[Givemeextra]

Is it over?

[mahamatherchod]

finally after a long time

[Rakul1985]

Flashback didn't seem interesting.

[gotfinally82]

Hi,
Narration is excellent.
But it's supposed to be Zaid's adventures and also I see less emotional scenes between the characters rather than more intimate poetry.

[mahamatherchod]

update

[mahamatherchod]

update

[momass]

update

[Rakul1985]

Please come back and get the pace in story as you have so many suggestions and expectations in the story.

[untamable_rohini]

Hey Guys,

Not able to continue the story for some reason, can anyone collaborate with me to continue the story? DM me if interested please.

[Rakul1985]

Hey Guys,

Not able to continue the story for some reason, can anyone collaborate with me to continue the story? DM me if interested please.

I would like you to continue my friend. But we can connect If I can help.

[Gopal Ratnam]

Please do not stop the new story like this. Hope you have the complete storyline in mind.

[Rakul1985]

#ComeBackIndian

[Rakul1985]

This will remain as inactive Thread.

[mahamatherchod]

update

[qazmlp]

Hey Rohini, we ought to check your story updates on this
thread now,right?!

[Chandan]

update??

[Paty@123]

Middle drop, pls continue till count

[PELURI]

what's missing is lack of creating sensuous depravity of affair by a wedded wife and as well aa deficit of tender description of the delicate bodily features of beautiful urvasi and strong zaid...emotional afhyachar is completely missing

[PELURI]

what's missing is lack of creating sensuous depravity of affair by a wedded wife and as well aa deficit of tender description of the delicate bodily features of beautiful urvasi and strong zaid...emotional afhyachar is completely missing

sorry guys...a few spell mistakes...it's emotional athyachar which is missing....though the context set up is juicy, character built up is lacking

[untamable_rohini]