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Ashadaran story!Fantastic update! Lajawab aur faddu writings
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#22
Outstanding update!

Incredible writings!

Absolutely mind blowing narrations! yourock
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#23
यह कितना बढ़िया अपडेट है! आश्चर्यजनक कहानी! अद्भुत लेखन।
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#24
What a great update! amazing story! Amazing writing.Absolutely fantastic and lascivious theme.
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#25
What a fantastic update! What an amazing story! What an outstanding writing.Just superb! Just fantastic! You are really an incredible writer.Keep going buddy. clps clps clps
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#26
Kiya mast update hai bhai
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#27
Lajawab,jabardast aur mast update!
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#28
Wow superb, waiting for next update
yourock
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#29
bahut bahut garam,bahut bahut kamuk aur bahut bahut exciting update!

ekdom fataka aur lajawab kahaani clps clps clps
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#30
Amazing....
Totally drenched.....
Superb....
Excellent writing skills....
Thanks for writing such a wonderful erotica....
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#31
Update do yaar
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Kuchh second baad Garima ko neeche se chilla chilli ki awaaz sunai diya to woh boli,"Offo subah subah yehi hona baaki tha". Woh yeh bolkar neeche gayi aur seedhiyon se utar rahi thi ki tabhi Raghu jo sofe par haath phailaye baitha tha woh use dekhkar bola,"Aao sethani aao, tum bhi dekho ki tumhara pati saala kitna bada dhokhebaaz hai. Saala apun ka paisa dene ke wajah se bhaag rela hai".

Garima Raghu ka baat sunti huyi chup chap seedhiyon se utar rahi thi. Karamchand chup chap dining table par baitha naashta kar raha tha. Raghu apna baat jaari rakha,"Saala tumse itna purana jaan pehchan nahin hota to abhi saala pakka tumhara gaand tod deta".

Karamchand yeh sunnkar turant bola,"Raghu yeh shareefon ka ghar hai. Tameez se baat karo. Yahan apna tapori wala gaali mat do".

Raghu yeh sunnkar haste hue bola,"Saala kya joke maar rela hai. Saala shareef aur tu?"

Isse pehle ki Karamchand jawaab mein kuchh bolta Garima dining table ke paas jaakar usse puchhi,"Tum paise lekar neeche nahin aaye".

Karamchand yeh sunnkar Garima se bola,"Are de to diye iske paise. Dekho table par rakha hua hai bag mein".

Garima sofe ke saamne table par rakhe bag ke taraf dekhkar Raghu se boli,"Raghu tumhare paise to mil gaye. Ab jo ho gaya use bhool jao. Baat ko badhane se kya fayeda".

Raghu yeh sunnkar bola,"Saala yeh tumhara pati apun ko chillar samjhela hai kya? 2 lakh 40 hazaar apun ka hissa banta hai aur yeh dedh lakh de rela hai apun ko. Aao sethani tum bhi dekh lo nahin to saala apun hich badnaam ho jayega ki apun gundagardi kar rela hai. Saala apun ko apna hich paisa ke liye jhamela karna pad rela hai"

Garima yeh sunnkar gusse se Karamchand ke taraf dekhi. Karamchand Garima ko expression dekhkar bola,"Are baaki ke paise kal de dunga na. Abhi itna se kaam to chala hi sakta hai."

Raghu yeh sunnkar bola,"Abe seth apun ka kitna se kaam chalenga woh apun samjhega. Tere se apun apna hissa maang rela hai chup chap woh de."

Phir woh Garima ko dekhkar bola,"Saala se jitna pyaar se pesh aa rela hai utna hich drama kar rela hai. Iske jagah dusra koi hota to abhi tak munh tod diyela hota itna drama karne pad".

Karamchand yeh sunnkar bola,"Abe dhamkata kisko hai, tera gundagardi se.... "

Garima yeh sunnkar Karamchand ko beech mein hi sakhti se boli,"Kyun baat ko badha rahe ho? Woh to apna hissa hi maang raha hai na. Abhi ke abhi baaki ke 90 hazaar do Raghu ko aur yeh jhamela khatam karo".

Karamchand yeh sunnkar Garima ko pyaar se bola,"Darling main baat ko badha raha hoon ya yeh. Sunn nahin rahi kaise gundagardi kar raha hai, mujhe dhamka raha hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar gusse wali expression se boli,"Dhamka nahin raha hai bata raha hai ki tumhari itni izzat karta hai isliye bas apna haq maang raha hai. Aur yeh kya gundagardi kar raha hai? Tumhara collar pakda hai ya tumhe peet raha hai?"

