Adultery Love Sex And War Part 1 : Age Of Darkness

[Harry Jordan]

Letter to My new writer friend harry 


Always remember "They will hate they will differ but they can't ignore"

Regards 
Ep 

I appreciate your nice words and vice versa. But I will always welcome criticism as long as its not over the line or uncomfortalbe. And for me , in this story , not a single reader have overstepped it , they respected my work and voiced their constructive criticism in their words. 


And I welcome all of them , because I would like to hear what their perspectives are or how they envision their mind when they read my story. But I will make it very clear right now , readers never influence my story because I have already completed the base plot of part 1. Even while typing now , I am in brink of completing part 2 of this saga , the conclusion of it all. The reason I take time is because I want to polish the story before bringing it to you which is why I do weekly updates. So you can relax if your concern is readers are influencing my story because I already know where the story will go and how it will end. 


So I acknowledge your concern , but I can assure you , you don't have to worry about others influencing me.


Also , just to iterate just my opinion. I am not against Cuckolding , matter of fact majority of the story I love in this site is basically that. But the reason I am sharing this story here is simply because I myself am fed up off many stories that follow this theme often end up ruining the character that is into that kink , turning a kink lifestyle into a masochist porn. That is something I wholeheartedly do not prefer , my story is not a revolution of sort to push some "narrative" or point fingers at someone. Its purely entertainment , hell , entertainment to jerk off for that matter!! LOL!


I also acknowledge that all of my readers will like my characters , and its OK. I understnad , this is after all a story , and stories can be subjective. But I must encourage everyone , if there is any criticism , it should be pointed against me. Not other's opinions. 


Regardless , I hope all of you continue enjoying the story and at the end of the day that is what actually matters


  PROMISING YOU A WONDERFUL JOURNEY AHEAD BY YOURS TRULY

                               HARRY JORDAN 

[Harry Jordan]

When some one writes an opinion on a story it means they like the story.

I guess this will be my last comment on this story...Have a peaceful time with the rest of the story.

~RCF

Don't bother with inconveniences. At the end of the day , I acknowledge your opinions and criticism and that is all that matters here. Ignore the words that bother you and enjoy the words that captivate you.

Your and every reader's opinion matter to me. I acknowledge it , appreciate it and take it with the respect it deserves. Don't let others ruin your fun. If you enjoy the story , simply enjoy it.

[Akashkhan0672]

Love u boss .. it's well vry gd going... Like alws I am fan of hemants.. don't listen RCF haha
He just want to see hemants is a looser ..he alws want to so hemants is a coockles sissy type .. but u had vry gd work on our hero hemants..every story has the hero heroin villain.. just like it .. of crs sonarika is having this pain bcz of her cheating..as well as Hemant also suffering... But we love to see ,
Now Hemant wil show his version of Michele king ...and sonarika will see all the she is been wrong about hemant.. Hemant will understand what went wrong... let's see what is going on writer head ..

Deep in my heart alws want that sonarika and hemant will be together again ... Dnt know how...but I wish ...love you boss ...

[DeanWinchester00007]

Well , I wanted to write this comment earlier , but i refrained after reading Harry's explanation about the story . I got the gist of the story , My focus was too much on Sex part not on the characters . The Sex or affairs was an element of the story . Now i consider the sex things as minor element . 

I said this before , I said this again . HEMANT IS 100% innocent here . 

Hemant was Hemant before he met sona , Hemant was Hemant when they met and dated , Hemant was Hemant when they got married . Why the expectation that he is gonna change . She made the choice and Hemant also made the choice . 

They met each other when they were most vulnerable , they helped each other , they grew together and Made a family , TOGETHER . 

Things got complicated . Sona cheated on Hemant not because She was not happy with her marriage , but because VIKRAM was the kind of men she always dreamt of . Adding to the manipulation and the kind of atmosphere she works in ( which i refused earlier but for the sake of the story ) . IF it was Michael King instead of Vikram , She would have fucked him too. Sona here does not loved VIKRAM , For me she loves those kind of Men ( The over sexual stuff messed up this narrative , because its hard to believe after reading her encounter with VIKRAM vs Her Love making with Hemant , That she loves the latter more, But its an Erotica lol ). She thinks Hemant was not Ideal man for her , but the Man she needed but never realizes .  But now she is gonna realize what she has lost . That is why the guilt and pain . if we look She is not losing anything . She can still get her kid and Anjali will understand her, a good amount of money , And with VIKRAM she will get her life back on track and Can have children together (YUCK) , Every damn thing that she did with Hemant and things she did not do . Yes , the guilt of cheating a good man will always be with her but what she will gain simply out weigh what she will lost . But the guilt is because She is loosing Hemant . 

Yes , Earlier my comment was complete opposite . But The situation was not this bad , Hemant was still in her life . All things she said , all the things she confessed , she did because HEMANT was still in her life . Present Sona is Sona because of HEMANT , without him , The we will have different Sona . I would not be surprise if VIKRAM rejects her later . lol . All the things He loves about her , Apart from her wife's resemblance is because of HEMANT . Once he gone , those things will be gone with him too . 

Before I was against the Idea of Sona never loved Hemant , I accused the writer , simply because of written material , but failed to understand the explanation given by him in comments . That is why my perspective got changed . 

VIKRAM only loves present SONA . Present Sona is Sona because of Hemant . He is the reason behind her success or what ever she achieved in his life . Same for Hemant too . 

So why cheating ? Harry explained very well in comments . I also want to add Because Now they feel they dont need each other , They are stable , They think they Can survive without each other . 

Sona is not to be blamed , But A wife is getting Blamed here , She rightfully deserves to. A husband should not be blamed here . 

There is no justification for cheating , People cheat not because they are unhappy and or they feel ignored , They cheat because they can and want to . Its simple as that . Sona wanted too and she did . Now she is facing the consequences , Its only natural . The whole divorce plot is natural progression any man or women had done the same , Irrespective of Reason , Or explanation why they cheat . Its not gonna make any difference . 

