda sex ki jaldbaazi ho gai. Agar waha par sex scene ki jagah ek bang scene hota to jada realistic hota par waha par anupama ka maza lena thoda galat laga. Ya to anupama ko ek charectarless shatir aurat ke roop me pesh karna tha jise apne bachhe ki bhi parwah nahi.

Bhai agar tum sex scene ke hisab se dekho to sahi hai par agar story ke hisab se dekho to thoda jaldbaazi hai.
Maine har update padkar comment kara hai jo mujhe sahi laga i hope u taking it positively.

                                         LOGAN

Logan bhaii aap ki bat ekdum barabar hai lekin Agar main reality ko jada agey rakhta  bang ko hawas mein change hone mein bahut waqt lag jati.... Raka keliye Anupama kae dil mein kaam, vasna jagne mein bahut samai chala jata plus story bang ke chakkar mein boring bhi ho sakta tha. Maine is story ko jitna kamuk ho sake utna karne ki koshish ki hai... reality ko zyada present jan bujhke nahi kiya. 

Doosra Raka itna bhi bewakoof nahi hai ke woh apne pairon pe kudali marde..... woh chintu ki maa ko apne hawas ke jaal mein pehle poori tarha fasaega aur phir agey kya hoga janne ke liye zarur story se jure rahe.... 

 

Aapka comnents ke liye dil se shukriya..... thank u... 

[Baban]

Doston....

[Avishek]

Ufffff.....what a hot update....
What a kinky situation.....when Anupama says - is saley baccheko hum dono milkar darayenge...when she fucking the man who wanted to kill her son and join him and she calls her son- saaley its so much erotic and kinky......give more erotic uodates....

Chintu to gayaaa

[vat69addict]

zabarrrrdast update

[obsessed]

This story is really very hot and erotic! You are very expert of how to make a story extremely hot.keep going bro.

[Fucker134]

Bhai anupama ko raka ke bache ki maa banao jisase dono me hawas ke alawa kuch pyar bhi dikhe

[Baban]

This story is really very hot and erotic! You are very expert of how to make a story  extremely hot.keep going bro.

THANK YOU VERY MUCH OBSESSED ....... FOR LIKING MY STORY.  ISI TARAH MERE STORY SE JURE REHE AAP. 

[Baban]

zabarrrrdast update

Thank you vat69addict

[Baban]

[Baban]

Ufffff.....what a hot update....
What a kinky situation.....when Anupama says - is saley baccheko hum dono milkar darayenge...when she fucking the man who wanted to kill her son and join him and she calls her son- saaley its so much erotic and kinky......give more erotic uodates....

Chintu to gayaaa

Thank you very much for liking my story.  Isi tarah story se jure rehe. 

[vat69addict]

eagerly waiting for next update

[ramumargaya]

@baban: awesome story brother.

Ek scene dhyan me aa raha hai. Mai chahta hu ki tum oose please include karo apni story me.

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Raka aur anupama ki ghamasan chudai ki awaaz se chitu jaag jata hai. Chintu dekhta hai ki raka ka lund uski maa ki choot me hai.
ye dekh ke wo dar jaata hai.

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anupama:   Chintu beta daro mat. bhale hi raka ne mujhe nanga karne me safal ho gaya ho par maine raka ke lund ko apni choot me pakad rakha hai. ab wo tumhe maar nahi payenge.

Please also include sexy sasu of anupama and anupama's sister and mother.

[Baban]

@baban: awesome story brother.

Ek scene dhyan me aa raha hai. Mai chahta hu ki tum oose please include karo apni story me.

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Raka aur anupama ki ghamasan chudai ki awaaz se chitu jaag jata hai. Chintu dekhta hai ki raka ka lund uski maa ki choot me hai.
ye dekh ke wo dar jaata hai.

tab
anupama:   Chintu beta daro mat. bhale hi raka ne mujhe nanga karne me safal ho gaya ho par maine raka ke lund ko apni choot me pakad rakha hai. ab wo tumhe maar nahi payenge.

Please also include sexy sasu of anupama and anupama's sister and mother.

Wow! Thank you. Your thought/imagination  is superb. Main bhi aisa ek scene soch raha tha. Yeh scene aur yeh dialogue main zarur include karunga. 
Isi tarah mere story se jure rehe aap. Aur agar aur koi hot scene aapke deemag main aaye to please comment karke batana.