Yeh sunnkar Raghu bola,"Saala wahich baaki hai. Wahich karna padenga"

Garima yeh sunnkar Raghu ke taraf dekhkar narazgi jatati huyi boli,"Raghu please".

Raghu yeh sunnkar chup ho gaya.

Garima Karamchand ko sakhti se boli,"Abhi ke abhi baaki 90 hazaar laakar Raghu ko do aur baat khatam karo".

Karamchand yeh sunnkar bola,"Garima mujhe late ho jayegi. Flight bhi pakadna hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar gusse se boli,"Mujhe batao paise kahan rakhe ho. Main laati hoon".

Karamchand phir se hara hua sa Garima ko bola,"Kaan idhar karo".

Garima yeh sunnkar uske taraf kaan ki to Karamchand use bola ki paise kahan rakhe hai usne. Garima yeh sunnkar boli,"Bewajah ka baat badhaye bina bhi yeh ho sakta tha na".

Karamchand bina kuchh bole waapas nashta karne laga. Garima Raghu ke taraf dekhkar boli,"Raghu main laakar deti hoon baaki ke paise. Tab tak tum breakfast kar lo".

Raghu jo sofe par baitha cigarette pee raha tha woh yeh sunnkar bola,"Apun ke paas time nahin hai abhi. Ek kaam se jaana hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar boli,"Theek hai main pack karwa deti hoon".

Phir Garima apni naukrani ko boli,"Shanta Raghu ke liye breakfast pack kar dena to".

Yeh bolkar Garima upar jaane lagi to Raghu bola,"Yeh sab karke koi fayeda nahin sethani. Apun ka mood bahot kharab ho chukela hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar seedhi par se hi uske taraf dekhkar boli,"Shut up. Mere saamne yeh drama nahin chalega".

Raghu yeh sunnkar sofe par phailkar baithe hue cigarette ka kash lagaakar Garima ko upar se neeche dekhne laga. Garima bhi kuchh seconds waise hi khadi rahi aur phir boli,"Main paise lekar aati hoon".

Yeh bolkar woh upar jaane lagi. Raghu cigarette peete hue Garima ki gaand dekhne laga. Thodi der baad Garima paise lekar neeche utri to Karamchand nashta kar chuka tha aur chai pee raha tha.

Garima Raghu ke paas jaakar use paise deti huyi boli,"Yeh lo gin lo. Maine gine nahin hai".

Yeh sunnkar Raghu uski haath se paise lete hue bola,"Tum ginti to apun ginta nahin. Magar saala yeh seth ka ab bharosa nahin hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar Raghu ko dekhkar apni aankhein badi karti huyi boli,"Raghu ab note ki gaddi mein kya gadbad ho sakti hai. Tum bhi na".

Phir woh boli,"Tum gino main breakfast karne ja rahi hoon. Tum kuchh nahin khaoge?".

Raghu yeh sunnkar paise ginte hue Garima ke taraf dekhe bina "na" mein sir hilakar bola,"Nahin".

Garima yeh sunnkar kuchh seconds usko paise ginte dekhi aur phir wahan se chali gayi aur breakfast karne lagi. Kuchh der mein Shanta breakfast pack karke Garima ke paas layi to Garima Raghu ke taraf ishara karti huyi boli,"Raghu ko de do".

Shanta Raghu ke taraf jaane hi wali thi ki Garima Juice ke jug se ek glass juice bharti huyi boli,"Ek minute. Yeh bhi le jao".

Shanta breakfast aur juice ko lekar Raghu ke taraf jaane lagi to Karamchand dheere se bola,"Garima itni khatirdaari karne ki kya zarurat hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar dheere se hi magar sakhti se boli,"Are ghar aaya hua mehmaan hai. Kya kuchh khane ke liye puchh bhi nahin sakti. Tum bhi na hadd karte ho. Ab subah subah mera mood kharab mat karo".

Uske baad Raghu ke paas Shanta breakfast lekar gayi to Raghu jor se bola,"Ae sethani yeh sabse kuchh nahin hone wala. Ab apun ka rasta alag hai. Yeh dhokhebaaz seth ke saath apun kaam nahin karenga".

Garima table par baithi huyi muskurakar boli,"To isse juice ka kya lena dena? Paise to mil gaye na, ab gussa shaant karo aur juice piyo".

Raghu yeh sunnkar apna mobile mein dekhkar bola,"Haan mil giyela itna drama ke baad. Lekin iska matlab yeh nahin ki apun seth ke saath kaam karenga".