What do you expect ? Sona's confessing that The whole reason i cheated because You were weak / You were not giving me enough attention / No sex for months / No attention on family . Okay accepted . So after She fucked Vikram , Did all the problems vanish ? Her life got better ? While she had  having her fun , Hemant was working for his family . He was not having fun , He was not having affair , He told everything to her , Every Plan. Why he was away , She knew everything . Never objected and Never took any action . Never fought him  . When she was getting fucked in Bali , He was  taking care of their family . So its not justify her action . So its much better to just accept that she cheated because she was tempted by Him , Or He reminds of him her past . An honest confession without blaming him or her marriage or her present life . 

A cheating is itself a confession/statement/Reason everything . 

Getting ignored , No sex , or Sexless marriage , No attention , even if we take it to extreme , like a partner completely ghosting his family , Still fell short for any justification for Cheating . There are lots of other way to deal which results in positive out come . Cheating or betrayal makes matter worst . People will say getting fucked makes them to escape reality , Yes but Tomorrow in morning everything will be same . Yes it will energize you , makes you feel wanted , but still in Gutter . Plus not you are cheater too . 
No matter what you do it will give advantage to other partner even if they are abusive partner . That is how its work . and 

This is same argument given by Pseudo Feminist . And calling something Pseudo Feminist does not make one Anti- Feminism . ( I am not being Political here , any one who feel any offend , I apologize )  

Two wrongs do not make it wright  . Even if Hemant 100% wrong here , Still not justify the action or the reasoning or anything for Sona Cheating . Hemant incompetence could have also be resulted in Divorce / Separation / Ugly Fight / Etc etc but Her fucking VIkram again and again and again could  never be the one . 

The Chastity/Faithfulness/Trust should not come with list of chores one should in order to expect it from other partner . This is not Gender Specific , This is General one . Husband , wife , Man , women . 

Oh you ignored me , Now i am going to fuck my Handsome boss . Oh you are not giving me sex , Now i have to fuck my beautiful secretary or collogues  . There are much better alternatives . 

This is why All the blame on her , She is not bad human but she committed a mistake and now she is facing the consequences , Its only natural . Hemant reaction and his action is normal . Him thinking He was not enough of man , again Natural and Normal . Him regretting again , Normal  . 

How come these action can be seen As Heroics ? Its a Normal reaction . 

Its not a Gender thing . Its very General one . 

IF we switch the character , Hemant would have received the same kind of Comment and Sona would have also received the same kind of comment , Would then she be seen as HEROIC or Hero worshipper Character , No It is what any one would have done . Its very Normal . 

Again , People may disagree, They have every right to be . Hemant is no Saint here , He is not 100% right here , But A husband is 100% innocent here , There is nothing he could have done to stop her wife from cheating . If changing your physique and dance like hritik , having charm like Dhoom's JOhn abraham fuck like James deen  is what take your wife to refrain from cheating then it is not marriage its an agreement . Loyalty should not be demanded. There should  be no Price or Condition on Loyalty . Its not Transaction . Give or Take . ( Han gyan chod diya thoda    ). 

Also I am not saying that one should stay forever in these kind of marriages , Just divorce / separation / Marriage Counseling / Therapy many options .. If she was an rural women i can understand her but she is not , She is very capable women who can take any legal help very easily . That is why The Entire Blame on Her , Only Her . Again , I am not making comment on her character , her action , Just the Cheating part , Not on the Reason why she cheated , But Only She is the one who cheated and she deserves to face the consequences . And she bravely told him the truth . There is reason behind this . 

Even though I dont agree on whole AIRPORT Confession scene , Where Michael was blaming himself , But for the sake of the story and the character development it was needed and  acceptable .  

It took time for me to get the What "Flawed Characters" mean .

Yes , The last chapter could have been better , Sona's feeling , her guilt , her love for Hemant , The idea of living a life without Hemant , etc etc . But then again , Hemant was not in the state nor Sona . But I hope It will eventually comes out , Slowly Slowly ,  in further update .

I still dont want couple to split . But if Sona confesses instead of accepting her mistake , It will further destroy their relationship . Her love for Vikram is not Real . Michael King is gonna prove this ( Spoiler to ni de diya   ). Which will further make her realize that she also does not love Michael King . Its kind of Thesis and Anti Thesis , Situation . VIkram was Thesis and Micheal King is gonna be Anti Thesis , and when they collied We will get Synthesis which will be the Man she is in love  .

So , Even though , The divorce part felt rush , but Them living together till divorce is Solid plot and justify the Divorce Plot, setting for future events  . 

Till now , Everything is fine . 

But If Sona again gonna hook up with VIKRAM or even Kiss him . I am gonna  done with this Story ( Because its gonna destroy the whole character of Sona ,then  Nothing can redeem her character , she took enough for the plot lol . The whole flawed character thing would be waste  .  I would be happy to be read whole story without Hemant and Sona character , Only the Michael king and Underworld' story i am gonna read ) .

( Note :- You can agree or disagree with me , It is fine . It is just a perspective , I  might be right or RIGHT   , But again , Its all for fun . I always said this It is all for fun , Some comment i deliberately make just to play with writer hahaha . Harry's response always appreciative and Very explanatory in nature . He is master of his craft and also very good with people . ) 



This time I have VALID CRITISIM for Harry :- Enough with your Big talk , We need SOME ACTION , WE NEED BLOOD . WE ARE GETTING THIRSTY,  Bawa . ( also dont make him Invincible during fights ,  Make him bleed ) . Also , Please increase dialogue between them . I know its gonna increase the length of Chapters but I miss reading dialogues .

One thing do we get to hear his Child hood , Past life , His parents ? 

Also I want to see , How Sona would react seeing Michael's wounds and If He comes home bleeding or His face with bandage and his wounded knuckle . I just wanna see how she is gonna react to all this.

Just think , Michael king after a brutal fight  comes home and see Sona , with adrenaline pumping through his veins ,anger , fear , and the testosterones ..................  

Hope you have already written something like this , If not Please thoda sa dekh lena .  

The story going great , Harry .

I am too excited for the next update . 

Kudos to you . 

