[Farz@123]

Yes focus on mom's character...... It will be best

[xfirefox]

so now 2 guys are hot for bechaari Madhurima.

when the family went for a temple visit, and Rohan's jiju was looking at his mother-in-law secret or admiring her beauty in that Goddamn purple saree, madhurima must have known that she was being admired by men around her, she can't be that naive.

good going

[The Great One]

Nice story please update the upcoming story parts soon

[LovePookie]

extrodinary

[Fing fing]

Mummy have already tested rambo guy dick inside her.Rambo guy will definitely  win her .update next part!!

[garamrohan]

Thanks a lot for your comments Henry, Farz, lovepookie, firefox, the great one, and fing fing.

I can see the excitement building. I will post next sizzling updates on Saturday.

[dhaval shah]

your writing skills are superb bro.... but if it is possible please dont involve jiju in all of this... it will make it insect.... if possible involve didi with rambo guy

[Featherguy]

Story is really hot and keep it up.I really fantasized by reading kinky erotic comment section in this story particularly suggestion of marriage of your mom with rambo guy. Why not make a situation where your mummy denies marriage but due to family pressure she says yes.If rambo guy marries your mummy then,my god-It is sure you and your family will lose your mom forever




I feel your mummy needs a sex machine. With rambo guy as new partner, he might fuck your mummy 10 times everyday

[garamrohan]

Thanks Dhaval and Featherguy for your replies. Happy to know you liked the story.

Many readers want to see rambo guy completely take over mummy, and that is understandable too, but this is going to be long story and not so straightforward, so stay tuned. The story till now was setting up the stage, now the story will spice up and will become twisted at times. You will like it definitely.

Dhaval bhai, I don't think relationship with in law in an incest, these are known affairs in Indian society (more common is SIL-BIL and FIL-DIL) you can see in crime shows. So yeah it's taboo, like every illicit affair, but not incest. The story line demands Jijis involvement and you will understand why so going ahead.

On the other hand, although Didi is not explicitly involved yet, she will play a pivotal role in how things will take turn eventually.

Thanks for reading. Next update will be on Saturday.

[The_Writer]

Bravo Rohan! Very well written updates so far.  The story is moving at a proper pace, and that’s so cool. Hope it’s all to set up the stage. 

No need to hurry up with the “Actions”. You’re doing well… keep it up. I know with the continuity of this story, you (& readers) might come up with various ideas/kinks. At that time, it would be far better to stick with the initial idea (plan) you had when starting this story. This story definitely has the potential to become something different, rather than be another ‘bang bang’ story.

The only suggestion I would like to make here is that the dialogues would feel more realistic if you wrote them in Marathi alongside the English. (One of them always in bracket, of course.)

But do this only if you have time, otherwise it's good only in English also. 

Once again, keep it up. Keep writing and surprising us. 

[Mukul@99]

Your writing voice it’s engaging and approachable. Think this plot really works because of how well you’ve paced the story. Your writing is so good because you always know the right word for the right moment. Love the way you structured.

[garamrohan]

Bravo Rohan! Very well written updates so far.  The story is moving at a proper pace, and that’s so cool. Hope it’s all to set up the stage. 

No need to hurry up with the “Actions”. You’re doing well… keep it up. I know with the continuity of this story, you (& readers) might come up with various ideas/kinks. At that time, it would be far better to stick with the initial idea (plan) you had when starting this story. This story definitely has the potential to become something different, rather than be another ‘bang bang’ story.

The only suggestion I would like to make here is that the dialogues would feel more realistic if you wrote them in Marathi alongside the English. (One of them always in bracket, of course.)

But do this only if you have time, otherwise it's good only in English also. 

Once again, keep it up. Keep writing and surprising us. 

Thank you The_Writer bro for the comment, and yeah, as always I have some plan in head how the story will progress and end, so will try to incorporate suggestions from you readers ensuring the initial structure remains intact.

Hey and your suggestion to include Marathi dialogs surprised me. I personally enjoy different languages, dialects and cultures and try to bring that element in stories if possible. I have done that in The Artist Within story where a Bengali family was involved. 

But I am not sure if people do really appreciate reading dialogues in a non-hindi regional language, but I can definitely give it a try. 

By the way, as far as I remember, I never once mentioned this is happening in Maharashtra. What made you think its a story of a Marathi family?

[garamrohan]

Your writing voice it’s engaging and approachable. Think this plot really works because of how well you’ve paced the story. Your writing is so good because you always know the right word for the right moment. Love the way you structured.

Thanks Mukul for taking time out to convey your thoughts and boosting morale. stay tuned cheers!

[The_Writer]

By the way, as far as I remember, I never once mentioned this is happening in Maharashtra. What made you think its a story of a Marathi family?

I don't know. I guess I just assumed that.  

(Btw, I would love to think of it as a story of a Marathi Family.)

(One of the main reasons is that you present the mentality and emotions of Marathi families and especially women in a very excellent manner to the readers.)

[Waseem990]

next update waiting

[garamrohan]

Mummy’s eyes were wet, and why won’t? Her only daughter was leaving for her hometown and the small farewell felt heavier than any festival gathering. 
Yet my mind was elsewhere.

Jiju had beaten that Rambo guy and driven him away from our neighborhood. In a way, he had saved our family from a disaster. But something from that morning kept troubling me. Why had he kept glancing inside the room even though he knew mummy was changing? Was that normal?

Or was I overthinking?

Just a few days ago I had convinced myself that the Rambo guy might not be entirely evil; that what happened that day was simply the madness of the moment. 
Then why was I doubting my own Jiju?

(“Chal pat pat. Kaay vichar kartoyas?”papa panicked.) 
“Common.. Hurry up.. What are you lost at?” papa panicked.

And so Di chuckled.

“Are you all right, Rohan babu. You have been looking nervous since morning. Isn’t it Sudhir?” she asked and bit her tongue for she called Jiju by his name in front of papa.

Jiju was but lost into his own thoughts and startled by her questions and just nodded; I doubt if he had heard anything. He smiled at me nervously, and so did I.

We were walking, papa ahead of all, followed by me, who was carrying a big suitcase, and following us were Di, and then Jiju who was holding one bag. While we were crossing the public toilet next to one of the shops where the rambo guy used to stay, I looked at that side through the corner of the eyes, and it was empty. 

Even if he was there, it wouldn’t have mattered, he hadn’t and won’t dare to come to our area since the beating he had received, I believed. My hands had gone numb from the suitcase, so I stopped and set it down for a moment. As I shook my arms loose, I sensed movement; someone slipping away quickly - as if on a secret mission. 

I turned to that side, but couldn’t confirm anything and my heart started pumping faster, for movement I felt had happened towards the side of the shops from where we have walked; and it reminded me of the dawn few days back when I had observed rambo guy standing there; and thereafter marched following my mummy; eventually corrupting her, looting her chastity for quench of his barbaric lust. 

“What happened?” Di yelled, standing several feet next to me.

“Hurry up. They will miss the train.” papa yelled.

I was standing like a statue, confused, not sure what was happening and how to handle it now.

And papa rushed furiously to me and snatched the bag from me, “Ghari ja,” (“Go home,”) he almost yelled at me and Di and Jiju also waved me good bye there only and asked me to go and rest. As they hurriedly disappeared in the direction of the station, I started making sense of what I just observed. Suddenly a possibility sparked in my head and I ran towards my house taking the shortcut road by going to the godown lines.

[garamrohan]

Two more and bigger updates are coming tomorrow. Thanks.

[The Great One]

Short update, I hope tomorrow's next updates would be bigger

[Waseem990]

bro Big update please

[Fing fing]

update???