Adultery Love Sex And War Part 1 : Age Of Darkness

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Pathetic Comment ! ( Sorry but not sorry ) . There is lot i could say but it is not worth it . The only reason I am replying because Its shocking that this type of comment is coming from you .

You have connected with the story and I find too many similarities with other stories here and felt the plot is being repeated a lot. What is so pathetic about it...And I criticized it very respectfully.

Everything I am reading about Sonarika and Vikram is very similar from Facilitator. I do not see my comment as bad, its a mere suggestion to bring more plot with unpredictability. Only reason I am replying to you is because I want you to read others comment and understand first before jumping guns and making silly arguments.

~RCF

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Sonarika And Vikram Going To Thiland And Bali For Solo Trip And There Sonarika Wear Bikini

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Sometimes all it takes is few moments for someone to transform and in Sonarika's case , there was a lot of factors. Her inner attraction towards Vikram plus her fear of Hemant turning into Kunal is what resulted in her succumbing to it. But there is also a part of her that is unwilling to make a choice. She has ended up being a cheater , but this cheating also brings her suffering in her heart because she is stuck between two worlds now. The story further will be the exploration of her struggles and facing the consequences of her actions. But she has no idea what is coming!

Also the rest of the chapter 5 will come today. I have to fix some errors in it but it will be out soon.

Still !?!?

[Harry Jordan]

                                                                                                                                                     (CHAPTER 5 CONTD)

That was indeed a special day for them. But it was also a special day for Hemant as well. His grind for months developing his prototype gun was complete. Today was the day Harper was coming and Hemant is going to perform an official weapon trial for ANVIL and the Client. It was strange that Hemant was still unaware who the main client was. Anyways he was very excited. While he was evaluating the prototype himself he remembered his last talk with Kunal and how Kunal was curious about Hemant's dream of a business venture. Hemant had certain ideas and he was hoping it will take him someplace interesting. Their friendship was developing into a much better phase now and Kunal had started to show some improvements in himself. He joined Hemant's WFLF fitness center and was working on building a better physique in himself. And Kunal's martial art training was taking full effects. He voiced his complaints in the first few days but later the complaints turned into enthusiasm. Hemant was preparing everything for the trail today.

Harper soon arrived and he stood by Hemant as he gave a short trial for him of the gun. He was very impressed.

"I am proud of you Egghead. I have a strong feeling that this will be the biggest turning point of your life"

"You think so"

"I know so....so shall we proceed"

"Alright"

Harper had shipped a code protected case to carry the gun and its parts a week before. After storing the gun in that container they both got on Harper's big armor truck. The ride was short as they soon arrived at the Mumbai Port NSG base. The weapon trial was to be conducted on indoor shooting range located there. Hemant met with some of the military personnals and beaurocrats along with Harper. It was when he made his way to the entrance of the shooting range when he got the surprise of his life. There at the entrance stood an older american man who had a smile on his face when he noticed Hemant. But the smile on Hemant's face vanished when he saw him. It was Jefferson Irons , a name and individual from Hemant's dark past. A past he was trying to forget but now seems like returning to haunt him further.

"Nice to see you kid....its been a while" Irons said patting Hemant's shoulder.

"So...you are the client?" Hemant asked with a smug expression.

"Indeed , I run ANVIL" 

Hearing that Hemant looked at Harper as if he felt betrayal from his part as well. Hemant looked dejected now as he contemplated what to do.

"No need to be angry on Harper, son. He is just doing the duty of a loyal friend. And in a way so am I because long ago a promise was made to you....I am here to fullfill that promise"

"Is that all you're here for?"

"For now I am here to see your hardware in action. We'll talk the future once the trial is done"

All the military beurocrats and Irons and Harper walked into the shooting range soundproof gallery. Hemant was instructed to perform the trial himself. In a way it helped Hemant with his confidence because he had faith in his creation. Hemant calmly assembled the gun taking it out from the case. Irons and Harper whispered to each other regarding the gun design and so did the other personnals present in that gallery.

Hemant's gun used the standard 39mm long cartridges , the bullets that were the benchmark in military in the past. They were used in AK 47s the most widely used Assault weapon in the world. But Hemant's gun had other interesting features. For starters his gun didn't have a standard ammo but bullets can be used in chains  like they did for heavy machine guns. Once fired the shell doesn't fall out but gets collected in a can to the right of the gun. The only reloading function to do here is remove the can and dump the shells and refit it. His gun also increased the velocity and the range of the 39mm than the AK 47s can. In short , the personnals concluded that this gun definitely can be very useful in an active warfield or place of conflict. Its shorter interval in single burst shots plus its ability to adapt its variety in scopes for better aiming also added more specialities to it. Hemant demonstrated each of its feature in detail. In a way spending all the years in Quadron doing presentations really helped him doing a much better presentation here for the personnnal as well. 

When the presentation ended , the gallery erupted with applause and claps. Hemant couldn't hear it but he could see them clapping to which he gestured his thanks. He soon walked into the gallery as each individuals came and greeted him and congratulated him for his craft. Soon it was Irons and Harper at the end.

"I told you kid , you always had some untapped potential"

"If you say so"

"No , I know so. All of them are impressed by your creation. And I can already see this tool of yours to make a boom in the international market"

"I thought you were buying this design from me"

"That was my intention , but seeing the potential this weapon has. I've decided to present it to other major players , I've already setup a meeting with the execs of BLACKROCK"

"BLACKROCK? But they are not exactly the good kind of company"

"Sure they're not , but they have government contracts and associations to DARPA. Plus they have a bankload of money that they will be willing to give you if they are impressed"

"Why are you so interested in the well being of my life"

Hemant asked our of frustrations , something that has been growing since his dark past. The smile in Irons's face dissipated as soon he talked more calmly.

"Because long ago William made a promise to you. And he couldn't fullfill it , before..."

Irons was fighting back tears as he said those words , Hemant too understood the situation and felt emotional knowing about William's death. He was after all Irons's son.

"He left this world with one regret that he couldn't give you a life you deserved. By doing this , I feel I am fixing the void that William left so that he can rest. Because I believe he is still around haunting all of us. And he won't go until you get the American dream!"

"I didn't knew you to have such supersticious beliefs" Hemant teased trying to ease the situation.

"Our actions fuel these superstitions son. And after decades of being in this outrageous world , it tends to build it in you. But I know in my heart , what I want for you is what he wanted. I only have the best interest in you son. In a way I see a lot of William in you"

Hemant couldn't help but hug the greiving man as they comforted each other. Soon they separated from the hug as Harper had a smile the whole time.

"I am going to punish you for this"

"If the punishment is done on a bar with the liquor of my choice then I crave to be punished"

All three of them laughed after which Harper said.

"See , I told you. The turning point , its right now"

"Its still early to think that Roy"

"Well , he is right Harper , this is just the first phase. In two weeks I will be setting up a meeting with the BLACKROCK officials in London. You need to prep for that" Irons stated.

"London?" Hemant exclaimed. The mention of the place brings some past moments turned terrible memories.

"Kid? Like Harper said , and I am saying it now. Don't just move on , evolve. We all are aware of your past. But please stop punishing yourself for it , there are good parts of you in that past as well , mold the good parts and adapt to a new life. Believe me , doing that will bring the drive in you to find peace"

Hemant understood his reasoning. And it has seemed to work , he has often thought about his past lately and it didn't sting him anymore. He was able to overcome the terrible memories and build something different in him. And having Karan and Sonarika in his life really made him push for that drive , because deep down he wanted to evolve so that he can be the best version of himself for them. An hour later , Hemant had a lengthy discussion regarding his future. Irons made a proposal that was worth thinking about. He still couldn't believe what he proposed but he had that curiosity and the drive to pirsue it to some extent. The prototype gun was handed over to NSG onto their high security vault until tomorrow then it will go with Irons and Harper via flight to the US.

The entire day Hemant thought about it , and by evening once the dinner was done. He got Sonarika's attention and came to the balcony to discuss about it. Sonarika was stunned when she heard what Hemant was telling about.

"A business?" Sonarika said stunned.

"Yes , you see my gun actually was created with a rare component. Its called a Vector Alignment Knot. Its kind of a screw but has a different physical characteristic. The knot helped balancing the gun and reduce recoil and Irons says that small component can be very valuable to other weapon types as well." Hemant explained.

"Hmm ,  so a production of that small material could be vital to other systems and since you are the creator of it , you can even get a manufacturing rights and import license for it. There is definitely potential for this business. Especially considering this is the weapons sector where millions are invested" 

Sonarika shared her mindset regarding it. Hemant was surprised by her knowledge regarding it.

"So what do you think?" Hemant asked.

Sonarika took a few seconds to think after which she responded. 

"Running a business will take a big resolve Hemant. There will be a lot of calculations and a lot of gambles and everything."

Hemant stayed silent as his smile was slowly fading away. Sonarika noticed it and soon responded.

"But I also know the untapped potential of my husband. He did a big gamble getting this house risking it all so that we can have a family. And I can see the excitement in his eyes right now. One thing I know about my husband , is that he can truly achieve anything he wants. I just want one promise from you Hemant"

"What is it?"

"That if you are taking this opportunity , I want you to dedicate yourself and make it grow so much that one day I will come to your office for a job!"

Hemant felt pride hearing her motivational words. 

"Woman, you are unbelievable"

"I have a man that makes me believable. And I know he can do it , I am definitely looking forward to it"

Hemant responded by hugging her. Sonarika cherished the embrace as she caressed his back showcasing her support and love to him. As she separated she noticed a naughty smile in Hemant's face.

"Why are you smiling?"

"There is another thing...you know we have our special day coming in four months right?"

Sonarika did the math and she realized he was talking about their wedding anniversary.

"Well , I've been thinking about doing something special this year"

Sonarika started to feel sad as she believed Hemant was going to throw a party. That is what his approach has always been.

"But it will be only about us"

Her eyes brightened when she heard those words. She waited in anticipation as Hemant revealed.

"On that date , I've reserved a premium suite at the Trident Hotel , with a special night package. No guests , no family members , not even Karan or Anju. Just the two of us on that room. And I wanna fill the void we had for a long time Sona"

Sonarika didn't say a word and just stared at him with watery eyes and a smile. But curiosity got the best of her as she asked.

"What is that void?"

Hemant smiled and then responded.

"You remember how exhausting our wedding night was. Our first night was a big failure thanks to our ridiculous function and all of that gathering. Well , I want to rectify that void in four months. So , we will have our first night on our marriage anniversary this year"

Sonarika's eyed glittered hearing Hemant say it. She happily embraced him again , showing her love and excitement for that day. As they went to sleep that night , Sonarika couldn't help but look at Hemant sleeping and cuddled with him. That was when she noticed there was something different with him , but she didn't care to find out what it was and was more enjoying the feeling of cuddling him after a long time. 