   

*Peace out*

[Speedy21]

Well , I wanted to write this comment earlier , but i refrained after reading Harry's explanation about the story . I got the gist of the story , My focus was too much on Sex part not on the characters . The Sex or affairs was an element of the story . Now i consider the sex things as minor element . 

I said this before , I said this again . HEMANT IS 100% innocent here . 

Hemant was Hemant before he met sona , Hemant was Hemant when they met and dated , Hemant was Hemant when they got married . Why the expectation that he is gonna change . She made the choice and Hemant also made the choice . 

They met each other when they were most vulnerable , they helped each other , they grew together and Made a family , TOGETHER . 

Things got complicated . Sona cheated on Hemant not because She was not happy with her marriage , but because VIKRAM was the kind of men she always dreamt of . Adding to the manipulation and the kind of atmosphere she works in ( which i refused earlier but for the sake of the story ) . IF it was Michael King instead of Vikram , She would have fucked him too. Sona here does not loved VIKRAM , For me she loves those kind of Men ( The over sexual stuff messed up this narrative , because its hard to believe after reading her encounter with VIKRAM vs Her Love making with Hemant , That she loves the latter more, But its an Erotica lol ). She thinks Hemant was not Ideal man for her , but the Man she needed but never realizes .  But now she is gonna realize what she has lost . That is why the guilt and pain . if we look She is not losing anything . She can still get her kid and Anjali will understand her, a good amount of money , And with VIKRAM she will get her life back on track and Can have children together (YUCK) , Every damn thing that she did with Hemant and things she did not do . Yes , the guilt of cheating a good man will always be with her but what she will gain simply out weigh what she will lost . But the guilt is because She is loosing Hemant . 

Yes , Earlier my comment was complete opposite . But The situation was not this bad , Hemant was still in her life . All things she said , all the things she confessed , she did because HEMANT was still in her life . Present Sona is Sona because of HEMANT , without him , The we will have different Sona . I would not be surprise if VIKRAM rejects her later . lol . All the things He loves about her , Apart from her wife's resemblance is because of HEMANT . Once he gone , those things will be gone with him too . 

Before I was against the Idea of Sona never loved Hemant , I accused the writer , simply because of written material , but failed to understand the explanation given by him in comments . That is why my perspective got changed . 

VIKRAM only loves present SONA . Present Sona is Sona because of Hemant . He is the reason behind her success or what ever she achieved in his life . Same for Hemant too . 

So why cheating ? Harry explained very well in comments . I also want to add Because Now they feel they dont need each other , They are stable , They think they Can survive without each other . 

Sona is not to be blamed , But A wife is getting Blamed here , She rightfully deserves to. A husband should not be blamed here . 

There is no justification for cheating , People cheat not because they are unhappy and or they feel ignored , They cheat because they can and want to . Its simple as that . Sona wanted too and she did . Now she is facing the consequences , Its only natural . The whole divorce plot is natural progression any man or women had done the same , Irrespective of Reason , Or explanation why they cheat . Its not gonna make any difference . 

What do you expect ? Sona's confessing that The whole reason i cheated because You were weak / You were not giving me enough attention / No sex for months / No attention on family . Okay accepted . So after She fucked Vikram , Did all the problems vanish ? Her life got better ? While she had  having her fun , Hemant was working for his family . He was not having fun , He was not having affair , He told everything to her , Every Plan. Why he was away , She knew everything . Never objected and Never took any action . Never fought him  . When she was getting fucked in Bali , He was  taking care of their family . So its not justify her action . So its much better to just accept that she cheated because she was tempted by Him , Or He reminds of him her past . An honest confession without blaming him or her marriage or her present life . 

A cheating is itself a confession/statement/Reason everything . 

Getting ignored , No sex , or Sexless marriage , No attention , even if we take it to extreme , like a partner completely ghosting his family , Still fell short for any justification for Cheating . There are lots of other way to deal which results in positive out come . Cheating or betrayal makes matter worst . People will say getting fucked makes them to escape reality , Yes but Tomorrow in morning everything will be same . Yes it will energize you , makes you feel wanted , but still in Gutter . Plus not you are cheater too . 
No matter what you do it will give advantage to other partner even if they are abusive partner . That is how its work . and 

This is same argument given by Pseudo Feminist . And calling something Pseudo Feminist does not make one Anti- Feminism . ( I am not being Political here , any one who feel any offend , I apologize )  

Two wrongs do not make it wright  . Even if Hemant 100% wrong here , Still not justify the action or the reasoning or anything for Sona Cheating . Hemant incompetence could have also be resulted in Divorce / Separation / Ugly Fight / Etc etc but Her fucking VIkram again and again and again could  never be the one . 

The Chastity/Faithfulness/Trust should not come with list of chores one should in order to expect it from other partner . This is not Gender Specific , This is General one . Husband , wife , Man , women . 

Oh you ignored me , Now i am going to fuck my Handsome boss . Oh you are not giving me sex , Now i have to fuck my beautiful secretary or collogues  . There are much better alternatives . 

This is why All the blame on her , She is not bad human but she committed a mistake and now she is facing the consequences , Its only natural . Hemant reaction and his action is normal . Him thinking He was not enough of man , again Natural and Normal . Him regretting again , Normal  . 

How come these action can be seen As Heroics ? Its a Normal reaction . 

Its not a Gender thing . Its very General one . 

IF we switch the character , Hemant would have received the same kind of Comment and Sona would have also received the same kind of comment , Would then she be seen as HEROIC or Hero worshipper Character , No It is what any one would have done . Its very Normal . 

Again , People may disagree, They have every right to be . Hemant is no Saint here , He is not 100% right here , But A husband is 100% innocent here , There is nothing he could have done to stop her wife from cheating . If changing your physique and dance like hritik , having charm like Dhoom's JOhn abraham fuck like James deen  is what take your wife to refrain from cheating then it is not marriage its an agreement . Loyalty should not be demanded. There should  be no Price or Condition on Loyalty . Its not Transaction . Give or Take . ( Han gyan chod diya thoda    ). 

