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Adultery MOHINI (Erotic Horror)
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Thanks Hira ji❤
Doston previous page is the updated page. Abhitak jinhone nahi para hai par lijiye
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Doston...... Nayaa update Kaal aa raha hai.❤
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After previous update....


Arun k papa turant woh jagah chorkey wapas us bedroom ke taraf daurey jahan woh ab tak thei. Us bedroom ke under jakar firse ek shock.


Abhi abhi jis patni ko apney betey ke sath soya hua dekh kar aye.. Wohi patni yahan pe leti hui hai!!

Yeh... Kaise ho sakta hai?!!

Darr bhi rahe thei Abhishek aur hairaan bhi the. Dipti unko dekhkar pooch- kya hua? Aise kya dekh rahe ho? Yahan aao... Mere paas.

Abhishek kisi tarah khud ko samhaal ke darrte huye poochey - t.... T.. Tum.... Tum kaun ho?

Dipti - kya? Kya bol rahe ho?

Abhishek - kaun ho tum?

Dipti- kya mazak kar rahe ho jaan? Main dipti ho... Tumpari patni.... Tumhare bacchey ki maa...

Nahin..... Chilla kar boley arun k papa. Ab ek gussa bhi tha unke under. Woh boley - tum Dipti nahi ho..... Kyunki main abhi bedroom mein check karkey ayaa..... Wahan meri biwi apne betey ke sath so rahi hai. Agar woh dipti hai... Toh tum kaun ho?

Yeh sunkar Dipti ab arun k papa ke taraf dekhkar ek vayanak muskaan diya. Kitna darawna muskan thaa woh. Abhishek ji darr gaye. Dipti bed se uthkar khari ho gayi. Badan pe koi kapra nahi, bilkul nangi hai dipti par abhi dipti ko dekhkar arun k papa ko uttejana nahi balki darr lag raha hai.

Dipti dheere dheere muskuraate huye Abhishek ke taraf barney lagi. Ab uski aank se neela roshni nikal raha tha. Thori der pehele hi arun ke papa ka jo kamras nikal ke uske pet ke upar gira tha... Us ras ko ungli mein lekey chusney lagi. 

Dipti boli - darr kyu rahe ho? Main toh aapki hi iccha puri kar rahi hoo... Aap yahi toh chahte the ke aaj apni patni ke sath milan karey.

Arey!!! Yeh awaz toh Dipti ki nahi hai... Dipti ki awaz kaise change ho gayi? Yeh awaz toh pehele bhi suna hain Abhishek ne.... Yeh awaz toh.... Yeh awaz toh!!

Abhishek ji darrte huye peechey chalte chalte deewar se peeth laga ke kharey ho gaye. Woh darrtey huye boley - tum........... MOHINI?!!!!!!

Yeh sunkey Dipti hasney lagi aur Abhishek ji ke bilkul paas akaar khari ho gayi aur boli - jee..... Main aapki Mohini..... Pakar liya aapne.

Arun k papa confused hokar boley - par.... Par yeh kaide samvab hai? Tum toh ek sapna ho..... Tum yaha kaise? Aur tum toh bilkul alaag dikhti ho.... Tum meri biwi ki tarah kaise...???

Dipti urf Mohini apna chehra Abhishek ji ke muh ke paas lakar muskuraake boli - main sapna bhi hoo.... Aur haqiqaat bhi. Aapko kya laga? Mohini ko samajhna itna asaan nahi....... Aur aapke dusrey sawal ka jawab hai main yahan aapko khush karne ayi hu. Aapko khush karna mera uddesya hai. Isliye aap jis roop mein mujhey kalpana karengey usi roop mein main aaungi aapke paas. Apko har tarikey se mujhe khush karna hai.

Abhishek ji ko biswas nahi ho raha tha jo bhi unke sath ho raha tha. Woh boley - par.... Par yeh... Kaise?

