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There's just a little inconsistency in the finishing parts of the latest update. Shipra had already boarded the bus for Ambruj when she read the messages. She tells Patode that the maid is here and will text after boarding the bus. Even assuming she had lied about where she was at that time, where did she take the two selfies that she sent to him? On the bus?
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Amazing update....love the chatting stuff you added
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26-04-2025, 10:16 PM
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Today's update was nice. Yes there was slight confusion whether shipra was in bus and how she took photo etc but living it aside, whole episode i would say was top notch... Wat i expected, for wat everyone scolded me, what i always say as complain that was now resolved.
Even now shipra is not so submissive like namrata with patode but having said tat, now the way she speaks to patode is cute to watch... Patode on other hand is not forcing her. But still he is getting his things done with her which is brilliant...
On the whole now i would say suraj is back in form
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(26-04-2025, 09:05 PM)eslx1212 Wrote: There's just a little inconsistency in the finishing parts of the latest update. Shipra had already boarded the bus for Ambruj when she read the messages. She tells Patode that the maid is here and will text after boarding the bus. Even assuming she had lied about where she was at that time, where did she take the two selfies that she sent to him? On the bus?
Let me clear it up.
The whole chat with Patode happened in the morning while Shipra was packing and was about to leave home.
When Shipra boarded the bus she just read the last messages from Patode which she didn't read previously.
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(26-04-2025, 09:14 PM)Keepinsimple Wrote: Amazing update....love the chatting stuff you added
Thanks man.
This chatting thing delayed the update.
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Superb writing...Such finesse you got in describing feelings and such a fine vocabulary, it really is something to appreciate and treasure.
You are a fine fine story writer @suraj76626
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Noted your explanation about the chat with Patode. But the absence of time stamp in the chats requires that you could have built this into the narration itself. Like, for example:
Shipra recalled the raunchy chat with Patode that morning before reading the new message.
Something like that, you know.
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HI Suraj,
I can see that you put in some real effort to give this update the effect it is supposed to have on the readers.
I know the time it can take to make this happen alongside the daily chores of our lives.
I will still say this only for one reason.... your updates are spaced so far apart in time that we readers need to go back and read the previous one to connect to the current one...
Try to work on that please
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Great effort and super pics for that chat
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Surya, I don't comment much because I try not to interfare with creative work. I really appreciate your hard work on the chat images, I really do.
One thing I would like to point out that they are hosted elsewhere and sooner or later they will get deleted and this update will make no sense.
I am not here to discourage you just wanted to appreciate your work and make sure future readers can appreciate your work like I do.
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Hey Suraj, the update was quite stunning as usual, especially the subtle innuendos fired by Shipra on Alok; the plan to share Shipra with Salim and finally the sexting episode in the bus.
I wish this sexting episode continues later during thej bus journey and Shipra does riskier stuff without getting caught.
I feel - Salim or Toppo shouldn't get their hands on Shipra this early. Secondly, Chetan or Alok shouldn't learn about Shipra promiscuity, atleast for the next couple of months.
Can't wait to read the next episode of this blockbuster.
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hi bro...
mujhe ye nahi pata ki aap best writer ho.. .inta achchha plot creat kiya ki maza a gaya kya koi itna achchha feel kar sakta hoon..
first time read ki hai bro...
mere exam bhi chal rahe the to kitaab se jyada apke update me study kar raha tha..
next update threesome sex with shipra saleem bro...
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apki first tread hot to hot hai bro.
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Shipra on a slippery slope, looks like there is no going back into this marriage at the end. She is breaking barriers here in terms of sliding into a role of not only cheating Alok with Patode but taking stupidest advise from Namrata and cheating herself by truly believing in bullshit fed into her brain by Namrata. Not once since story started did Shipra had a decent conversation on her side of story with Alok to make him see her sadness. All this is just a cover up to make herself feel better for the cheating. She thinks she can happily enjoy dual life but fate has other plans, its not a coincidence that Alok's friend's village is also Ambruj, he would be the eyes for Alok though he will humiliate Alok but he will take him to the truth by showing pictures or videos in future.
I guess there is no going back from here but be a slut for every one in Ambruj before she realizes her fall. I give credit to Namrata more than Patode in her fall. As for Patode, I think the end game would be to fail the plans of MLA and make him lose, Shipra should make it happen as her revenge with the help from Shrutika.
~RCF
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The story is going great without a doubt......when will be the next update Suraj....keep writing
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Fingers crossed on having a session between Shrutka and Chetan... ??
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Great going... ???
Writer's vision matters... Enjoying the flow...
If you can fasten up the updates to weekly.. It would be perfect...
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Suraj, think about exploring various location scenarios. Except for that sex at the Dhaba, all were in the houses so far. Of course there was one outdoor sex but still in the premises and one inside the office but still inside a room. Choices are numerous, explore them. Similarly, explore clothing varieties of the girls and describe them in sufficient detail. And if you plan a sexual encounter between Shipra and Shrutika, which I hope you will, make the run up to it and the settings in which it happens really, really good. That should be one of the most erotic scenes in your story.
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Great going.. Kudos to your efforts in creating chat images. It shows a great dedication.. really a great work. Waiting for the promised bang in next chapter
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