Also I am not saying that one should stay forever in these kind of marriages , Just divorce / separation / Marriage Counseling / Therapy many options .. If she was an rural women i can understand her but she is not , She is very capable women who can take any legal help very easily . That is why The Entire Blame on Her , Only Her . Again , I am not making comment on her character , her action , Just the Cheating part , Not on the Reason why she cheated , But Only She is the one who cheated and she deserves to face the consequences . And she bravely told him the truth . There is reason behind this . 

Even though I dont agree on whole AIRPORT Confession scene , Where Michael was blaming himself , But for the sake of the story and the character development it was needed and  acceptable .  

It took time for me to get the What "Flawed Characters" mean .

Yes , The last chapter could have been better , Sona's feeling , her guilt , her love for Hemant , The idea of living a life without Hemant , etc etc . But then again , Hemant was not in the state nor Sona . But I hope It will eventually comes out , Slowly Slowly ,  in further update .

I still dont want couple to split . But if Sona confesses instead of accepting her mistake , It will further destroy their relationship . Her love for Vikram is not Real . Michael King is gonna prove this ( Spoiler to ni de diya   ). Which will further make her realize that she also does not love Michael King . Its kind of Thesis and Anti Thesis , Situation . VIkram was Thesis and Micheal King is gonna be Anti Thesis , and when they collied We will get Synthesis which will be the Man she is in love  .

So , Even though , The divorce part felt rush , but Them living together till divorce is Solid plot and justify the Divorce Plot, setting for future events  . 

Till now , Everything is fine . 

But If Sona again gonna hook up with VIKRAM or even Kiss him . I am gonna  done with this Story ( Because its gonna destroy the whole character of Sona ,then  Nothing can redeem her character , she took enough for the plot lol . The whole flawed character thing would be waste  .  I would be happy to be read whole story without Hemant and Sona character , Only the Michael king and Underworld' story i am gonna read ) .

( Note :- You can agree or disagree with me , It is fine . It is just a perspective , I  might be right or RIGHT   , But again , Its all for fun . I always said this It is all for fun , Some comment i deliberately make just to play with writer hahaha . Harry's response always appreciative and Very explanatory in nature . He is master of his craft and also very good with people . ) 



This time I have VALID CRITISIM for Harry :- Enough with your Big talk , We need SOME ACTION , WE NEED BLOOD . WE ARE GETTING THIRSTY,  Bawa . ( also dont make him Invincible during fights ,  Make him bleed ) . Also , Please increase dialogue between them . I know its gonna increase the length of Chapters but I miss reading dialogues .

One thing do we get to hear his Child hood , Past life , His parents ? 

Also I want to see , How Sona would react seeing Michael's wounds and If He comes home bleeding or His face with bandage and his wounded knuckle . I just wanna see how she is gonna react to all this.

Just think , Michael king after a brutal fight  comes home and see Sona , with adrenaline pumping through his veins ,anger , fear , and the testosterones ..................  

Hope you have already written something like this , If not Please thoda sa dekh lena .  

The story going great , Harry .

I am too excited for the next update . 

Kudos to you . 

   

*Peace out*

Dean you spelled it right mate ... Sona did sona thing ...... For that u cnt blame hemant for it... Atleast hemant stayed true to his marriage life..... Hemant maybe hooker before sona....but he stayed true to his marriage value..... ( Except his dream) Having a better life than today..... That dream cost his family   I believe that wht man ..do....be better than today... I started reading this just bcoz.. this is story is different other.... Cuck ...cuck.. cuck..... Sissy... (Jerk of) And leave...This site reader like that kinda story....  Hemant is no saint but  wetted his goods for sona.... Harry mentioned sona character is the trigger hemant need. To become Micheal king.... And she did it.rightly so....all thoughts divorce charpter bit rushed i like that hemant is cold n ruthless...now.. no more caring....sentimental... Story is gng great..... Keep it up.....m good day 
         

     Peace out...

[Harry Jordan]

Love u boss .. it's well vry gd going... Like alws I am fan of hemants.. don't listen RCF haha
He just want to see hemants is a looser ..he alws want to so hemants is a coockles sissy type .. but u had vry gd work  on our hero hemants..every story has the hero heroin villain.. just like it ..  of  crs sonarika is having this pain bcz of her cheating..as well as Hemant also suffering... But we love to see ,
Now Hemant wil show his version of Michele king ...and sonarika will see all the she is been wrong about hemant.. Hemant will understand what went wrong... let's see what is going on writer head ..

Deep in my heart alws want that sonarika and hemant will be together again ... Dnt know how...but I wish ...love you boss ...

No need for namecalling Akash....everyone has the right to voice their opinions regarding my story no matter what they see....and I honestly don't think he thinks that way.......I understand what his opinions are and they are well thought out.......but my story's base plot is already done and its not going to change.....so please refrain from calling other's opinion out like that.....just focus on what your expectations are and voice it.....and I can assure you.....you will enjoy the future chapters as it unfolds...

[RCF]

First of all, I never said Sonarika is innocent, Nor I said she doesn't deserve what she is getting, You guys do not understand the argument but write paragraphs after paragraphs which doesn't even make sense for the points I have been discussing with Harry. I was simply saying her not taking stand for the decision she took or for the choice she made and explaining her side of story before Hemanth realizing it would have been an apt conversations when things go so fast till divorce..once divorce decision is made I felt its like a broken conversation which would not carry enough weight, I am not sure where pseudo feminism comes into picture here... Also I have been honest about how I felt about the character of Hemanth...Its my opinion, I didn't ask him to be Cissy or cucky nor weak, In fact if you read my comment you could understand that I mentioned true heroism would only elevate after much grounded humiliation...and despite being in humiliation phase his character has undertones of heroism with hints from the past..that spoiled my experience of a true transformation...

Anyways, Its useless to argue with people who do not get the gist of conversations happening around yet they name call some one who doesn't know them..You guys do not need to defend Harry or his writing, he is perfectly capable of a decent conversation with me. Like I said have a peaceful time for rest of the story.

~RCF

[Harry Jordan]

Well , I wanted to write this comment earlier , but i refrained after reading Harry's explanation about the story . I got the gist of the story , My focus was too much on Sex part not on the characters . The Sex or affairs was an element of the story . Now i consider the sex things as minor element . 