There was some sadness in her , knowing that she had betrayed his trust. But the idea of spending their anniversary with each other on a hotel excited her. And for the time being she wants to focus on her happy moments than the guilty ones.

The next few days went like the new schedule they had developed. Sonarika spend the morning hours until noon at Vikram's place. Soon the changes started to show in her often now. Sonarika had ditched wearing salwaars and sarees to the office and instead wore professionals skirt and slacks more often. She now had a new wardrobe in Vikram's place that was mostly dominated by casual wears like sundresses and jeans. Something she stopped wearing since marriage. The time spend in Vikram's place made Sonarika transform into her old confident and bold self. Their restaurant dates became more frequent.

But today was more special , Vikram had bought two tickets to take Sonarika to a Diljit Dosanjh concert held in the city. She was reluctant but Vikram's enthusiasm made her to give in. The event was a grand thing , the energy was unbelievable. They stood in the far section of the venue and enjoyed the vibe of the music. The punjabi side of Vikram came out in full swing , he was dancing and tempting Sonarika to let loose as well. The vibe and the ambience made the perfect environment for their connection to grow even further. They danced close together lip syncing the song getting closer than ever. Sonarika was shocked when she noticed that Mouni was present in the concert along with Sagar. This made her a bit upset , because now she kind of sees the parallel of her life with Mouni's.

But she couldn't help but enjoy her moment with Vikram as he embraced her from behind and danced intimately to each song. Their moment was fuelled by desire and intimacy as on occasion they kissed each other. Even one point they played with their tongues in their kiss. In her mind Vikram was the perfect blend of her college boyfriend Rocky and Hemant. He has the charms and attractiveness of Rocky but also has the caring and comforting behavior of Hemant. Althought Hemant is extra careful respecting her boundaries while Vikram considers to be as close to her as possible. 

Sonarika had already told Hemant that she will be late as she made up an excuse of attending a party of an office client. After the concert Vikram took her to a posh hotel to have dinner in a private setting with each other.

"You need to be careful with your behavior Vicky" Sonarika said.

"What happened" Vikram asked.

"Your hands were out of control in that concert moments ago"

"Well I cannot help it if my woman dressed sexy enough for the occasion. I had to make her aware that I appreciate her form"

"Yeah but control yourself. At one point I feared you were going to lift my skirt and do my right there"

"Well , that thought definitely haven't cross my mind"

"You are a dity mind Vicky"

"You don't seem to mind if I am not wrong"

"Well , that mind works wonders in a bedroom. Not in the open"

"To be honest I like doing it in the open , but not like in a concert though"

"Then where?"

"Oh , like in a beach , a deserted beach,  in a rain forest , at a waterfall , somewhere high in the mountains"

"Enough , you are unbelievably perverse"

"Hey its not that far fetch. Couples tend to do naughty stuffs like that"

"Are we a couple?" Sonarika asked.

"Yes , we are after all a secret couple"

"I am afraid secret couples won't have the luxury to do that."

"Actually they can if they have a good planning"

Sonarika looked at him with a doubtful eyes as she soon enquired.

"You have a plan don't you?"

"Matter of fact I do"

"And what is this plan"

"Its not that complicated. I had a business meet that was meant to happen at Bali , but the meet was cancelled but I haven't cancelled by flight ticket yet. So I was thinking I could buy another extra ticket and take my lovely partner with me to Bali for few days. Four days to be exact. Just me and you"

Sonarika raised her eyebrows hearing his plan.

"Four days? In Bali?"

"Yup , just you and me"

Sonarika stayed in thoughts as she contemplated on a trip like that.

"When?" Sonarika asked.

"In about two weeks. We'll leave on the second coming Saturday and return by Tuesday"

Sonarika realized what he meant now. There was a little anger in her.

"You're breaching our rules Vicky"

"What? How?"

"I told you weekends belong to my family"

"I don't intend to take that away from them whatsoever. I wasn't aware it was coming on that day. I swear"

"It makes me hard to believe that"

"Alright fine. How about the second week from now you spend that entire week with your family and then on that weekend you come to Bali with me"

Sonarika looked at him a bit confused. Vikram had an excitement on his face. Sonarika decided to tease him.

"A whole week. Are you sure you can survive without me for a whole week?"

"Do not worry , I will make up for that whole week in our trip I promise"

"That is a challenging promise"

"Well , I like challenges. And by the time of our stay. I will make sure you are satisfied from my promise!"

Sonarika blushed a little as they finished their dinner. By the time they were done , it was past 11.00 and time to leave. Sonarika said her goodbye as she got on her car and drove off. After driving off gaining some distance , she noticed the roads were deserted as it was late night now. But it was unusual for a Mumbai road to be this deserted even in the middle of the night. But soon the emptiness was gone as another jeep overtaked her car and was going in front of her. Sonarika maintained her speed and focused on her drive home. The Jeep then started to break on occasion making Sonarika at times loose control. She was slowly getting angry now understanding that the jeep driver is doing this on purpose.

Getting frustrated she brought the car to the side of the road and the jeep did the same. Sonarika got out of the car fuming from anger as the man driving exited from the jeep. It was Dilawar.

Sonarika has never met Dilawar so she was confused who it was. But she was slightly intimidated because of his size. Dilawar had a smile on his face , he definitely gave the appearance of a goon to Sonarika. She could deduce it consider the size of him and how he looked with his rough clothing and smug attitude. The smile only widened as he approached her but stopped to maintain some distance between him and Sonarika. Dilawar soon spoke.

"I have to admit. You look more beautiful up close"

Her anger only raged as she shouted.

"WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!"

"Relax lady , I am just here to see you in person that's it"

"Leave before you meet my sandals in person"

"Those sandals would feel like flowers to me"

"Worthless men like you say that until they get hit in the face"

"You can hit me anytime lady , it will make my night"

Sonarika felt disgusted with his attitude. Soon Dilawar changed his stance.

"I have no wrong intentions right now. I am just here to say sorry regarding my brother"

"Your brother?"

"Yes , you see. He has developed feelings for the young lady in your house. Unfortunately he did something reckless"

That was the moment Sonarika realized who this guy was.

"You are Rafique's brother?"

"Yes"

"Well get this in your head and your brother's head. Stay away from my family for good , or else there will be severe consequences"

Dilawar only smiled hearing that. He taunted her with expressions as he retorted.

"I like it. You have more fire than your lousy weak husband. I am still shocked that a pathetic waste of a man like him has a smoking hot of a package woman as his wife. Its a terrible shame"

"WHAT!" Sonarika shouted.

"Didn't he tell you? He once did a lousy attempt to threaten me. But it felt like begging to me. You deserve a real man lady. A real man that can appreciate that incredible body of yours"

"GET OUT OF MY FACE BEFORE I DO SOMETHING TERRIBLE WITH YOU!"

Dilawar only laughed in response as suddenly another pair of headlights shined on them. A BMW luxury car approached them and Sonarika instantly recognized it was Vikram's car. Vikram parked his car to the side too and got out and confronted Dilawar.

"You okay Sonarika?"

"Yeah...I am just frustrated and annoyed by him"

Vikram turned his attention to Dilawar. Dilawar didn't feel threatened at all but Vikram was bold enough to stand upto him.

"Can I help you big man?"

"Nothing , I was just talking to my lady here"

"Your lady? Its funny because you don't look like her husband"

"I know and its a shame. Sometimes fate just gifts the unworthy with great desirable objects"

"Well , its clear this 'object' is beyond your reach so why don't you tip toe your way back to your vehicle and buzz off"

"Or else what?"

"Or else , I am gonna have to call the cops and I will have to spend tonight in jail for breaking your nose!"

Sonarika was surprised by the threat Vikram just declared on Dilawar. Dilawar only giggled in response. After staring at him for a while , Dilawar asked.

"Do you really think you can take me down?"

"I was raised in the akharhas of Punjabk buddy , in half my age , I used to bring down sloppy giants like you. So I will take my chances tonight"

Dilawat only glared in anger towards him but Vikram didn't budge. Finally accepting defeat , Dilawar moved away , walking to his jeep and driving off. Vikram turned to Sonarika.

"So who was that guy"

"Remember I told you about the incident with Anjali?"

"Yeah?"

"This guy was that man's brother"

"Oh , you need to be more careful Sonarika. Shall I drop you home?"

"No its alright. He is gone and I have a car"

"Fine then I'll follow you until your home safe"

"No need Vicky , my home is just around that street. Its alright"

Vikram smiled at her response.

"Why are you smiling?"

"Because I've never seen such a brave woman before. You confronted a dangerous man in this hour of the night. That takes some courage"

"Well , you know me."

"I know , and you always manage to make me crave you even further"

"No more funny business mister , you are better off jerking for the night"

"Don't worry. That is definitely the first I do when I go to bed tonight"

"Are you going to imagine me?"

"Definitely , I will be staying in that concert tonight"

"And here I thought you were going to think about Bali"

Vikram had a stunned face when Sonarika said that.

"So you are ready to come?" Vikram asked out of excitement.

Sonarika teased him further with thinking expressions and later said.

"I think you already know the answer"

Vikram had an unbelievable joy in his face as he grabbed Sonarika's face and kissed her hard. Sonarika welcomed that intense kiss and as he separated he said.

"I promise you , this will be the four days you will never forget"

"I am not that easily impressed lover"

"I don't want easy. I will take my time satisfying you in every way!"

"I bet you will. And maybe you can buy that bikini that you wanted me to see in"

"Oh that is definitely my first priority tomorrow morning woman"

"Well then , good night Vicky"

"Very very good night Soni"

They both separated giggling at each other as they got in their respective vehicles and drove off. Sonarika was excited about the trip curious on what costume Vikram is going to pick for her.

THE NEXT DAY

Harper and Irons were leaving the city and the country with Hemant's prototype weapon after a technical delay for few days. He went to the airport to send them off. They discussed on what the future holds. For now the current focus is on a presentation to the BLACKROCK execs at London which will commence in two weeks. As he was leaving along with other military personnal he ran into a face he haven't seen in years. The man appeared well postured despite of his age. Hemant couldn't help but smile at him but the man only had a smug expression on his face.

"Col.Sharma , it great to see you again sir"

"Its Brigadier Sharma now"

"Oh , congratulations"

"I am afriad that should be given to you. Considering this is your special day. Do you have time for some tea"

"Sure sir"

In about half hour , they were sitting in the office of the Veteran's club of the Indian army. Brigadier Rajat Sharma was making tea as Hemant sat in the chair looking around seeing all the accolades and accomplishments in military hung on the walls and in the shelves.

"How much milk Hemant?"

"None sir , I'll take it in black"

"What's the matter , any medical issues?"

"No sir , I have ditched milk consumption that's all"

Rajat handed over the glass as he sat in his chair as he started a conversation.