Yeh bolkar Raghu mobile ko kaan mein laga liya to Garima kuchh nahin boli. Iss beech Karamchand chai peekar uth gaya aur Garima ke gaal par kiss karke bola,"Bye darling. Take care" aur chala gaya. Jab Karamchand Garima ke gaal par kiss kar raha tha to Raghu ka nazar Garima ke taraf hi tha. Garima ek nazar Raghu ke taraf dekhne ke baad Karamchand ko dekhkar muskurakar jawaab mein boli,"Bye.You too take care".

Karamchand ke jane ke baad Raghu phone disconnect kar diya. Tab tak Garima bhi breakfast kar chuki thi. Raghu phone disconnect karke uthne laga to Garima uske taraf dekhti huyi boli,"Juice".

Raghu yeh dekhkar muskurate hue bola,"Kya baat hai sethani bahot khyaal kar reli ho mera aaj. Saala ek taraf woh seth apun ka paisa maarne mein lagela hai aur dusri taraf sethani apun ka khaatir kar reli hai. Kahin seth ke kehne par zeher to nahin mila diyeli ho juice mein".

Garima yeh sunnkar banawati gusse se boli,"Shut up."

Yeh bolkar Garima dining table se uthi to Raghu hasne laga,"Hahaha".

Garima jawaab mein boli,"Bol to aese rahe ho jaise isse pehle kabhi khaane peene ke liye maine puchha hi nahin hai. Mere pati aur apne jhagre ke beech mein mujhe mat ghaseeto".

Garima itne mein sofe ke paas pahunchi aur woh glass uthakar juice ka ek sip lekar boli,"Ab khush?" aur yeh bolkar woh Raghu ke taraf glass badha di.

Raghu Garima ke haath se glass lekar uski aankhon mein dekha aur phir ek nazar uski jism par daalkar gatagat juice peene laga to Garima boli,"Are araam se baith kar to piyo. Yeh kaise pee rahe ho?"

Raghu juice peekar apna munh saaf karte hue bola,"Itna time nahin hai abhi apun ke paas. Saala tumhara pati aese hich paisa latka kar subah ka time waste kar diyela hai apun ka. Chalta hai apun".

Garima Raghu ko juice peene ke baad haath se munh saaf karta dekh apni sir hilane lagi aur phir mann hi mann boli,"Eeww kabhi sudharne wala nahin hai ye".

Raghu jaane laga to Garima ki nazar table par rakhe breakfast ke pack par pada to woh use uthati huyi boli,"Raghu yeh breakfast to lete hue jao" aur yeh bolkar woh tezi se darwaze ke paas jaakar use breakfast deti huyi boli,"Itni bhi kya jaldi hai. Breakfast to lete hue jao".

Raghu yeh sunnkar Garima ke taraf dekha aur phir uske haath se breakfast lekar bola,"Saala ek taraf woh seth hai jo apun ko dekhne nahin mangta hai aur ek taraf uski biwi sethani hai jo pyar se juice pila reli ha aur breakfast de reli hai. Saala dono ke beech zameen aasmaan ka antar hai".

Garima yeh sunnkar muskurati huyi boli,"Are to tum koi anjaan ho kya aur rahi baat Karam se tumhare jhagre ki to woh tum dono ke beech ka baat hai. Uske kaaran tum mere liye anjaan nahin ho jaoge aur please kitni baar kaha hai mujhe sethani mat bola karo. It sounds so old fashioned".

Raghu yeh sunnkar bola,"Achha theek hai nahin bolega. Iske liye itna angrezi kahe ko jhaar reli ho".

Garima yeh sunnkar muskura di.

Garima ko muskurate hue dekh Raghu usko upar se neeche dekhne laga to Garima usse ek ada se puchhi,"Kya dekh rahe ho? Achhi nahin lag rahi kya aaj?"

Raghu yeh sunnkar bola,"Are nahin bahot achhi lag reli ho. Wahich to apun dekhkar soch rela hai" aur itna bolne ke baad Raghu Garima ke taraf haath badhakar hawa mein haath upar se neeche karte hue aage bola,"Tum saala itna khoobsurat. Sir se lekar paon tak pura apsara lagti ho,ek dum heroine aur dil ki bhi achhi ho"

Garima yeh sunti huyi muskura rahi thi.

Phir Raghu aage bolna jaari rakha,"aur kahan saala woh tondu khadus". Yeh sunte hi Garima apni munh kholkar chaunkne ka expression di aur phir banawti gusse se Raghu ke taraf dekhkar boli,"Shut up. Meri tareef ke saath uska burai karna zaruri tha kya? Jaisa bhi hai mera husband hai woh"

Raghu haste hue bola,"Hahaha are wahich to apun ko samajh nahin aata hai ki tumhari jaisi itni khoobsurat aur achhi biwi iss khadus ko kaise mil giyela".