The story going great , Harry .

I am too excited for the next update . 

Kudos to you . 

   

*Peace out*

Wow that was a lot LOL , but regardless happy to see you appreciate my story. I will just share my mindset regarding this without spoiling the story.


You have some valid criticism regarding the characters and yes I agree to some. But one thing I don't is Hemant's character to be innocent here. Because at the end of the day , we must expect the dark truth that Hemant too has hid his true self from Sonarika. Sonarika still believes that Hemant is just suffering from a PTSD from his army days , she has no idea about Michael King and his legacy of brutal justice. In a way that is also betrayal but Hemant too has his reasoning , as he was running away from his trauma and past and now even after accepting it he is unwilling , because he doesn't want it to be his legacy. His ultimate goal in life was always to put Michael King to rest by avenging his past and finding closure in it so that he can be committed as a family man again , but that is gone out the window due to Sonarika cheating on him. Now his commitment only revolves around his son.


And even though Sonarika sinned , her reasoning has always been Hemant delaying his moments with her for a future that took time to come. Vikram was there for her in the current while Hemant built a future that she could only imagine. And thus her duality was born. She never ignored Hemant , she made both the men a part of her life. But now , Hemant is drifting away and that is breaking her. Will it affect her character as the aspects that connected with Hemant fade way change her personality? Maybe it will , maybe it won't. Either she can make her errors with Hemant a lesson about her wrongdoings and start fresh with Vikram to not falter. Or she can find her way back to Hemant. After all Hemant is changed , who knows maybe this time he won't hold back LOL!


And yes , action is definitely going to come. My next focus is building a solid action setpiece which will conclude with a character death. And the way I am building it , it will be a spectacle because we will see the birth of a new form that is an amalgamation of Hemant and Michael that merges. The two rings , Garuda and Archangel represent his dual form which will now be forged into one. Michael the Archangel is the past and his brutality will fuel the rage of Garuda in him , making him not just a force of order , but of vengeance as well because now he is not going to back down. His enemies will see him coming and that will have no other choice but to succumb and burn in his flame of hatred!

When Michael and Hemant merges , it will no longer be a warning. It will be MAYHEM!!!

[EPLOVER4U]

I appreciate your nice words and vice versa. But I will always welcome criticism as long as its not over the line or uncomfortalbe. And for me , in this story , not a single reader have overstepped it , they respected my work and voiced their constructive criticism in their words. 


And I welcome all of them , because I would like to hear what their perspectives are or how they envision their mind when they read my story. But I will make it very clear right now , readers never influence my story because I have already completed the base plot of part 1. Even while typing now , I am in brink of completing part 2 of this saga , the conclusion of it all. The reason I take time is because I want to polish the story before bringing it to you which is why I do weekly updates. So you can relax if your concern is readers are influencing my story because I already know where the story will go and how it will end. 


So I acknowledge your concern , but I can assure you , you don't have to worry about others influencing me.


the reason I am sharing this story here is simply because I myself am fed up off many stories that follow this theme often end up ruining the character that is into that kink , turning a kink lifestyle into a masochist porn. That is something I wholeheartedly do not prefer , my story is not a revolution of sort to push some "narrative" 

you can't decide on this, it solely depends on the outcome of the readers and their acceptance 

 Its purely entertainment , hell , entertainment to jerk off for that matter!! LOL!

hahahahaha 

I also acknowledge that all of my readers will like my characters , and its OK. I understnad , this is after all a story , and stories can be subjective. But I must encourage everyone , if there is any criticism , it should be pointed against me. Not other's opinions. 


Regardless , I hope all of you continue enjoying the story and at the end of the day that is what actually matters


  PROMISING YOU A WONDERFUL JOURNEY AHEAD BY YOURS TRULY

                               HARRY JORDAN 

and for other matters, i can write a comprehensive reply on every point with the counter from the story itself but let's bury the hatchet, for me reading is a habit not the source of entertainment. yes, i agreed that erotica is more entertaining than any other videos around on the net, because the scope and canvas of it is like an ocean you can sail on any direction, but it will be frustrating when you are forced to sail on the particular current only. 

let me give you some of the genuine female writer whose stories are pioneer and i love them

Bdrew86
Indian_Princess
komalrani
sexypreeti
rupanita
shiprat

and many more, sorry i'm not able to recall the names of other right mow

the depth of the female character they paint on the canvas is always going to be differ with respect to the male author or vice versa, but there will always a gap it doesn't mean that there is any difference with the flow of the character.

so i hope you and the others enjoy them as well

i prefer to be a man of few words so will end here.

kudos & regards
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[Harry Jordan]

and for other matters, i can write a comprehensive reply on every point with the counter from the story itself but let's bury the hatchet, for me reading is a habit not the source of entertainment. yes, i agreed that erotica is more entertaining than any other videos around on the net, because the scope and canvas of it is like an ocean you can sail on any direction, but it will be frustrating when you are forced to sail on the particular current only. 



so i hope you and the others enjoy them as well

i prefer to be a man of few words so will end here.

kudos & regards
Ep

Those are some cool collections , I do follow bdrew's stories and do like them. And you don't need to worry about the story taking just a single route. Like I said in the part , Adultery is only there for namesake , the story will have a whole lot of action , drama , spectacle , badass moments , mind games etc. 

Also , if my story does pave the way for a 'revolution' then I'll be a happy man!!! LOL!!!

I envisioned this saga as a complete package where you can find all kinds of themes explored in a story. This story is only going to get more dramatic as the battle lines are drawn and chaos arrives in Mumbai.

[DeanWinchester00007]

Dean you spelled it right mate ... Sona did sona thing ...... For that u cnt blame hemant for it... Atleast hemant stayed true to his marriage life..... Hemant maybe hooker before sona....but he stayed true to his marriage value..... ( Except his dream) Having a better life than today..... That dream cost his family   I believe that wht man ..do....be better than today... I started reading this just bcoz.. this is story is different other.... Cuck ...cuck.. cuck..... Sissy... (Jerk of) And leave...This site reader like that kinda story....  Hemant is no saint but  wetted his goods for sona.... Harry mentioned sona character is the trigger hemant need. To become Micheal king.... And she did it.rightly so....all thoughts divorce charpter bit rushed i like that hemant is cold n ruthless...now.. no more caring....sentimental... Story is gng great..... Keep it up.....m good day 
         

     Peace out...