"I can see you are in good shape after all this years"

"Actually I was out of shape for quiet some time sir. This is a recent improvement , just a result of the process to reinvent myself"

"You were quiet a challenging soldier in my unit. I've never had someone so knowledgable in weapons and engineering as you. My superiors joked to me that you were suppose to sitting in a cabin at DRDO"

"It was just the thrill sir , you know I was captivated by being a soldier. The life , the living on the edge , facing the danger head on. Those were the qualities I craved at that time"

"Sure. But you were also reckless , insubordinate and had a hard time following orders. If it wasn't for your unbelievable hit record , you would've been court martialled years ago. Or it would've happened sooner........until he walked in"

In that last sentence from Sharma , Hemant felt a high level of discomfort and uneasiness. He was once again in that terrible situation where he was forced to think about his past. And the moment he did those nightmares returned again. He had a hard time maintaining his composure thinking about it. Sharma noticed his turmoil.

"So it still hurts huh? That past?"

Hemant rubbed his head and then responded.

"Sometimes"

Hemant was disturbed since that moment. Ever since Sharma enquired about it. This entire room felt like suffocating for him. He had troubles breathing at times. But after minutes of turmoil , he started to regain some composure. He imagined the faces of Karan and Sonarika and that always worked for him to overcome that suffering in his mind. Sharma observed all of this sitting in his seat noticing all the changes. He soon asked.

"Tell me Hemant , does your wife still believe in the lie?"

Hemant was taken aback by that question. He didn't expect such a question this quick , but he also knew him for a long time and he knows he likes to evaluate everything. Hemant maintained his composure.

"What lie sir?"

"That you left the army because you were scared. Does she still believe that you were traumatised from watching a fellow soldier die in front of you?"

Hemant struggled to answer that. And seeing that struggle gave Sharma the right answer.

"I thought so" Sharma continued on.

"Have you thought about this Hemant , I mean , chewed , right through your bone. That you escaped doing something terrible in the past. And now you are walking back into that same world again!"

Hemant didn't respond as he kept his head low looking at the table.

"You know damn well what will happen when you raise your head again. This life was a second beginning for you , and now you want to throw it all away?"

Hemant left a long sigh and responded.

"I have no intention to return to my old self sir. I am building something new"

"Well this new you has some of your 'old' history with you. The only reason you are still alive Hemant is because you started fresh. You put your identity to the world again , and they will come after you"

Hemant felt judged at that moment. He decided he had stayed his welcome too long.

"The tea was good sir. I should leave"

As Hemant was walking away. Sharma spoke again.

"Be careful what you wish for Hemant. This is not the same world you were in decades ago. You should not mess with the Devil unless you know you're going to pay for it with your life"

Hemant stood there motionless. Sharma contemplated whether he overstepped. And soon the confidecne in him  was slowly giving way for fear as Hemant turned. And Sharma realized at that moment , it wasn't the same simple man Hemant who was sitting in the chair moments ago suffering from his nightmre. This was someone else , someone he long forgot in the past and very terrified off. In his eyes , he could see the fire , the fire that once was responsible for horrendous destructions. Hemant looked him in the eye and responded.

"Last I remember sir , I slayed the Devil on his throne. I burned down his castle and left his kingdom and realm in ruins. That is not just a fact , it is a reminder of what happens when someone messes with my loved ones"

Sharma trembled as sweat was forming on his forehead. Hemant noticed it and moved towards him and picked up a tissue to hand it over to him.

"You were always a man I look upto sir. I have no ill intentions towards you. To be honest I am more than thankful there is someone who knows me for who I am"

Sharma looked up at him and said.

"That is what worries me Hemant. I know who you are , and I fear your new path will lead you to a war!"

Hemant gave him a reassuring smile. And then he responded.

"I am not here to start a war.But if there is one , you can guarantee I will be the one who ends it"

Saying that Hemant left leaving a cascade of tension and turmoil go through Sharma's head. He picked up his pressure tablets and consumed it and took a breather. His tensed body language showed a fear for the terrible future that is coming.

Hemant came to his warehouse in the evening to do some small cleaning activities. After doing that he was in the warehouse bathroom cleaning his hands in the water. He was still lost in the thoughts of the conversation few hours ago. Hemant knew Sharma's concerns had its weight. He contemplated on all the things that has been happening lately , the skirmish with Dilawar , his office problem with Sandeep , the insults he faced from Siddharth. It was all overwhelming him and there is a thought process in his mind that makes him think if he was in his formal self he would've never had to endure any of that.

But then images of Karan and Sonarika come in his mind. And then he realizes if it wasn't for his tranformation he would've never got a life and family like this. He now has a woman who loves him and a son who idolizes him. Deep in his heart , he always had the guilt of not revealing the whole truth to Sonarika. His mind was convinced that Sonarika will never forgive him if she ever learns about his dark past. He remembers the innocent face of his son looking at him , seeing him draw his father as a superhero. Hemant suddenly looked down and to his shock. The water in his hands quickly transformed to blood and parts of flesh. Hemant was shocked as he saw he was covered in red. He slowly looked up and in that reflection he saw his older self. An old him wearing a black shirt with blood smeared on his face. And he had an evil smile. Hemant quickly closed his eyes and stayed that way. Soon he opened his eyes and everything was back to normal.

Hemant moved from the bathroom and came into the room area. He walked around thinking about the past events. There was definitely a deja vu feeling that his life was on a crucial point. Soon his attention went to his old metal briefcase he stashed into the bottom of the bed. He removed it from there and slowly opened it. The case was filled with old memories of his childhood and teenage days , it had photos of Sanjana , his old friends , his sports trophies. But most importantly it had an old photo of Sonarika that he himself took on their first outing. Hemant had a smile as he caressed that photo. She was very happy that day.

As he moved through the stuff , eventually , amidst all the things in the middle buried beneath it was a mysterious small case. The case looked unique as it had a bronze coloring but on top of it had a gold design. The design depicted an eagle. 

Hemant carried that case and placed it on his work table. He was having a hard time wanting to open it. But eventually he gained some courage. 

He opened the case to reveal a 2005 Smith Wesson .44 mag stainless silver revolver with a chrome handle. And below that revolver was a uniquely crafted knife that is shaped like an eagle head and its handle having the color of gold and its hilt taking the shape of a crown. Hemant trembled at first but then took some deep breaths. His eyes were locked onto the weapons in that case as above the opened section , there was a pocket. Hemant picked out what was in that pocket and walked away from the case near the window. He opened it to reveal an old photo of Hemant posing with an old man who was looking happy and cheerful with him. Below the photo was written in blue color.

TO MY GUARDIAN ANGEL MICHAEL. THE SON I AM PROUD OF.

Hemant started to cry as his tears fell on the photo. He sobbed a little , getting overwhelmed by the pain of the past. He rubbed the tear drops from the photo. As Hemant embraced the photo to his chest. The back of the photo revealed a crafted image printed behind it. It was the image of Michael.

MICHAEL THE ARCHANGEL

                                                                                                                                                       (END OF CHAPTER 5)

[Harry Jordan]

You have connected with the story and I find too many similarities with other stories here and felt the plot is being repeated a lot. What is so pathetic about it...And I criticized it very respectfully.

Everything I am reading about Sonarika and Vikram is very similar from Facilitator. I do not see my comment as bad, its a mere suggestion to bring more plot with unpredictability. Only reason I am replying to you is because I want you to read others comment and understand first before jumping guns and making silly arguments.

~RCF

Don't worry , I take no problem with your criticism. Matter of fact , now I can see there is some similarities with The Facilitator. In my defense it was strictly coincidence. When I was making the character of Vikram , my first approach was to bring him as a high college sweetheart of Sonarika or a co worker or boss but those traits are very common in every adultery themed and infidelity story. Eventually I decided to take this approach because in this way , I could build the attraction angle between them and showcase the chemistry in a more cinematic way. To be honest very soon their story might just take the back bench considering the shift that is about to come. I have only explored the "Love" and the "Sex" part , there is also a "War" part that has only been teased since the first chapter.

When that aspect comes in , the whole dynamic will shift and new scenarios will lead the story. Even though I wrote this story on the Adultery section. There is more to the story than just cheating spouses and infidelities. There will be betrayals , hurdles , character groeth , deconstruction among many factors. All I can say now is I am actually enjoying designing this story. 

So from my behalf , all kinds of criticisms are welcome. It will help me understand what the readers expect and help me craft better products in the future.

[Speedy21]

                                                                                                                                                     (CHAPTER 5 CONTD)

That was indeed a special day for them. But it was also a special day for Hemant as well. His grind for months developing his prototype gun was complete. Today was the day Harper was coming and Hemant is going to perform an official weapon trial for ANVIL and the Client. It was strange that Hemant was still unaware who the main client was. Anyways he was very excited. While he was evaluating the prototype himself he remembered his last talk with Kunal and how Kunal was curious about Hemant's dream of a business venture. Hemant had certain ideas and he was hoping it will take him someplace interesting. Their friendship was developing into a much better phase now and Kunal had started to show some improvements in himself. He joined Hemant's WFLF fitness center and was working on building a better physique in himself. And Kunal's martial art training was taking full effects. He voiced his complaints in the first few days but later the complaints turned into enthusiasm. Hemant was preparing everything for the trail today.

Harper soon arrived and he stood by Hemant as he gave a short trial for him of the gun. He was very impressed.

"I am proud of you Egghead. I have a strong feeling that this will be the biggest turning point of your life"

"You think so"

"I know so....so shall we proceed"

"Alright"

Harper had shipped a code protected case to carry the gun and its parts a week before. After storing the gun in that container they both got on Harper's big armor truck. The ride was short as they soon arrived at the Mumbai Port NSG base. The weapon trial was to be conducted on indoor shooting range located there. Hemant met with some of the military personnals and beaurocrats along with Harper. It was when he made his way to the entrance of the shooting range when he got the surprise of his life. There at the entrance stood an older american man who had a smile on his face when he noticed Hemant. But the smile on Hemant's face vanished when he saw him. It was Jefferson Irons , a name and individual from Hemant's dark past. A past he was trying to forget but now seems like returning to haunt him further.

"Nice to see you kid....its been a while" Irons said patting Hemant's shoulder.

"So...you are the client?" Hemant asked with a smug expression.

"Indeed , I run ANVIL" 

Hearing that Hemant looked at Harper as if he felt betrayal from his part as well. Hemant looked dejected now as he contemplated what to do.

"No need to be angry on Harper, son. He is just doing the duty of a loyal friend. And in a way so am I because long ago a promise was made to you....I am here to fullfill that promise"

"Is that all you're here for?"