Garima yeh sunnkar muskurati huyi boli,"Good question.Agli baar Karam se milna to puchh lena. Theek hai? ".

Raghu yeh sunnkar haskar bola," Hahaha. Achha chalta hai apun. Late ho rela hai. Breakfast ke liye Thank you" aur phir chala gaya.

Garima usko muskurati huyi gaadi mein baithte hue dekhi aur jab woh baithne laga to woh haath wave karke "Bye" bolkar ghar mein gaand matkati huyi chali gayi. Raghu gaadi mein baithkar Garima ki gaand dekhne laga aur Garima ke ghar mein ghusne ke baad darwaza bandh karne ke liye ghumi to Raghu ko khud ki taraf dekhte paakar haathon se ishara ki ki kya hua. Raghu usko dekhkar muskurate hue "naa" mein sir hilaya to Garima muskurati huyi apni haathon ko hilakar use "bye" ki to Raghu bhi haath hilakar "bye" karke gaadi start karke chala gaya. Garima gate par khadi huyi kuchh second tak gaadi ko dekhti rahi phir darwaza bandh kar di.
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#33
Jabardast update! Out class story! bahut khoob!
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#34
Jaan hi leloge kya ab.....
Muahhhh....
Love you dil se for your amazing writing...
Superb....
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ekdom kamaal ka update! dil kush kar dhiya aapne yaar,bahut acha aur bahut khoob!
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Hi Sean,

A very long time. I hope you are doing fine.
I thought I would find you on Anita Singh's story, continuing further story about how we moved so far in the story from hariyas bed to birthday party with 5 people and Anita Singh the only one. I hope you will continue that story and i am sincerely hoping for that.


Now onto this story,
The start is fresh but tbh it is a bit so and so as the real action is yet to start. But considering the three updates it is clear who is actress and actress of the story. Tbh Sean I am yet to feel the seansean touch in this story, it is possible that it is too early to ask for or maybe not seeing what type of stories you've written before and in what depth you have gone to explain the scenarios. Anyway, garima looks absolutely stunning and Raghu is the exact hero we are familiar with from your previous stories. It is going smooth as it should and As i have already said that I completely trust you for giving us what we want to read and looking forward to.

Thank you for coming back and many congratulations for this new story.

Happy new year as well!!
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(05-01-2023, 09:27 PM)Kinkpinkboy Wrote: Hi Sean,

A very long time. I hope you are doing fine.
I thought I would find you on Anita Singh's story, continuing further story about how we moved so far in the story from hariyas bed to birthday party with 5 people and Anita Singh the only one. I hope you will continue that story and i am sincerely hoping for that.


Now onto this story,
The start is fresh but tbh it is a bit so and so as the real action is yet to start. But considering the three updates it is clear who is actress and actress of the story. Tbh Sean I am yet to feel the seansean touch in this story, it is possible that it is too early to ask for or maybe not seeing what type of stories you've written before and in what depth you have gone to explain the scenarios. Anyway, garima looks absolutely stunning and Raghu is the exact hero we are familiar with from your previous stories. It is going smooth as it should and As i have already said that I completely trust you for giving us what we want to read and looking forward to.

Thank you for coming back and many congratulations for this new story.

Happy new year as well!!

Thanks for the feedback. Really appreciate it. Can you please be more clear about the story being so and so and what is missing in the story or writing so far? The readers perspective is also important and it may help me understand if there is something I have missed. Thanks.
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#38
Nice update yaara....aapke lekhani ka jadoo aisa hai ki saamne movie chal rahi ho wesa feel hota hai....
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Hi Sean,

It's great to see that you are back..... But it seems like this story is going to be different from Anita because garima is so fucking rich that she is never gonna let someone like Hariya ever touch her, also she is a hothead and has attitude whereas Anita was kind hearted so it would make very difficult for some poor low class guy to woo her.....
But again it's a new story and a new character....

All the best for the story
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(06-01-2023, 12:20 AM)Fuckstar Wrote: Hi Sean,

It's great to see that you are back..... But it seems like this story is going to be different from Anita because garima is so fucking rich that she is never gonna let someone like Hariya ever touch her, also she is a hothead and has attitude whereas Anita was kind hearted so it would make very difficult for some poor low class guy to woo her.....
But again it's a new story and a new character....

All the best for the story

Thanks for the analysis of the story and the character. This kind of feedback where the readers share their point of view of the character and the story is really helpful to the writer in understanding whether the reader's comprehension of the story and the character is exactly as the writer intended to show. Thanks again!!
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