Yup , Rightly Said , Bro . 

[DeanWinchester00007]

rupanita
shiprat

[DeanWinchester00007]

Wow that was a lot LOL , but regardless happy to see you appreciate my story.   I will just share my mindset regarding this without spoiling the story.

 

You have some valid criticism regarding the characters and yes I agree to some. But one thing I don't is Hemant's character to be innocent here. Because at the end of the day , we must expect the dark truth that Hemant too has hid his true self from Sonarika. Sonarika still believes that Hemant is just suffering from a PTSD from his army days , she has no idea about Michael King and his legacy of brutal justice. In a way that is also betrayal but Hemant too has his reasoning , as he was running away from his trauma and past and now even after accepting it he is unwilling , because he doesn't want it to be his legacy. His ultimate goal in life was always to put Michael King to rest by avenging his past and finding closure in it so that he can be committed as a family man again , but that is gone out the window due to Sonarika cheating on him. Now his commitment only revolves around his son.

As i said earlier , I get the story , I am satisfy with the story and including all the events and how they turned out .           


And even though Sonarika sinned , her reasoning has always been Hemant delaying his moments with her for a future that took time to come. Vikram was there for her in the current while Hemant built a future that she could only imagine. And thus her duality was born. She never ignored Hemant , she made both the men a part of her life. But now , Hemant is drifting away and that is breaking her. Will it affect her character as the aspects that connected with Hemant fade way change her personality? Maybe it will , maybe it won't. Either she can make her errors with Hemant a lesson about her wrongdoings and start fresh with Vikram to not falter. Or she can find her way back to Hemant.

For the story , I accepted this . ( That is why i refrained from making further comment about the story  )

After all Hemant is changed , who knows maybe this time he won't hold back LOL!

I seriously Hoping something like this happen , And Because Cheated and Divorce couple dont engage in SEX just like that , I hope if they engage in SEX , The reason or situation should be justifiable and Natural  ( Dont make it like , Sitting , alone , Horny lets have sex ... NOOOOO....... )

And yes , action is definitely going to come. My next focus is building a solid action setpiece which will conclude with a character death. And the way I am building it , it will be a spectacle because we will see the birth of a new form that is an amalgamation of Hemant and Michael that merges. The two rings , Garuda and Archangel represent his dual form which will now be forged into one. Michael the Archangel is the past and his brutality will fuel the rage of Garuda in him , making him not just a force of order , but of vengeance as well because now he is not going to back down. His enemies will see him coming and that will have no other choice but to succumb and burn in his flame of hatred!

I love the this style of yours , the comic book style writing increases the tease and excitement for next chapter . GARUDA and Archangel forged together . GOLD LINE  . Man , I a m very excited and  little anxious too . *CHARACTER DEATH* Who is gonna die ? Huhhh....... I hope not someone I like lol . 

When Michael and Hemant merges , it will no longer be a warning. It will be MAYHEM!!!

 
Hahahahah I love the One liners like this . 

Thanks  Harry , For the reply . and Also Love your replies . You always put efforts into replies which something i like a lot about you . 


Story is going Great . 



 

*PEACE OUT*

[DeanWinchester00007]

Letter to My new writer friend harry 

JUST IGNORE MAN JUST IGNORE THERE ARE ANNOYING PEOPLE EVERYWHERE, WHO JUST WANTS TO PROVE THEIR OWN POINT OF VIEW REGARDLESS OF THE FLOW AND WEIGHT OF THE CANVAS

THIS IS YOUR STORY & WRITING A ONE SHALL NOT BE EASY 

WHAT IS EASY! IS TO POINT OUT THAT THIS IS NOT RIGHT THIS IS THIS THIS IS THAT AND BLAH BLAH.......

Were you able to identify a pseudo-feminist around? Hahahaha......

Genuinely appreciate this update why?

1. As it is already been clear that it will be all about Hemant and his dealings 

Check out very well 

2. He is not a sissy so this will be the reaction of any normal man

3. As the character of Hemant aka MK is very calculative as shown in the update 

Check out well enough 

I can understand about the pov of other for asking more detailing but it doesn't matter much.

4. The last line and the conversation in the lounge are the hints of his will sona catch up with the real one when she knows what she missed hahahahaha

What a character you have designed my friend just love the thrill of it.

This cuckness is like a disease which is spreading like cancer FUCKKKKKK 

AFTER A LONG TIME A GOOD STORY IS  GOING ON WHERE THE CHARACTER EDGE STYLE AND DESIGN ARE GOOD NOT SOMETHING AS USUAL IT WAS GOING AROUND AND THEN THIS VERBAL REASONING 

IT'S KINDA COMEDY SCENE 

As the saying goes on you can hate me but you can't ignore me.


And YOU YES YOU HARRY WHY MAN WHY?

You just started playing on with readers desires just go with the AK, i don't remember the name of the movie of him and Trisha, there are 2 movie of their, one where wife cheats and husband ask her for long drive, and other one where he is the kingpin of the underworld and change for his son, i think you just mixing both movies with your imagination hahahaha

Kudos

Enjoy the reading and write without any hesitation my friend and try not to please just write what you want to write as I promised you I am hooked up on this thriller 

Always remember "They will hate they will differ but they can't ignore"

Regards 
Ep 

What a character you have designed my friend just love the thrill of it.

This cuckness is like a disease which is spreading like cancer FUCKKKKKK 

AFTER A LONG TIME A GOOD STORY IS  GOING ON WHERE THE CHARACTER EDGE STYLE AND DESIGN ARE GOOD NOT SOMETHING AS USUAL IT WAS GOING AROUND AND THEN THIS VERBAL REASONING



Perfectly Said 




You just started playing on with readers desires just go with the AK, i don't remember the name of the movie of him and Trisha, there are 2 movie of their, one where wife cheats and husband ask her for long drive, and other one where he is the kingpin of the underworld and change for his son, i think you just mixing both movies with your imagination hahahaha

Bro , Can you Name those Movies ? 