"For now I am here to see your hardware in action. We'll talk the future once the trial is done"

All the military beurocrats and Irons and Harper walked into the shooting range soundproof gallery. Hemant was instructed to perform the trial himself. In a way it helped Hemant with his confidence because he had faith in his creation. Hemant calmly assembled the gun taking it out from the case. Irons and Harper whispered to each other regarding the gun design and so did the other personnals present in that gallery.

Hemant's gun used the standard 39mm long cartridges , the bullets that were the benchmark in military in the past. They were used in AK 47s the most widely used Assault weapon in the world. But Hemant's gun had other interesting features. For starters his gun didn't have a standard ammo but bullets can be used in chains  like they did for heavy machine guns. Once fired the shell doesn't fall out but gets collected in a can to the right of the gun. The only reloading function to do here is remove the can and dump the shells and refit it. His gun also increased the velocity and the range of the 39mm than the AK 47s can. In short , the personnals concluded that this gun definitely can be very useful in an active warfield or place of conflict. Its shorter interval in single burst shots plus its ability to adapt its variety in scopes for better aiming also added more specialities to it. Hemant demonstrated each of its feature in detail. In a way spending all the years in Quadron doing presentations really helped him doing a much better presentation here for the personnnal as well. 

When the presentation ended , the gallery erupted with applause and claps. Hemant couldn't hear it but he could see them clapping to which he gestured his thanks. He soon walked into the gallery as each individuals came and greeted him and congratulated him for his craft. Soon it was Irons and Harper at the end.

"I told you kid , you always had some untapped potential"

"If you say so"

"No , I know so. All of them are impressed by your creation. And I can already see this tool of yours to make a boom in the international market"

"I thought you were buying this design from me"

"That was my intention , but seeing the potential this weapon has. I've decided to present it to other major players , I've already setup a meeting with the execs of BLACKROCK"

"BLACKROCK? But they are not exactly the good kind of company"

"Sure they're not , but they have government contracts and associations to DARPA. Plus they have a bankload of money that they will be willing to give you if they are impressed"

"Why are you so interested in the well being of my life"

Hemant asked our of frustrations , something that has been growing since his dark past. The smile in Irons's face dissipated as soon he talked more calmly.

"Because long ago William made a promise to you. And he couldn't fullfill it , before..."

Irons was fighting back tears as he said those words , Hemant too understood the situation and felt emotional knowing about William's death. He was after all Irons's son.

"He left this world with one regret that he couldn't give you a life you deserved. By doing this , I feel I am fixing the void that William left so that he can rest. Because I believe he is still around haunting all of us. And he won't go until you get the American dream!"

"I didn't knew you to have such supersticious beliefs" Hemant teased trying to ease the situation.

"Our actions fuel these superstitions son. And after decades of being in this outrageous world , it tends to build it in you. But I know in my heart , what I want for you is what he wanted. I only have the best interest in you son. In a way I see a lot of William in you"

Hemant couldn't help but hug the greiving man as they comforted each other. Soon they separated from the hug as Harper had a smile the whole time.

"I am going to punish you for this"

"If the punishment is done on a bar with the liquor of my choice then I crave to be punished"

All three of them laughed after which Harper said.

"See , I told you. The turning point , its right now"

"Its still early to think that Roy"

"Well , he is right Harper , this is just the first phase. In two weeks I will be setting up a meeting with the BLACKROCK officials in London. You need to prep for that" Irons stated.

"London?" Hemant exclaimed. The mention of the place brings some past moments turned terrible memories.

"Kid? Like Harper said , and I am saying it now. Don't just move on , evolve. We all are aware of your past. But please stop punishing yourself for it , there are good parts of you in that past as well , mold the good parts and adapt to a new life. Believe me , doing that will bring the drive in you to find peace"

Hemant understood his reasoning. And it has seemed to work , he has often thought about his past lately and it didn't sting him anymore. He was able to overcome the terrible memories and build something different in him. And having Karan and Sonarika in his life really made him push for that drive , because deep down he wanted to evolve so that he can be the best version of himself for them. An hour later , Hemant had a lengthy discussion regarding his future. Irons made a proposal that was worth thinking about. He still couldn't believe what he proposed but he had that curiosity and the drive to pirsue it to some extent. The prototype gun was handed over to NSG onto their high security vault until tomorrow then it will go with Irons and Harper via flight to the US.

The entire day Hemant thought about it , and by evening once the dinner was done. He got Sonarika's attention and came to the balcony to discuss about it. Sonarika was stunned when she heard what Hemant was telling about.

"A business?" Sonarika said stunned.

"Yes , you see my gun actually was created with a rare component. Its called a Vector Alignment Knot. Its kind of a screw but has a different physical characteristic. The knot helped balancing the gun and reduce recoil and Irons says that small component can be very valuable to other weapon types as well." Hemant explained.

"Hmm ,  so a production of that small material could be vital to other systems and since you are the creator of it , you can even get a manufacturing rights and import license for it. There is definitely potential for this business. Especially considering this is the weapons sector where millions are invested" 

Sonarika shared her mindset regarding it. Hemant was surprised by her knowledge regarding it.

"So what do you think?" Hemant asked.

Sonarika took a few seconds to think after which she responded. 

"Running a business will take a big resolve Hemant. There will be a lot of calculations and a lot of gambles and everything."

Hemant stayed silent as his smile was slowly fading away. Sonarika noticed it and soon responded.

"But I also know the untapped potential of my husband. He did a big gamble getting this house risking it all so that we can have a family. And I can see the excitement in his eyes right now. One thing I know about my husband , is that he can truly achieve anything he wants. I just want one promise from you Hemant"

"What is it?"

"That if you are taking this opportunity , I want you to dedicate yourself and make it grow so much that one day I will come to your office for a job!"

Hemant felt pride hearing her motivational words. 

"Woman, you are unbelievable"

"I have a man that makes me believable. And I know he can do it , I am definitely looking forward to it"

Hemant responded by hugging her. Sonarika cherished the embrace as she caressed his back showcasing her support and love to him. As she separated she noticed a naughty smile in Hemant's face.

"Why are you smiling?"

"There is another thing...you know we have our special day coming in four months right?"

Sonarika did the math and she realized he was talking about their wedding anniversary.

"Well , I've been thinking about doing something special this year"

Sonarika started to feel sad as she believed Hemant was going to throw a party. That is what his approach has always been.

"But it will be only about us"

Her eyes brightened when she heard those words. She waited in anticipation as Hemant revealed.

"On that date , I've reserved a premium suite at the Trident Hotel , with a special night package. No guests , no family members , not even Karan or Anju. Just the two of us on that room. And I wanna fill the void we had for a long time Sona"

Sonarika didn't say a word and just stared at him with watery eyes and a smile. But curiosity got the best of her as she asked.

"What is that void?"

Hemant smiled and then responded.

"You remember how exhausting our wedding night was. Our first night was a big failure thanks to our ridiculous function and all of that gathering. Well , I want to rectify that void in four months. So , we will have our first night on our marriage anniversary this year"

Sonarika's eyed glittered hearing Hemant say it. She happily embraced him again , showing her love and excitement for that day. As they went to sleep that night , Sonarika couldn't help but look at Hemant sleeping and cuddled with him. That was when she noticed there was something different with him , but she didn't care to find out what it was and was more enjoying the feeling of cuddling him after a long time. 

There was some sadness in her , knowing that she had betrayed his trust. But the idea of spending their anniversary with each other on a hotel excited her. And for the time being she wants to focus on her happy moments than the guilty ones.

The next few days went like the new schedule they had developed. Sonarika spend the morning hours until noon at Vikram's place. Soon the changes started to show in her often now. Sonarika had ditched wearing salwaars and sarees to the office and instead wore professionals skirt and slacks more often. She now had a new wardrobe in Vikram's place that was mostly dominated by casual wears like sundresses and jeans. Something she stopped wearing since marriage. The time spend in Vikram's place made Sonarika transform into her old confident and bold self. Their restaurant dates became more frequent.

But today was more special , Vikram had bought two tickets to take Sonarika to a Diljit Dosanjh concert held in the city. She was reluctant but Vikram's enthusiasm made her to give in. The event was a grand thing , the energy was unbelievable. They stood in the far section of the venue and enjoyed the vibe of the music. The punjabi side of Vikram came out in full swing , he was dancing and tempting Sonarika to let loose as well. The vibe and the ambience made the perfect environment for their connection to grow even further. They danced close together lip syncing the song getting closer than ever. Sonarika was shocked when she noticed that Mouni was present in the concert along with Sagar. This made her a bit upset , because now she kind of sees the parallel of her life with Mouni's.

But she couldn't help but enjoy her moment with Vikram as he embraced her from behind and danced intimately to each song. Their moment was fuelled by desire and intimacy as on occasion they kissed each other. Even one point they played with their tongues in their kiss. In her mind Vikram was the perfect blend of her college boyfriend Rocky and Hemant. He has the charms and attractiveness of Rocky but also has the caring and comforting behavior of Hemant. Althought Hemant is extra careful respecting her boundaries while Vikram considers to be as close to her as possible. 

Sonarika had already told Hemant that she will be late as she made up an excuse of attending a party of an office client. After the concert Vikram took her to a posh hotel to have dinner in a private setting with each other.

"You need to be careful with your behavior Vicky" Sonarika said.

"What happened" Vikram asked.

"Your hands were out of control in that concert moments ago"

"Well I cannot help it if my woman dressed sexy enough for the occasion. I had to make her aware that I appreciate her form"

"Yeah but control yourself. At one point I feared you were going to lift my skirt and do my right there"

"Well , that thought definitely haven't cross my mind"

"You are a dity mind Vicky"

"You don't seem to mind if I am not wrong"

"Well , that mind works wonders in a bedroom. Not in the open"

"To be honest I like doing it in the open , but not like in a concert though"

"Then where?"

"Oh , like in a beach , a deserted beach,  in a rain forest , at a waterfall , somewhere high in the mountains"

"Enough , you are unbelievably perverse"

"Hey its not that far fetch. Couples tend to do naughty stuffs like that"

"Are we a couple?" Sonarika asked.

"Yes , we are after all a secret couple"

"I am afraid secret couples won't have the luxury to do that."

"Actually they can if they have a good planning"

Sonarika looked at him with a doubtful eyes as she soon enquired.

"You have a plan don't you?"

"Matter of fact I do"

"And what is this plan"

"Its not that complicated. I had a business meet that was meant to happen at Bali , but the meet was cancelled but I haven't cancelled by flight ticket yet. So I was thinking I could buy another extra ticket and take my lovely partner with me to Bali for few days. Four days to be exact. Just me and you"

Sonarika raised her eyebrows hearing his plan.

"Four days? In Bali?"

"Yup , just you and me"

Sonarika stayed in thoughts as she contemplated on a trip like that.

"When?" Sonarika asked.

"In about two weeks. We'll leave on the second coming Saturday and return by Tuesday"

Sonarika realized what he meant now. There was a little anger in her.