Mohini ek haat se arun k papa ke chaati pe rakhkey unkey honthon ke paas apna honth lakar boli - aaj main aapki patni bankey aayi hu..... Aaj patni ke sath jo chahey kijiye.... Apki woh patni jo sukh apko nahi de paayi..... Yeh patni woh har sukh aapko degi.

Yeh bolkey mohini...... Ya Dipti bolna chahiye..... Woh arun k papa ke honth chusney lagi. Abhishek ji darr bhi rahe the par sath mein ek ajeeb sa feeling bhi ho raha tha. Dipti honth chorkey Abhishek ji ke chaati ko chumney lagey. Chaati se hote huye dipti unke pet ko ab chumney lagey.

Aur fir Dipti neechey ghutno pe baith gayi. Uske aakhon ke samney arun k papa ka lund tha. Jo ki ab shaant tha. Mohini urf Dipti ek shaitaani nigaah se upar Abhishek ji ke taraf dekha.

Woh neeli roshni wali aankh dekhkey aur darr gaye Abhishek ji. Jee kar raha tha bhaag jau yahan se. Par ek adrishya bandhan jaise unko bandh ke rakkha tha.

Mohini urf Dipti arun k papa ko dekhte huye boli - apki woh patni shayad is khoobsurat ling ko muh mein lekar mehsoos nahi kiya. Kaisi patni hai woh? Pati ka ling jo nahi chusti woh kaisi aurat? Jo pati ka sukh nahi deti woh kaisi biwi? Lekin chinta mat kijiye aap...... Ab main aa gayi hoon...main aapko woh sab sukh dungi. Ummmmmm.. Ummmmm... Mmmmmm..

Arun k papa dekhne lagey Dipti unkey lund ko muh mein lekey chus rahi hai. Aajtak jo sukh nahi mila, aaj wahi sukh unko mil raha hai. Unki patni khud us lund ko zor zor se chus rahi hai.

Haa... Ho sakta hai yeh asliyaat mein unki patni nahi hai... Par chehra aur jism toh usi kaa hai. Yeh roop toh Dipti ka hi hai. Iska matlab yeh Dipti hai. Ahhhhhhhhhhhg.... Yeh sukh ka mazaa aaj unko mil raha hai...... Aaj pehlibaar unka lund unki patni chus rahi thi. Asal ho yah jhoot... Ab farak nahi parta.

Abhishek ji ka darr dhire dhire gayab ho gaya... Aur firse unke under hawas uttejana barney laga. Unka soya hua ling firse lund mein badal ne laga.  Mohini ke muh ki garni aur jiv ki sparsh se Phir se woh uttejit tagra lund ban gaya. Mohini kabhi pura lund muh mein lekar chus rahi thi, toh kabhi sirf lund ke topa ko jiv se ghis rahi thi.

Uttejana, hawas itna powerful hota hai ke uske samney Darr bhi zyada der tik nahi pata. Yaha bhi wohi hua. Ab Abhishek ji ke under se darr pura chala gaya aur hawas woh jagah le liya. Yeh jo bhi ho raha hai us situation se darrna chahiye ya kya karna chahiye ab yeh sab unke deemag mein nahi tha. Ab sirf unke under ki mard ko ek hi chis chahiye.... Aur woh tha kaam sukh.

Jis Mohini se thori der pehele tak Abhishek darr ke bhagney ki soch rahe the... Ab usi Mohini ke baal muthhi mein pakar ke usi aurat ke muh mein zor zor se dhakka dene lagey.

Ahhhhhh.... Chut chudai ka maza toh asadharan hai hi.... Par aurat ki muh chudai ka mazaa sabse uttejak hota hai. Isliye sab kuch bhoolkey arun k papa besharam hokar zoron se mohini ke muh ko chodney lagey.