[Harry Jordan]

You just started playing on with readers desires just go with the AK, i don't remember the name of the movie of him and Trisha, there are 2 movie of their, one where wife cheats and husband ask her for long drive, and other one where he is the kingpin of the underworld and change for his son, i think you just mixing both movies with your imagination hahahaha

Bro , Can you Name those Movies ? 

I think I know this. The movie with the roadtrip where Trisha is moving on is called Vidaamuyarchi which takes place in Azerbaijaan where Trisha gets kidnapped by some human traffickers and Ajith fights his way to save her. The other movie is Good Bad and Ugly which was the next film that released after this which had Ajith play a retired Gangster returning to his wife and son to start fresh but son is caught up in a drug case and he has to find a way to save him!

[Blackdick11]

Chapter 20 is nothing less than a cinematic explosion—dripping with emotions, drenched in drama, and pierced with pain....
husband and wife—both were hiding secrets from each other, or rather, carrying them deep within their hearts. but sona, unable to bear the heavy burden of her own guilt, finally gathered the courage to reveal her secret to hemant… and now she’s paying the price for it. ANYWAY, this was bound to happen...she deserves it for what she did....
But what about HEMANT...when will he reveal his own secret? and those people who are sympathizing with him right now, like tamanna and pranitha… maybe later even disha, sanjana, and that witch meghna will also join in if they come to know about his tragedy. AND honestly, they should—because he needs that support.
Hemant has people with whom he can share his pain, but sona has no one to turn to. yet, two figures surround her—her bestie Meghna, the puppet master orchestrating the entire game, and Vikram...It would be better if she doesnt go to him....
But the real question is: what will be their reaction be when they discover hemant’s true identity? And will he ever confess the truth to sonarika? what will her expression be when she comes to know all this? I can’t wait for that moment.
But one thing is certain—people always manage to find their own benefit even in someone else’s suffering. now that Sona’s cheating has been exposed, this has turned into a golden opportunity for pranitha and tamanna to replace her…
Sonarika now stands at a turning point: either fight to win back Hemant’s love and trust , or accept divorce as the price of her betrayal.
this moment decides whether her story becomes one of redemption or of loss.

The thrill is building—I’m eager to see what lies ahead.

[featherman]

Hi Harry

Thanks for the wonderful story. I know wat is this platform for . surprisingly this story gave a new wave and gives a new definition f art.


you made me registered to this site just to add comments in this story. Never expected I will do this.

I enjoy reading others comments and your response. I respect their views and also like to add my perspective; we cannot weigh sonarika adultery and hemants past in the same measure.

What sonarika did is breaking trust with the love she got it. Hemant is trying so much to make the family safe , happy and progressive .

The flaws of Hemant is understandable it is capability issue . but the flaws of Sonarika is not capability it is commitment . She dint do it as accident , she got addicted to the pleasure.

I understand Sonarika is heavily influenced by Meghna and Vikram. but breaking commitment is her choice she needs to pursue punishment. Hemant could have also tempted to tamanna or disha, but he didn't do it. I could have some what agreed if he is lousy, ignoring the family commitments, not taking care of his son. but here he honored all of it with full heart and working on the future for the family. His job is risky, Sonarika knows his past , being in army he is having bad dreams . he is tring to handle the situation on his own. he hided the pain not pleasure , to safeguard the peace of the house.

He is not wrong, he with-held himself from sonarika because he wanted to treat her well. if Sonarika missed something , she should have communicated . She atleast should have confessed , she needs more intimacy, spice or encouraged Hemant . she dint come clean to Hemant when she kissed Vikram the first time. she continued making mistake . Why did she reveal now , it become regular that she forget the real home.she didn't feel pity for Hemanth or Vikram. she wantes end the chaos so she can focus. She is coming true for herself to choose WHAT SHE WANT not out of remorse. then this is not forgivable.

As I said Sonarika joining back to Vikram or Hemanth eitherways may not b a ideal situation. it doesn't matter of anything about Michael to Sonarika . Hemanth took good care of her and she betrayed ; She should feel the pain and Hemant should heal.

I respect and agree with RCF that Hemant is also flawed , but as i mentioned earlier not the right equation to weigh both in same plates.

and it is ok for me or may many more people expect Hemant to be a hero. reason the site is erotica and most of the stories make male as bull or cuckold this STORY stands different talking positively man can also let go.

Am sure this platform is not to make a moral story but i prefer if this ends in a happy note.

Last but not least, how many more episodes have you planned . to eager for the next update. best wishes Harry

[RCF]

I respect and agree with RCF that Hemant is also flawed , but as i mentioned earlier not the right equation to weigh both in same plates.

Thank you! 

Though I wasn't asking to weigh them both on the same scale.. I was saying it all depends on the circumstances, Hemanth did not reveal his killer past to Sonarika and kept it hidden, So if hypothetically Sonarika did not cheat and there is no Vikram in the story, Yet at those times we still saw the same Hemanth trying his best for this family, working hard, doing everything he can to keep them safe...So would the scale turn towards him then as the sinner? No right..that's the point I was making, A wrong is wrong even though its not at the same level....so a story that is making undertones of protagonist as a hero,also glorifying his past on his killings as a reference to most dangerous man, but when it comes to wrongs done by his wife instantly needs judgement and punishment of the worst sorts with out even given a chance explaining her case despite her being a strong woman who knows the extent of her choice she made.......I know many will tell me feminist lol Its Okay because they did not understand the point I was making...

I was seeking a balance in both the characters arc which was missing....At this point of time, With out knowing Hemanth's past he is a sinner in my book and its a betrayal to a family with whom he should have shared his past long time back, Just think if Anjali would still call him bhayya if she knew he is a cold blooded killer who was recently shaken just by an incident of kidnap..how will she scale her killer bhayya? That should tell you the answer...