"You're breaching our rules Vicky"

"What? How?"

"I told you weekends belong to my family"

"I don't intend to take that away from them whatsoever. I wasn't aware it was coming on that day. I swear"

"It makes me hard to believe that"

"Alright fine. How about the second week from now you spend that entire week with your family and then on that weekend you come to Bali with me"

Sonarika looked at him a bit confused. Vikram had an excitement on his face. Sonarika decided to tease him.

"A whole week. Are you sure you can survive without me for a whole week?"

"Do not worry , I will make up for that whole week in our trip I promise"

"That is a challenging promise"

"Well , I like challenges. And by the time of our stay. I will make sure you are satisfied from my promise!"

Sonarika blushed a little as they finished their dinner. By the time they were done , it was past 11.00 and time to leave. Sonarika said her goodbye as she got on her car and drove off. After driving off gaining some distance , she noticed the roads were deserted as it was late night now. But it was unusual for a Mumbai road to be this deserted even in the middle of the night. But soon the emptiness was gone as another jeep overtaked her car and was going in front of her. Sonarika maintained her speed and focused on her drive home. The Jeep then started to break on occasion making Sonarika at times loose control. She was slowly getting angry now understanding that the jeep driver is doing this on purpose.

Getting frustrated she brought the car to the side of the road and the jeep did the same. Sonarika got out of the car fuming from anger as the man driving exited from the jeep. It was Dilawar.

Sonarika has never met Dilawar so she was confused who it was. But she was slightly intimidated because of his size. Dilawar had a smile on his face , he definitely gave the appearance of a goon to Sonarika. She could deduce it consider the size of him and how he looked with his rough clothing and smug attitude. The smile only widened as he approached her but stopped to maintain some distance between him and Sonarika. Dilawar soon spoke.

"I have to admit. You look more beautiful up close"

Her anger only raged as she shouted.

"WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!"

"Relax lady , I am just here to see you in person that's it"

"Leave before you meet my sandals in person"

"Those sandals would feel like flowers to me"

"Worthless men like you say that until they get hit in the face"

"You can hit me anytime lady , it will make my night"

Sonarika felt disgusted with his attitude. Soon Dilawar changed his stance.

"I have no wrong intentions right now. I am just here to say sorry regarding my brother"

"Your brother?"

"Yes , you see. He has developed feelings for the young lady in your house. Unfortunately he did something reckless"

That was the moment Sonarika realized who this guy was.

"You are Rafique's brother?"

"Yes"

"Well get this in your head and your brother's head. Stay away from my family for good , or else there will be severe consequences"

Dilawar only smiled hearing that. He taunted her with expressions as he retorted.

"I like it. You have more fire than your lousy weak husband. I am still shocked that a pathetic waste of a man like him has a smoking hot of a package woman as his wife. Its a terrible shame"

"WHAT!" Sonarika shouted.

"Didn't he tell you? He once did a lousy attempt to threaten me. But it felt like begging to me. You deserve a real man lady. A real man that can appreciate that incredible body of yours"

"GET OUT OF MY FACE BEFORE I DO SOMETHING TERRIBLE WITH YOU!"

Dilawar only laughed in response as suddenly another pair of headlights shined on them. A BMW luxury car approached them and Sonarika instantly recognized it was Vikram's car. Vikram parked his car to the side too and got out and confronted Dilawar.

"You okay Sonarika?"

"Yeah...I am just frustrated and annoyed by him"

Vikram turned his attention to Dilawar. Dilawar didn't feel threatened at all but Vikram was bold enough to stand upto him.

"Can I help you big man?"

"Nothing , I was just talking to my lady here"

"Your lady? Its funny because you don't look like her husband"

"I know and its a shame. Sometimes fate just gifts the unworthy with great desirable objects"

"Well , its clear this 'object' is beyond your reach so why don't you tip toe your way back to your vehicle and buzz off"

"Or else what?"

"Or else , I am gonna have to call the cops and I will have to spend tonight in jail for breaking your nose!"

Sonarika was surprised by the threat Vikram just declared on Dilawar. Dilawar only giggled in response. After staring at him for a while , Dilawar asked.

"Do you really think you can take me down?"

"I was raised in the akharhas of Punjabk buddy , in half my age , I used to bring down sloppy giants like you. So I will take my chances tonight"

Dilawat only glared in anger towards him but Vikram didn't budge. Finally accepting defeat , Dilawar moved away , walking to his jeep and driving off. Vikram turned to Sonarika.

"So who was that guy"

"Remember I told you about the incident with Anjali?"

"Yeah?"

"This guy was that man's brother"

"Oh , you need to be more careful Sonarika. Shall I drop you home?"

"No its alright. He is gone and I have a car"

"Fine then I'll follow you until your home safe"

"No need Vicky , my home is just around that street. Its alright"

Vikram smiled at her response.

"Why are you smiling?"

"Because I've never seen such a brave woman before. You confronted a dangerous man in this hour of the night. That takes some courage"

"Well , you know me."

"I know , and you always manage to make me crave you even further"

"No more funny business mister , you are better off jerking for the night"

"Don't worry. That is definitely the first I do when I go to bed tonight"

"Are you going to imagine me?"

"Definitely , I will be staying in that concert tonight"

"And here I thought you were going to think about Bali"

Vikram had a stunned face when Sonarika said that.

"So you are ready to come?" Vikram asked out of excitement.

Sonarika teased him further with thinking expressions and later said.

"I think you already know the answer"

Vikram had an unbelievable joy in his face as he grabbed Sonarika's face and kissed her hard. Sonarika welcomed that intense kiss and as he separated he said.

"I promise you , this will be the four days you will never forget"

"I am not that easily impressed lover"

"I don't want easy. I will take my time satisfying you in every way!"

"I bet you will. And maybe you can buy that bikini that you wanted me to see in"

"Oh that is definitely my first priority tomorrow morning woman"

"Well then , good night Vicky"

"Very very good night Soni"

They both separated giggling at each other as they got in their respective vehicles and drove off. Sonarika was excited about the trip curious on what costume Vikram is going to pick for her.

THE NEXT DAY

Harper and Irons were leaving the city and the country with Hemant's prototype weapon after a technical delay for few days. He went to the airport to send them off. They discussed on what the future holds. For now the current focus is on a presentation to the BLACKROCK execs at London which will commence in two weeks. As he was leaving along with other military personnal he ran into a face he haven't seen in years. The man appeared well postured despite of his age. Hemant couldn't help but smile at him but the man only had a smug expression on his face.

"Col.Sharma , it great to see you again sir"

"Its Brigadier Sharma now"

"Oh , congratulations"

"I am afriad that should be given to you. Considering this is your special day. Do you have time for some tea"

"Sure sir"

In about half hour , they were sitting in the office of the Veteran's club of the Indian army. Brigadier Rajat Sharma was making tea as Hemant sat in the chair looking around seeing all the accolades and accomplishments in military hung on the walls and in the shelves.

"How much milk Hemant?"

"None sir , I'll take it in black"

"What's the matter , any medical issues?"

"No sir , I have ditched milk consumption that's all"

Rajat handed over the glass as he sat in his chair as he started a conversation.

"I can see you are in good shape after all this years"

"Actually I was out of shape for quiet some time sir. This is a recent improvement , just a result of the process to reinvent myself"

"You were quiet a challenging soldier in my unit. I've never had someone so knowledgable in weapons and engineering as you. My superiors joked to me that you were suppose to sitting in a cabin at DRDO"

"It was just the thrill sir , you know I was captivated by being a soldier. The life , the living on the edge , facing the danger head on. Those were the qualities I craved at that time"

"Sure. But you were also reckless , insubordinate and had a hard time following orders. If it wasn't for your unbelievable hit record , you would've been court martialled years ago. Or it would've happened sooner........until he walked in"

In that last sentence from Sharma , Hemant felt a high level of discomfort and uneasiness. He was once again in that terrible situation where he was forced to think about his past. And the moment he did those nightmares returned again. He had a hard time maintaining his composure thinking about it. Sharma noticed his turmoil.

"So it still hurts huh? That past?"

Hemant rubbed his head and then responded.

"Sometimes"

Hemant was disturbed since that moment. Ever since Sharma enquired about it. This entire room felt like suffocating for him. He had troubles breathing at times. But after minutes of turmoil , he started to regain some composure. He imagined the faces of Karan and Sonarika and that always worked for him to overcome that suffering in his mind. Sharma observed all of this sitting in his seat noticing all the changes. He soon asked.

"Tell me Hemant , does your wife still believe in the lie?"

Hemant was taken aback by that question. He didn't expect such a question this quick , but he also knew him for a long time and he knows he likes to evaluate everything. Hemant maintained his composure.

"What lie sir?"

"That you left the army because you were scared. Does she still believe that you were traumatised from watching a fellow soldier die in front of you?"

Hemant struggled to answer that. And seeing that struggle gave Sharma the right answer.

"I thought so" Sharma continued on.

"Have you thought about this Hemant , I mean , chewed , right through your bone. That you escaped doing something terrible in the past. And now you are walking back into that same world again!"

Hemant didn't respond as he kept his head low looking at the table.

"You know damn well what will happen when you raise your head again. This life was a second beginning for you , and now you want to throw it all away?"

Hemant left a long sigh and responded.

"I have no intention to return to my old self sir. I am building something new"

"Well this new you has some of your 'old' history with you. The only reason you are still alive Hemant is because you started fresh. You put your identity to the world again , and they will come after you"

Hemant felt judged at that moment. He decided he had stayed his welcome too long.

"The tea was good sir. I should leave"

As Hemant was walking away. Sharma spoke again.

"Be careful what you wish for Hemant. This is not the same world you were in decades ago. You should not mess with the Devil unless you know you're going to pay for it with your life"

Hemant stood there motionless. Sharma contemplated whether he overstepped. And soon the confidecne in him  was slowly giving way for fear as Hemant turned. And Sharma realized at that moment , it wasn't the same simple man Hemant who was sitting in the chair moments ago suffering from his nightmre. This was someone else , someone he long forgot in the past and very terrified off. In his eyes , he could see the fire , the fire that once was responsible for horrendous destructions. Hemant looked him in the eye and responded.

"Last I remember sir , I slayed the Devil on his throne. I burned down his castle and left his kingdom and realm in ruins. That is not just a fact , it is a reminder of what happens when someone messes with my loved ones"

Sharma trembled as sweat was forming on his forehead. Hemant noticed it and moved towards him and picked up a tissue to hand it over to him.

"You were always a man I look upto sir. I have no ill intentions towards you. To be honest I am more than thankful there is someone who knows me for who I am"

Sharma looked up at him and said.

"That is what worries me Hemant. I know who you are , and I fear your new path will lead you to a war!"

Hemant gave him a reassuring smile. And then he responded.

