15-08-2024, 12:34 PM
Patode is the only person waiting for shipra. She will be spoiled by his boss and friends of her husband too. cant wait to read how life changes for shipra
(15-08-2024, 03:49 AM)critic_honest Wrote: Great update.
This small incident of forceful act by Pathode turned more amusing when Shipra controlled herself at correct time. What made it more realistic and exciting was the response of Shipra. The slap was a powerful and well-deserved reaction from her, I would say. Shipra's body started betraying her but still she held herself and didn't lose control which showed her struggle, but also her character and strong mind. Loved that moment—it was definitely the highlight of the update.
You did an excellent job at explaining Shipra's mind turmoil & emotions. I only wish, there had been a bit more content to read since most of the update captured emotions of Shipra. It could have been lengthier for more impact.
My apologies for the typo in my previous comment, where I mistakenly referred to 'Alok' as 'Atul.' That was an oversight and doesn’t reflect my engagement with the story. I found the over-the-top reactions of some readers amusing clp); , but rest assured, I’m genuinely invested in the narrative.
Mistakes happen!
Just a note for the future:
Some readers are desperately looking forward for fuck session between Pathode and Shipra as if it's some porno movie. I would request to you dear author to refrain from it ang go with your own realistic pace.
The path to fuck session is long way ahead as it won't sound meaningful at, if it happens at this stage. The plot has just started to unfold and and building story’s foundation is crucial.
Hoping, you too are looking forward to make this story an epic which can happen only if, things happen when they are supposed to.
JOURNEY is always more exciting than the Final Destination.
Also, looking forward to see the bitterness to down down between Shipra and "Alok" in upcoming update as we wouldn't expect Shipra to take decisions based on agitation & wrong state of mind just because things were not good between her and "Alok".
Let Love prosper between them..
Expecting next update soon...
Love
(21-08-2024, 02:32 PM)maharsha25 Wrote: No offense bro but the plot went haywire, lacking erotic elements in this chapter. The conversation went on and on and never transitioned into a sex sequence quite when it required. Shipra doesn't look aroused rather the whole aspect of compulsions seems a bit overused in other numerous sex stories. In your chapters 8 and 9, Shipra was playfully seduced and a willing participant since she was purely sexually aroused, yet did not have any other motives to engage in a threesome. Somehow, it seems you can't seem to connect from where you left out in the chapter 15, the part where alok was calling and Shipras phone was buried under the saree and sweaty bodies were fukcing each other under a beam of moonlight. Some ending parts of a chapter triggers such a suspense and excitement among the readers, while the subsequent chapters don't match the same level of sensation as compared to the end part of the preceding chapter. In a sense , the plot lacks proper flow in narration between chapters. What should have been a legendary sexual narration ended up being a meaningless futile conversation of cat and mouse game between parode and the other two. It could have been simpler but the prolonged conversations really blew the air when all that was required was descriptions of a threesome sex.