[RANA ROY]

Superb..........what a stoty.

[sunniappan]

how much ever sweet coated words her wimp husband write to her, she is unstoppable hereafter. Beautiful update.

[manmadhakunju]

Very hot update. Did patode delete the message after reading it?

[parottamaster]

OMG, whatten update dude.

[Tamilmathi]

Blisss.......
The way present the
Story is too admirable....
This is unimaginable updates...
Your writing skill kill my harmone
For entire body....

[sexypreeti]

Continued from the last post....

All that mattered was this. This climax. This freedom. This surrender. This overwhelming, soul-shaking ecstasy that she had denied herself for far too long.

End of Chapter 30: An Illusion of Escape: Part 3 

Really outstanding update  yr):

I have a lot to learn from you to improve my writing skills... :)

[jiljilrani]

Top notch writing

[damien123456]

You are on another level as a writer on the forum now. All of us eagerly await the next update and it will be a decisive one.

[Steven Rajaa]

Will shipra get to see Alok message. Will she fall in guilt after that. Waiting for her reactions. Good hot update.

[Kartikjessie]

Superbbbbb

[karimeduramu]

nice writing friend

[Vasanthan]

Great update as usual.
Now that shipra started hating her husband, patode should use his men to kill Alok, so that she will permanently stay in the same bank and be life time slut for him and give birth to his child.

[fanofallnature]

Great update as usual.
Now that shipra started hating her husband, patode should use his men to kill Alok, so that she will permanently stay in the same bank and be life time slut for him and give birth to his child.

Do not agree with this suggestion.....

Accidently clicked "Like"

[dineshnair5555]

Whilst I appreciate the interest everyone shows to this fabulous and meticulous writing, some of the requests or suggestions are downright ridiculous! I would personally love for Suraj to continue in his own blissful way and make things raunchier in his exclusive style! You absolutely rock Suraj, wishing you the best buddy. Also, it's absolutely noteworthy on how you respond to foolish suggestions and comments. A Lesson on how to deal with patience and grace. yr):

[dindigul]

tzzzzzz

[Umavictor32]

One request... In next episode it would be nice if we can see more of shipra submissive side... Because even in this episode though she is getting broken she still calls patode bastard... Also she never accepts her as a slut...
When namrata says u wana get degraded, she nevee says yes... So i personally wish to see her submissive side where she agrees herself to be slut and say she want to be degraded...

One more thing, just because she slept with patode.. It doesnt mean she will sleep with toppo... So need something more strong reason or attitude change

[dindigul]

Shipra’s submission to patode has reached its zenith. It was perfectly strategized & executed by patode. My salutations to the writer for his creativity and hard work to ensure regular and excellent updates of this fantastic tale of debauchery & depravity.

I have a few thoughts (read apprehensions) about future progression of the story.

1. Shipra’s reluctance
Most erotic aspect of the story has been the reluctant involvement of shipra in patode’s sex games. Her apparent unwillingness made the story very real & created the sexual tension needed to propel the erotic engine of this story

Would shipra’s total surrender mean end of reluctance on shipra’s part? This would be tragic. It would be interesting to see how the writer takes this element forward.

2. Patode’s dark turn

This episode for the 1st time shows a glimpse of patode’s dark side. It has scared & worried namratha as well. The erotic tension of the story is rests on the fact that patode never forced shipra. She did everything reluctantly but consensually. I hope this ultra-dominant version of patode does not run roughshod over shipra.
(also hope that blackmailing techniques are never used and those recordings were just a misdirection for readers from a very clever writer)

3. Involvement of Toppo

Erotica’s can be blended with many literary genres. It famously goes togather with horror, thriller & drama elements. This story has also so far blended thriller & mystery elements with erotic narrative with great success.

But one genre that cannot go along with erotica is melancholy or sad melodrama. In my experience, one cannot be hard (aroused) and heartbroken/sad at the same time.

Shipra’s submission to toppo would be tragic/sad for following reasons-

• Toppo is a purely evil character with no redeeming qualities. He engages in financial corruption & sexual harassment 
In comparison, Patode has some redeeming qualities. He is charming, sometimes even genuinely concerned for shipra’s wellbeing. He rescues the village woman and shipra, even though for his own selfish interests. Readers can still relate to this morally grey character & his quest to conquer shipra.


• It would also be unfair to alok. Alok might be floundering in his personal life as a husband but in his professional life, he was a competent and honest person.
Shipra’s submission to patode can still be rationalized as punishment for his failures as husband. So, we do not feel too bad for him.

But shipra’s involvement with Toppo would only be perceived by readers as punishment for a young man who dared to stand against systemic corruption.

PS
Above criticism/ apprehensions are only valid if one views the story from an exclusively erotica point of view. If one analyzes this story, as a thriller/ mystery, the direction of this story could not be any better.
I am curious to see how Suraj juggles various genre elements in this story without compromising on the erotic quotient.

This post is not a request to change course. i shared my thoughts in the spirit of open & honest discussion. Suraj should progress with his version of the story as he is the master of Ambruj universe. He knows how these intersecting story threads would develop in future. many plot points that we see unfolding might just happen to be clever misdirections meant to guise something even more riveting.

I look forward to the writer’s response.

[eslx1212]

The author Suraj has taken the suggestions earlier given and shown definite improvement in the latest update. I would prefer to leave the story delineation to his own choice.

[rkamini006]

Next update sir

[Suraj76626]

Great update as usual.
Now that shipra started hating her husband, patode should use his men to kill Alok, so that she will permanently stay in the same bank and be life time slut for him and give birth to his child.

Thanks man.
Let me clear few things-
1. Hate is a strong word... I wouldn't describe Shipra's feeling of discontent and neglect as hatred towards Alok.
2. Patode doesn't need to kill Alok. He's not a gangster like Saad Hasan. He is a shrewd and cunning opportunist who uses his psychological tricks to get his way.