"I am not here to start a war.But if there is one , you can guarantee I will be the one who ends it"

Saying that Hemant left leaving a cascade of tension and turmoil go through Sharma's head. He picked up his pressure tablets and consumed it and took a breather. His tensed body language showed a fear for the terrible future that is coming.

Hemant came to his warehouse in the evening to do some small cleaning activities. After doing that he was in the warehouse bathroom cleaning his hands in the water. He was still lost in the thoughts of the conversation few hours ago. Hemant knew Sharma's concerns had its weight. He contemplated on all the things that has been happening lately , the skirmish with Dilawar , his office problem with Sandeep , the insults he faced from Siddharth. It was all overwhelming him and there is a thought process in his mind that makes him think if he was in his formal self he would've never had to endure any of that.

But then images of Karan and Sonarika come in his mind. And then he realizes if it wasn't for his tranformation he would've never got a life and family like this. He now has a woman who loves him and a son who idolizes him. Deep in his heart , he always had the guilt of not revealing the whole truth to Sonarika. His mind was convinced that Sonarika will never forgive him if she ever learns about his dark past. He remembers the innocent face of his son looking at him , seeing him draw his father as a superhero. Hemant suddenly looked down and to his shock. The water in his hands quickly transformed to blood and parts of flesh. Hemant was shocked as he saw he was covered in red. He slowly looked up and in that reflection he saw his older self. An old him wearing a black shirt with blood smeared on his face. And he had an evil smile. Hemant quickly closed his eyes and stayed that way. Soon he opened his eyes and everything was back to normal.

Hemant moved from the bathroom and came into the room area. He walked around thinking about the past events. There was definitely a deja vu feeling that his life was on a crucial point. Soon his attention went to his old metal briefcase he stashed into the bottom of the bed. He removed it from there and slowly opened it. The case was filled with old memories of his childhood and teenage days , it had photos of Sanjana , his old friends , his sports trophies. But most importantly it had an old photo of Sonarika that he himself took on their first outing. Hemant had a smile as he caressed that photo. She was very happy that day.

As he moved through the stuff , eventually , amidst all the things in the middle buried beneath it was a mysterious small case. The case looked unique as it had a bronze coloring but on top of it had a gold design. The design depicted an eagle. 

Hemant carried that case and placed it on his work table. He was having a hard time wanting to open it. But eventually he gained some courage. 

He opened the case to reveal a 2005 Smith Wesson .44 mag stainless silver revolver with a chrome handle. And below that revolver was a uniquely crafted knife that is shaped like an eagle head and its handle having the color of gold and its hilt taking the shape of a crown. Hemant trembled at first but then took some deep breaths. His eyes were locked onto the weapons in that case as above the opened section , there was a pocket. Hemant picked out what was in that pocket and walked away from the case near the window. He opened it to reveal an old photo of Hemant posing with an old man who was looking happy and cheerful with him. Below the photo was written in blue color.

TO MY GUARDIAN ANGEL MICHAEL. THE SON I AM PROUD OF.

Hemant started to cry as his tears fell on the photo. He sobbed a little , getting overwhelmed by the pain of the past. He rubbed the tear drops from the photo. As Hemant embraced the photo to his chest. The back of the photo revealed a crafted image printed behind it. It was the image of Michael.

MICHAEL THE ARCHANGEL

                                                                                                                                                       (END OF CHA

I hope she doesn't get pregnant in Bali just like the facilitator story  hemant past is insterting  I have a question for u harry   u nobody reminds anyone for the consequences for their doing!?!

[Harry Jordan]

I hope she doesn't get pregnant in Bali just like the facilitator story  hemant past is insterting  I have a question for u harry   u nobody reminds anyone for the consequences for their doing!?!

The similarity with the Facilitator story is just a co incidence. As for the consequence part. There will be eventually , Sonarika's character is too engulfed in her dual life for the time being. She is not concerned about the consequences at the time being but eventually she will have to. With respect to the story , Sonarika is a career woman , her friend circle considers her as the successful bread winner of her family. Even on the job perspective , she is now on the highest post of her office while at the same time Hemant's character desired the high post but never got it. But that is also the part that makes Sonarika embrace her love towards Hemant because Hemant finds happiness with what he gets. He is a secret introvert , always there to support her. And even though that is not the desired qualities that Sonarika sees in her dream man , those qualities are what makes Sonarika forge with him. In short , both Hemant and Vikram provides Sonarika something in life. With Hemant she sees her ideal life partner , a family man. But with Vikram , she sees the dream man she would've wanted. And then comes the opinions from people surrounding her that culminated in her making a choice to seek an affair with Vikram. But that is also a part of her dynamic , Sonarika immediately hates Kunal because the way he is being treated when around Mouni. And with the affair happening with Vikram , she believes that Kunal might eventually influence Hemant and turn him into like Kunal. Her character is kind of a short fuse , a person that jumps to conclusions from the first go. She only corrects herself when others correct her , best example is the first meeting with law enforcement when Sonarika immediately chastised Hemant when she learned he didn't file a complaint not even giving him the time to explain himself. Only until she went to the station did she realize her mistake and she apologized. Conveniently , no one corrected her thought process in her emotions towards Vikram , which is why she eventually fell to an affair with him because she believed her emotions were leading her the right way. This is one of her character flaws that will eventually make her dynamic change to something different because her choices will affect her later on.

Also , I want to point out the way the story is implemented. The narration implies that Sonarika is the strength of her family. When there is trouble , she is the one standing in the front facing it on. While Hemant is the one that solves it calmly. But like the recent chapter states , Hemant is no saint in this story. He has lied to his life partner , a lie that he had created to protect himself and his family from his past. But now there is shift happening and this shift will result in new scenarios to emerge which will not only ruin lives but even put them in danger. Every characters , everything that has happened , they are all interwoven in a maze which results in one action affecting the other. What is Hemant's past? Who was the old man in the photo that makes him emotional? Will Sonarika be careful with her affair? Will she be able to keep her affair a secret? And moreover , what will Sonarika's reaction be if and may she ever finds out about Hemant's past? Only time will tell. 

One thing I can say is , next chapter will be more focused on the story progression than individual characters. Some big shifts will happen. Find out this saturday!

FYI , this week's delay happened because of the Champions Trophy Final , LOL. Thankfully there won't be one this weekend so if everything goes well. Chapter 6 will come by Saturday or Sunday.

 HARRY JORDAN 

[Speedy21]

The similarity with the Facilitator story is just a co incidence. As for the consequence part. There will be eventually , Sonarika's character is too engulfed in her dual life for the time being. She is not concerned about the consequences at the time being but eventually she will have to. With respect to the story , Sonarika is a career woman , her friend circle considers her as the successful bread winner of her family. Even on the job perspective , she is now on the highest post of her office while at the same time Hemant's character desired the high post but never got it. But that is also the part that makes Sonarika embrace her love towards Hemant because Hemant finds happiness with what he gets. He is a secret introvert , always there to support her. And even though that is not the desired qualities that Sonarika sees in her dream man , those qualities are what makes Sonarika forge with him. In short , both Hemant and Vikram provides Sonarika something in life. With Hemant she sees her ideal life partner , a family man. But with Vikram , she sees the dream man she would've wanted. And then comes the opinions from people surrounding her that culminated in her making a choice to seek an affair with Vikram. But that is also a part of her dynamic , Sonarika immediately hates Kunal because the way he is being treated when around Mouni. And with the affair happening with Vikram , she believes that Kunal might eventually influence Hemant and turn him into like Kunal. Her character is kind of a short fuse , a person that jumps to conclusions from the first go. She only corrects herself when others correct her , best example is the first meeting with law enforcement when Sonarika immediately chastised Hemant when she learned he didn't file a complaint not even giving him the time to explain himself. Only until she went to the station did she realize her mistake and she apologized. Conveniently , no one corrected her thought process in her emotions towards Vikram , which is why she eventually fell to an affair with him because she believed her emotions were leading her the right way. This is one of her character flaws that will eventually make her dynamic change to something different because her choices will affect her later on.

Also , I want to point out the way the story is implemented. The narration implies that Sonarika is the strength of her family. When there is trouble , she is the one standing in the front facing it on. While Hemant is the one that solves it calmly. But like the recent chapter states , Hemant is no saint in this story. He has lied to his life partner , a lie that he had created to protect himself and his family from his past. But now there is shift happening and this shift will result in new scenarios to emerge which will not only ruin lives but even put them in danger. Every characters , everything that has happened , they are all interwoven in a maze which results in one action affecting the other. What is Hemant's past? Who was the old man in the photo that makes him emotional? Will Sonarika be careful with her affair? Will she be able to keep her affair a secret? And moreover , what will Sonarika's reaction be if and may she ever finds out about Hemant's past? Only time will tell. 

One thing I can say is , next chapter will be more focused on the story progression than individual characters. Some big shifts will happen. Find out this saturday!

FYI , this week's delay happened because of the Champions Trophy Final , LOL. Thankfully there won't be one this weekend so if everything goes well. Chapter 6 will come by Saturday or Sunday.

 HARRY JORDAN 

If she thinks kunal influence hemant just talk it out maybe that's wat u want confuse us i know hemant is no saint the story introduction of sanjana and hemant  had past i believe lot more to come

[RCF]

Don't worry , I take no problem with your criticism. Matter of fact , now I can see there is some similarities with The Facilitator. In my defense it was strictly coincidence. When I was making the character of Vikram , my first approach was to bring him as a high college sweetheart of Sonarika or a co worker or boss but those traits are very common in every adultery themed and infidelity story. Eventually I decided to take this approach because in this way , I could build the attraction angle between them and showcase the chemistry in a more cinematic way. To be honest very soon their story might just take the back bench considering the shift that is about to come. I have only explored the "Love" and the "Sex" part , there is also a "War" part that has only been teased since the first chapter.

When that aspect comes in , the whole dynamic will shift and new scenarios will lead the story. Even though I wrote this story on the Adultery section. There is more to the story than just cheating spouses and infidelities. There will be betrayals , hurdles , character groeth , deconstruction among many factors. All I can say now is I am actually enjoying designing this story. 

So from my behalf , all kinds of criticisms are welcome. It will help me understand what the readers expect and help me craft better products in the future.

My intention is not to drag you back from writing story, The arc is eerily similar and also you have been advocating a glorious ending for hero in all other stories so felt you have written the story by keeping that ending in your mind so was asking you to bring lot of unpredictability into the story so even though your ending as planned is written but is justified and natural hence my comment, Unfortunately not all see that way and jump to conclusions. Anyways I like the writing style so far despite the similarities.

Thanks for the effort!

~RCF

[Harry Jordan]

My intention is not to drag you back from writing story, The arc is eerily similar and also you have been advocating a glorious ending for hero in all other stories so felt you have written the story by keeping that ending in your mind so was asking you to bring lot of unpredictability into the story so even though your ending as planned is written but is justified and natural hence my comment, Unfortunately not all see that way and jump to conclusions. Anyways I like the writing style so far despite the similarities.