As for Sonarika, I wasn't asking her to be given leeway for her sins, She should get the punishment and she should lose her family, I have mentioned about her betrayal in my earlier comments, If you go back and read it from my profile you will see my harsh comments against her...I was merely saying her not taking stand and explain her two worlds to Hemanth was disappointing before divorce...Ideally would have expected that conversation at home after coming from Hospital, her grieving the loss of her family is understandable but wouldn't she make last effort to make Hemanth understand her pov? Her side of the story instead of her giving those details, coming with self realization from Hemanth is what I couldn't take it as it would only add more mileage to already glorified Hemanth's character....It felt like oh man, How come this guy suddenly realized his flaw when he couldn't when he had all the time in his life...It would have been better for once someone who has been on other side of his nature explain what they were seeking outside of marriage than self realization, Sonarika later confirming his thoughts would be like a fizzled bomb in rain..no use....Asking that is well with in story expectations...isn't it? What is wrong here? Its like every body feels, for once we have a super hero husband and why is RCF ruining my party lol, I understand feel free to enjoy...and I will too but with a pinch of salt..

~RCF

[featherman]

Thank you! 

Though I wasn't asking to weigh them both on the same scale.. I was saying it all depends on the circumstances, Hemanth did not reveal his killer past to Sonarika and kept it hidden, So if hypothetically Sonarika did not cheat and there is no Vikram in the story, Yet at those times we still saw the same Hemanth trying his best for this family, working hard, doing everything he can to keep them safe...So would the scale turn towards him then as the sinner? No right..that's the point I was making, A wrong is wrong even though its not at the same level....so a story that is making undertones of protagonist as a hero,also glorifying his past on his killings as a reference to most dangerous man, but when it comes to wrongs done by his wife instantly needs judgement and punishment of the worst sorts with out even given a chance explaining her case despite her being a strong woman who knows the extent of her choice she made.......I know many will tell me feminist lol Its Okay because they did not understand the point I was making...

I was seeking a balance in both the characters arc which was missing....At this point of time, With out knowing Hemanth's past he is a sinner in my book and its a betrayal to a family with whom he should have shared his past long time back, Just think if Anjali would still call him bhayya if she knew he is a cold blooded killer who was recently shaken just by an incident of kidnap..how will she scale her killer bhayya? That should tell you the answer...

As for Sonarika, I wasn't asking her to be given leeway for her sins, She should get the punishment and she should lose her family, I have mentioned about her betrayal in my earlier comments, If you go back and read it from my profile you will see my harsh comments against her...I was merely saying her not taking stand and explain her two worlds to Hemanth was disappointing before divorce...Ideally would have expected that conversation at home after coming from Hospital, her grieving the loss of her family is understandable but wouldn't she make last effort to make Hemanth understand her pov? Her side of the story instead of her giving those details, coming with self realization from Hemanth is what I couldn't take it as it would only add more mileage to already glorified Hemanth's character....It felt like oh man, How come this guy suddenly realized his flaw when he couldn't when he had all the time in his life...It would have been better for once someone who has been on other side of his nature explain what they were seeking outside of marriage than self realization, Sonarika later confirming his thoughts would be like a fizzled bomb in rain..no use....Asking that is well with in story expectations...isn't it? What is wrong here? Its like every body feels, for once we have a super hero husband and why is RCF ruining my party lol, I understand feel free to enjoy...and I will too but with a pinch of salt..

~RCF

I hear you RCF bro. but i politely dis agree with you. Hemant may be a sinner of the past before stepping into the relationship and it resurfaced again. That and seeing as a husband is 2 different things. as a partner he is 100 % . Sonarika is not the same. to be honest Sonarika is built due to Hemant. he encouraged ( take example of her dance wherelse sonarika When Hemant went with his family to london , she travelled to Bali with her lover) am not saying going to Bali with lover is wrong . but if she had love what should have been her priority.All this doesnt mean you are wrong RCF bro, the way i see your note as ( may be am wrong) hemanth is also flawed , why that is not be discussed / spoken, where sonarika didnt have a conversation on the missing piece of him and her life here. but last episode is the grief of her cheating. as i mentioned before hemanth flaws are different and dangerous.on the other side sonarika adultrous cannot be equated with it. If Michael dint exist and hemanth is still not improving can we normalise what sonarika did is right. a man can happily bleed but not accept the adultery of the wife. Hemanth as been 100% to the marriage, the commitment , she didnt . we cannot reason the same . i think people are able to connect here with hemanth because of his character to the family. if he is baadsha outside is just a drama of entertainment. but when hemanth is wounded it affects all of our emotions. if michael dint exist or he is , what sonarika did is wrong. instead of sonarika if hemanth cheated , even then it is wrong. though this platform offers the thrill fun. this story is different in a way. 

 i believe the last episode was beautifully crafted making the grief sound from both parties.  Hemanth was suffered stroke it really showcased the pain, trueness and love. in deep down most of the mens are loyal and expect the same from the partner. Sonarika is in a mess she knows , because she chooses vikram over Hemant. the episode really depicted the right amount of conversation and emotion. Hemant was cold with sonarika because he realised , she chose someone against him. if am in hemanth position i would react the same. very balanced as a person. i like the silence , pain and emotion all over the last episode. Why was he balanced , is it because he is stronger , no . he is balanced because he didnt want to hurt her but the pain of her choosing someone , if you go through the episode i can see he didnt name call her. i really loved the arc of this person. so grounded its hard and most of the times most of the mens in the society who grown up with high responsibility are like this. i have seen , so it connected with me. 


am looking forward to see how emotionally hemanth is getting healed and michael is going away from his life more than sonarika. 

This is just my views. the finest appreciation of the art is criticism. i too eagerly lookin for people to add their views. 

RCF bro cheers to you. dont bother about people saying about you or your perspective. there are ppl like me who enjoy and understand the other perspective . please continue posting your comments . 

Hi harry Cheers and eagerly waiting for the update

[Speedy21]

Comment r flooding in?? this story suppose be hemant vs his past but Now hemant the present important more the hemant the past... Eagerly waiting for the update