Thanks for the effort!

~RCF

Well , my hero is not exactly a full on good guy in this story. I always prefer the  "Gray" character approach. Ever since the first chapter , I've insinuated hints that Hemant is often 'portrayed' as a good man but there is a lot of underlying secrets associated to him. There is a dark past that he has buried to start this new life. So in a way , my approach was this push of improvement in this character results in a consequence to confront his past and there is an underlying danger that he might succumb to that darkness. In a way , when my character goes through a change and evolve,  he is not exactly getting just the accolades and gifts of his success but also the situation to confront the sins of his past. And this gives the character another opportunity to grow. The similarity came when accidentally I gave similar traits to my character from another story. Well one difference I can say for now is wife and boyfriend are in the same age group LOL. But I will be implementing certain interesting ideas in the future for Vikram. 

Anyways thanks for the compliments and appreciate checking out my story.

[Harry Jordan]

If she thinks kunal influence hemant just talk it out maybe that's wat u want confuse us i know hemant is no saint the story introduction of sanjana and hemant  had past i believe lot more to come

Well that is part of her character trait. She has jumped to conclusions and she will have to be corrected inorder to realize that what she was thinking was wrong. For now Sonarika has made up her mind about Kunal and she will have to see or witness the change in Kunal inorder to realize her judgement was wrong , which might or might not happen in the future.  As for Hemant and Sanjana , it is indeed a tragic love story , I've already given hints that they were inseparable college sweethearts. And in the future , you will learn what their love was like and why did it fall apart.

[DeanWinchester00007]

The similarity with the Facilitator story is just a co incidence. As for the consequence part. There will be eventually , Sonarika's character is too engulfed in her dual life for the time being. She is not concerned about the consequences at the time being but eventually she will have to. With respect to the story , Sonarika is a career woman , her friend circle considers her as the successful bread winner of her family. Even on the job perspective , she is now on the highest post of her office while at the same time Hemant's character desired the high post but never got it. But that is also the part that makes Sonarika embrace her love towards Hemant because Hemant finds happiness with what he gets. He is a secret introvert , always there to support her. And even though that is not the desired qualities that Sonarika sees in her dream man , those qualities are what makes Sonarika forge with him. In short , both Hemant and Vikram provides Sonarika something in life. With Hemant she sees her ideal life partner , a family man. But with Vikram , she sees the dream man she would've wanted. And then comes the opinions from people surrounding her that culminated in her making a choice to seek an affair with Vikram. But that is also a part of her dynamic , Sonarika immediately hates Kunal because the way he is being treated when around Mouni. And with the affair happening with Vikram , she believes that Kunal might eventually influence Hemant and turn him into like Kunal. Her character is kind of a short fuse , a person that jumps to conclusions from the first go. She only corrects herself when others correct her , best example is the first meeting with law enforcement when Sonarika immediately chastised Hemant when she learned he didn't file a complaint not even giving him the time to explain himself. Only until she went to the station did she realize her mistake and she apologized. Conveniently , no one corrected her thought process in her emotions towards Vikram , which is why she eventually fell to an affair with him because she believed her emotions were leading her the right way. This is one of her character flaws that will eventually make her dynamic change to something different because her choices will affect her later on.

Also , I want to point out the way the story is implemented. The narration implies that Sonarika is the strength of her family. When there is trouble , she is the one standing in the front facing it on. While Hemant is the one that solves it calmly. But like the recent chapter states , Hemant is no saint in this story. He has lied to his life partner , a lie that he had created to protect himself and his family from his past. But now there is shift happening and this shift will result in new scenarios to emerge which will not only ruin lives but even put them in danger. Every characters , everything that has happened , they are all interwoven in a maze which results in one action affecting the other. What is Hemant's past? Who was the old man in the photo that makes him emotional? Will Sonarika be careful with her affair? Will she be able to keep her affair a secret? And moreover , what will Sonarika's reaction be if and may she ever finds out about Hemant's past? Only time will tell. 

One thing I can say is , next chapter will be more focused on the story progression than individual characters. Some big shifts will happen. Find out this saturday!

FYI , this week's delay happened because of the Champions Trophy Final , LOL. Thankfully there won't be one this weekend so if everything goes well. Chapter 6 will come by Saturday or Sunday.

 HARRY JORDAN 

I guess I am the only one who did not find it similar to the story The Facilitator, because the Happily married working wife falling in love and starting affair with her boss or with new cute guy in the office is actually very pretty common plot and not something new or unique plot, there are like tons of stories with same plot . I understand that we all have been following the same story so its natural for people to think that there is some similarity but there is not because the story is not about adultery . The whole affair part is like 25% of the story , its very minor part as of now and we dont know the real intention of Vikram maybe in future we might get some twist . So Maybe the writer choose that the Vikram should be someone whose background is not well known to the Protagonist because if He were her college sweetheart then She would have some idea about him , So introducing him as someone she does not know prior is perfect setup , As a client . There are like tons of character with proper background which justify their action. There are multiple plots going on . As of now only the 25% percent of the story is completed , There are 15 chapters more to come.

Yes , That is what i have been saying her circle is full of Toxic Women all of them are victim of Patriarchy ( which is fine based on their past trauma ) but there should be one or two character who also give her correct opinion like dont cheat on your husband or maybe someone whose first opinion about marital problems is not to cheat or seek an affair no matter how tempting the other man is . Just to balance the thing because Its like the whole story is on the shoulders of Men who are at fault and they accept their mistake and they are working to make themselves better but on the other side all of the women are Men hating , cheaters and always doing the opposite of Normal   . That is why i said we need a character completely opposite of Meghna , Just for contrast , It will bring some fun . I mean a women countering every shit Meghna says ( I do not hate the character but love these character these character works as rage bait lol you feel angry but also chuckle i just love these characters ) . ( Minor opinion , just for fun )

Hemant and Vikram provides Sonarika something in life. With Hemant she sees her ideal life partner , a family man. But with Vikram , she sees the dream man she would've wanted. And then comes the opinions from people surrounding her that culminated in her making a choice to seek an affair with Vikram. But that is also a part of her dynamic , Sonarika immediately hates Kunal because the way he is being treated when around Mouni. And with the affair happening with Vikram , she believes that Kunal might eventually influence Hemant and turn him into like Kunal. Her character is kind of a short fuse , a person that jumps to conclusions from the first go. She only corrects herself when others correct her , best example is the first meeting with law enforcement when Sonarika immediately chastised Hemant when she learned he didn't file a complaint not even giving him the time to explain himself. Only until she went to the station did she realize her mistake and she apologized. Conveniently , no one corrected her thought process in her emotions towards Vikram , which is why she eventually fell to an affair with him because she believed her emotions were leading her the right way. This is one of her character flaws that will eventually make her dynamic change to something different because her choices will affect her later on.

Yeah , This thing is confusing. 10 years of marriage and she still doesnt know Hemant. I mean to think that Hemant is gonna turn out like Kunal is absurd and then she herself turned hemant into something that she hated " cuckold" . Yes your short fuse argument explained her nature but still on the cheating part its little hard to believe that she fell for Vikram too easily and then she completely changed . No guilt no remorse but now she is ready to even ignore her family for Her lover and at same time excited about her Wedding Anniversary . You have created very complex situation , I am excited to see how you gonna treat it . 

What is Hemant's past? Who was the old man in the photo that makes him emotional? Will Sonarika be careful with her affair? Will she be able to keep her affair a secret? And moreover , what will Sonarika's reaction be if and may she ever finds out about Hemant's past? Only time will tell. 

Michael the Archangel was best part    ( It reminds me of Archangels from SUPERNATURALS , I mean I can easily imagine Hemant in The Image of Castiel but with Black Trench coat )
But in the last para you  painted the Image Of Hemant larger than life , I just wanna say that you should do justice with that Image . 

What is Hemant's past? Who was the old man in the photo that makes him emotional? Will Sonarika be careful with her affair? Will she be able to keep her affair a secret? And moreover , what will Sonarika's reaction be if and may she ever finds out about Hemant's past? Only time will tell.

I was about to ask this , Do we get more of Hemant's past ? His parents his childhood . Its gonna be interesting to see from where he came from and how he became who he was . 

Chapter 6 will come by Saturday or Sunday.

Please Post on Evening of Saturday   

Kudos to you . 

[DeanWinchester00007]

And My favorite part of the PART 5 is *GUNS* and *Business* .

I like the detailing you put in explaining what was Hemant was doing and what exactly he created and why it was important and its USP .

And I love how you use the real agencies, Those officers , Their interaction, and Then bringing the International trade . The plan of business etc etc . Just love the detailing and efforts you put . I like that you are not rushing , many people would skip all these details but these small details make story more interesting and more authentic .

I wanna ask you , Did you do any research about it or Already had some Knowledge about Mechanism and parts of guns and how it work ? ( I know we all have some knowledge about how guns works thanks to Discovery and Nat geo and History TV18, but still I think you have put more detail in it so I am just curious if you wrote it by yourself or you did googling about it and then wrote about it )

and you also said That *History of Violence* is your favorite Novel (If I am not wrong , But i googled it there is no Novel but DC Graphics Comic? ) ( Right) I know about the movie , And I think Hemant's character was inspired by the Character of Viggo( Main lead actor man ) ?

[DeanWinchester00007]

Also There is this thought .

So Hemant is going gym and Joined his old fighting club and got back his old physique which is gonna be  his surprised for his wife Sonarika on their wedding Anniversary . But the thing is He only changed his physical self from mentally He is still the same Vanilla type sex guy. He is not Rocky or Vikram but The thing is  He is better than both Unless He wont let the beast inside him to take charge which is what Sonarika craves . So his whole plan on which he is working from very long time is gonna be waste . On Their Anniversary its obvious that they gonna intimate after a very long time given that Sonarika is having the best sex of her life its gonna be challenging for Hemant   . We know that he is capable of giving what Sonarika craves but He is not giving it to her because He simply does not know what her wife craves which raw primal love making . So He is gonna do the same Intimate Vanilla sex with her which is gonna ruined her mood and drives her further towards Vikram because after transforming his physical self he is still the same Hemant who is always in control and too cautious to not hurt his  wife . 

 SO unless There is some incident happens which changes him and made him loose  himself a little or filled him with rage which makes him aggressive during lovemaking or some thing that spike his testosterones and wakes his primal self which Sonarika craves its gonna be all waste . And also at some point Sonarika will experience the old Hemant and I think their Anniversary is the best setup for that . Or If nothing happens and same Vanilla Hemant goes to Hotel with Sonarika its only gonna make help Vikram and will increase his importance in Sonarika's life .  

( I mean its like cliche in movies , which  happens in movies hero after avoiding the dangerous situation / facing the death / or making it alive from death situation becomes horny and because emotions are high and testosterones pumping , He engage in Ferocious Lovemaking    , If hemant also experience something like this Then Only he would loose control and will care less about not hurting his wife and let out his true self which sonarika craves because on normal conditions or consciously he would never engage in rough lovemaking the thought of hurting his wife always gonna be in his mind which will stop him and thus not providing what her wife craves which will eventually make Vikram position strong in their relationship      ) combine with his Body its perfect Gift 
 
( Wrote this just for fun )

I am just Excited to see How Harry's gonna handle the whole situation. 

[Harry Jordan]

Yes , That is what i have been saying her circle is full of Toxic Women all of them are victim of Patriarchy ( which is fine based on their past trauma ) but there should be one or two character who also give her correct opinion like dont cheat on your husband or maybe someone whose first opinion about marital problems is not to cheat or seek an affair no matter how tempting the other man is . Just to balance the thing because Its like the whole story is on the shoulders of Men who are at fault and they accept their mistake and they are working to make themselves better but on the other side all of the women are Men hating , cheaters and always doing the opposite of Normal. That is why i said we need a character completely opposite of Meghna , Just for contrast , It will bring some fun . I mean a women countering every shit Meghna says.

I don't want to spoil the story but there is a reason I introduced all this toxicity only to introduce the deterrant later. There is already a female character I have introduced but not explored yet so her exploration will eventually bring the approach of a different perspective and will be crucial to Sonarika's arc not just in this part , but the entire saga in general. For now the toxicity arc is given more importance because tensions are rising in these characters life and very soon a huge conflict will emerge that will not only affect these characters , but also put some of them in danger.

Yeah , This thing is confusing. 10 years of marriage and she still doesnt know Hemant. I mean to think that Hemant is gonna turn out like Kunal is absurd and then she herself turned hemant into something that she hated " cuckold" . Yes your short fuse argument explained her nature but still on the cheating part its little hard to believe that she fell for Vikram too easily and then she completely changed . No guilt no remorse but now she is ready to even ignore her family for Her lover and at same time excited about her Wedding Anniversary . You have created very complex situation , I am excited to see how you gonna treat it.

Well that is the thing , she doesn't want Hemant to be a "cuckold" in the sense. But she also is conscious that she is indeed cheating on him. She dreamed many scenarios of a "cuckold" Hemant , but she didn't like those dream visions. In her mind , Hemant is a kind hearted man who only sees the good in people and is often very understanding to others. He always prefers diffusing the situation or ignoring any kind of conflicts. In a way through Mouni , she also learned Kunal had that same characteristics too and she is making herself believe that what happened to Kunal will eventually happen to Hemant because both of them had some similar characteristics. But Sonarika is terrified by the idea of Hemant becoming Kunal which is why she is full on against the idea of their friendship. Because Sonarika believes Hemant is too innocent and simple to understand Kunal might be manipulating him. And that is the part I loved more about writing this as her duality. Sonarika does feel remorse and pain and she has expressed it in the past. For now she is just more involved with Vikram , which is why it seems like she is ignoring her family. But in reality , she is just being selfish , she just wants to make the cake and eat it as well. Which is why I showcased her that way , she doesn't want to choose between her men. Rather she wants to split her life with them seeking different things from each of them.


Michael the Archangel was best part   ( It reminds me of Archangels from SUPERNATURALS , I mean I can easily imagine Hemant in The Image of Castiel but with Black Trench coat )

But in the last para you  painted the Image Of Hemant larger than life , I just wanna say that you should do justice with that Image . 


I generally took that inspiration from the Christian lore. I've hinted there is a "Devil" in this story with how there is a human trafficking and drugs ring that have used the Devil as their symbol. The girls trapped in that container had the "Devil" stamps on them which signifies there is a larger threat looming. But in the christian myths , Michael The Archangel was the one who defeated the Devil and banished him from the heavens. So here in the story , there is a connection of this devil markings to Hemant. Also in the Christian folklore , Michael is God's Angel Of War. So yes the character is meant to be a larger than life dynamic. And we will see in the future chapters how larger than life the whole setting can be.

There will also be an interesting connection to HinduGods folklore as well. It is a part I am curious about because the connection happens in a cool moment.


I like the detailing you put in explaining what was Hemant was doing and what exactly he created and why it was important and its USP .


And  I love how you use the real agencies, Those officers , Their interaction, and Then bringing the International trade . The plan of business etc etc . Just love the detailing and efforts you put . I like that you are not rushing , many people would skip all these details but these small details make story more interesting and more authentic  .

I wanna ask you , Did you do any research about it or Already had some Knowledge about Mechanism and parts of guns and how it work ? ( I know we all have some knowledge about how guns works thanks to Discovery and Nat geo and History TV18, but still I think you have put more detail in it so I am just curious if you wrote it by yourself or you did googling about it and then wrote about it )

and you also said  That *History of Violence* is your favorite Novel (If I am not wrong , But i googled it there is no Novel but DC Graphics Comic? ) ( Right) I know about the movie , And I think Hemant's character was inspired by the Character of Viggo( Main lead actor man ) ? 


A good portion of inspiration for my stories come from my love for the movies. And an important concept I always like in movie stories is the stories where the lead character is often portrayed as a simple man is often was someone else in his past , someone more bold and ruthless. The love for that concept started for me with my first Tamil film I watched which was "Baasha" with Rajnikanth. Then in hindi , my all time favorite "Shahenshah" starring Amitabh Bachchan. There is more hindi films in that concept I have watched but Shahenshah stands out for me because it also has Vigilantism as a cool factor. Then there is the Lokesh Kanagaraj movies which almost all of his films had that similar concepts where the lead males were all having some dark pasts and ruthless selves hidden in them. But the most I liked is the Malayalam Movie LUCIFER which to me is the perfect movie and story that has rightfully showcased this concept in the best way. Why is why I have used this concept in my story because there is a lot of intrigue and potential to take the character to unexplored territories with storylines like that. Another example is also Salaar movie. In a way I can say Salaar's world has an influence to my story.

But I won't be going overboard like the movie did, my story won't feature any fictional place or imaginary cities etc. LOL.

I will be using real locations though there will be events that never happened in the real world happen here , but I also want to acknowledge real tragedies like the Mumbai terror attack and make a connection with that incidents as well. 

And yes , the history of violence was indeed a graphic novel rather than just a novel and I acknowledge it as a wonderful piece of literature. As for the knowledge about guns , I am an avid game lover and my preferred games are mostly shooters so I tend to be very knowledgable about guns because we have to be aware about our tools right? LOL. And yes there was some good research that went with the story because of the world building I wanted to do. Hemant's past is another world of its own. And now its not just Hemant's character that is evolving , but that old world as well. And eventually they will come into conflict , and that will be when new challenges will come and dangers arise. So , future chapters will get intense!

[RCF]

I guess I am the only one who did not find it similar to the story The Facilitator, because the Happily married working wife falling in love and starting affair with her boss or with new cute guy in the office is actually very pretty common plot and not something new or unique plot, there are like tons of stories with same plot .

Really?
Hemant - Kunal - both happy husbands and love their wives..Work hard for their family. Sex became a monotony and life became routine.
Sona - Esha - Wives who doesn't seek thrill outside marriage but friends or facilitators bullshit influence them, they start affair with some resistance, then the third person becomes integral part of their life with out whom they feel incomplete, yet they love their husband and son and also want to lead dual life. Then they bring all their necessary things to a common place and make their new home as second home....

Also there is son in the mix here as well and both parents love him to the end of the world. ......Sounds familiar?
 
The difference in this story from that is...Hero gets more screen time, as this story is not about all the characters like facilitator but more about Hemant, add his dark past like John wick and add another heroine who is rich and influential family who eventually is available to him as option, obviously writer wants to give good story arc to main lead because he hates cuckolds and he hates weak male leads who gets cheated, he has been advocating it in all the stories so I felt the story arc here is little predictable, I did not want to discourage Harry because we should encourage writers here as much as possible but that doesn't mean i should not advocate my views and give him a fair alert and request at the beginning of the story to bring unpredictability to the story.

Now you come here and call my comment as pathetic with out clarity and thought. Either ignore or understand what others are saying before judging them..I hope and guess this becomes a lesson for you.

You need to understand others have their own perspective, I have made similar mistake before with others who did not agree to my thinking but I have learnt it, better you do the same. 

~RCF

[Speedy21]

Really?
Hemant - Kunal - both happy husbands and love their wives..Work hard for their family. Sex became a monotony and life became routine.
Sona - Esha - Wives who doesn't seek thrill outside marriage but friends or facilitators bullshit influence them, they start affair with some resistance, then the third person becomes integral part of their life with out whom they feel incomplete, yet they love their husband and son and also want to lead dual life. Then they bring all their necessary things to a common place and make their new home as second home....

Also there is son in the mix here as well and both parents love him to the end of the world. ......Sounds familiar?
 
The difference in this story from that is...Hero gets more screen time, as this story is not about all the characters like facilitator but more about Hemant, add his dark past like John wick and add another heroine who is rich and influential family who eventually is available to him as option, obviously writer wants to give good story arc to main lead because he hates cuckolds and he hates weak male leads who gets cheated, he has been advocating it in all the stories so I felt the story arc here is little predictable, I did not want to discourage Harry because we should encourage writers here as much as possible but that doesn't mean i should not advocate my views and give him a fair alert and request at the beginning of the story to bring unpredictability to the story.

Now you come here and call my comment as pathetic with out clarity and thought. Either ignore or understand what others are saying before judging them..I hope and guess this becomes a lesson for you.

You need to understand others have their own perspective, I have made similar mistake before with others who did not agree to my thinking but I have learnt it, better you do the same. 

~RCF

  I think wht dean meant to say is story has flaws and predictability is their this is his frst story right correcting n criticism two different thing and that to coming form u

[RCF]

  I think wht dean meant to say is story has flaws and predictability is their this is his frst story right correcting n criticism two different thing and that to coming form u

Yes but that's how we learn, I only meant to correct it so the rest of the plot will be corrected if its going to be too predictable. First story so no criticism means its not right. I gave credit where due, Harry's writing in sex scenes is top notch and well described, that's his strength and if he can get the plot right around it, he will be one of good writers here.

[Speedy21]

Yes but that's how we learn, I only meant to correct it so the rest of the plot will be corrected if its going to be too predictable. First story so no criticism means its not right. I gave credit where due, Harry's writing in sex scenes is top notch and well described, that's his strength and if he can get the plot right around it, he will be one of good writers here.

Just bcoz u commented on undercover desire I read the story yesterday  u r good at story reviesws

[Speedy21]

Wen will be the NXT update harry u said Friday r Saturday but nothing here!?