Okkkk.. Okkkk... Okkkkkkkkkk..... Karke mohini ke muh se awaz nikal ne laga. Uske muh ke corner se ras nikal ke girney laga. Par Abhishek ji rukey nahi..... Aaj pehelibaar biwi ki muh chodney ka mauka mila hai. Toh kya hua asli biwi nahi.... Yeh roop toh unke biwi ka hi hai.

Dipti urf Mohini ab Arun k papa ka lund khud zor se ashlil tarikey se chusney lagi. Pura lund uske muh ke ras se gila ho gaya. Ab balls ki baari thi.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhh........ Balls ko jab koi aurat chusti hai tab kitna sukh milta hai yeh sirf woh hi Mard samajh sakta jisko aisa sukh mila ho. Ufffffffffff...... Mohini jab un penis balls ko kheech kheech ke chus rahi thi tab Abhishek ji ka pair hil raha tha uttejana se. Lag raha tha kharey hi nahi rahe payengey woh. Uffffff aaj tak is asadharan sukh se woh anjaan thei.

Ek haat se lund hilate huye mohini urf Dipti arun k papa ke balls ko ek ek karkey chus rahi thi aur Abhishek ji ka haal dekhkar man hi man has rahi thi. Mard ko aise behaal karne mein hi aurat ki jeet hoti hai. Mard shayad sharir se taqatwar hota hai par ek aurat ke kamuk roop ke samney mard kuch bhi nahi... Tab aurat se zyada taqatwar koi nahi.

Bahut der tak balls chusney ke baad Mohini urf Dipti khari hui aur Arun k papa ke muh ke paas apna muh lakar boli - kyu? Ab bhi darr lag raha hai mujhse? Abhi bhi   asli biwi ki yaad aa rahi hai ya fir.......

Baaki ki baat nahi bol paayi Mohini. Kyunki Abhishek ji usko neechey se upar kandhey pe uthaake bed ke taraf jaane lagey.

Mohini vayanak shaitaani hasi hasney lagi. Par ab bilkul bhi darr nahi lag raha tha arun k papa ko. Ab toh bhookh aur bar gayi hai. Puri raat baaki hai.

Udhar arun aur Dipti gehri neend mein soyi thi. Dipti ko pata bhi nahi chala ke usi ke roop ki Dusri aurat is waqt uske pati ke upar uchal rahi hai aur bol rahi hai - haaan.... Aise hi mujhey istemaal kijiye..... Main aapki hi hoon.... Sirf aapki..... Ahhhhhh..... Main aapko sukh dunga.... Badle mein aap meri pyaas bujhaiye..... Main bahut pyasi hoo.... Meri hawas ki bhookh shaant kijiye. Har fin mujhey shaant karna parega aapko. Yeh raaz sirf aapke mere beech rahega. Kyun malik..... Aap meri bhookh har din bujhayenge naa?

Mohini ko chodtey huye uski un neele roshni wali aankon ko dekhte huye Arun k papa boley - haaaan...... Jo bologi.... Woh karunga main.

Yeh sunkey Mohini hasney lagi. Ek vayankar pisachi shaitaani hasi.


To be continued......



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baap re....aise kaise sex kar payega...ek bhoot k saath...kahin ussse gussa aa gaya to...khoob bahut khoob...
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(20-01-2021, 02:22 AM)Baban Wrote:
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After previous update....


Arun k papa turant woh jagah chorkey wapas us bedroom ke taraf daurey jahan woh ab tak thei. Us bedroom ke under jakar firse ek shock.


Abhi abhi jis patni ko apney betey ke sath soya hua dekh kar aye.. Wohi patni yahan pe leti hui hai!!

Yeh... Kaise ho sakta hai?!!

Darr bhi rahe thei Abhishek aur hairaan bhi the. Dipti unko dekhkar pooch- kya hua? Aise kya dekh rahe ho? Yahan aao... Mere paas.

Abhishek kisi tarah khud ko samhaal ke darrte huye poochey - t.... T.. Tum.... Tum kaun ho?

Dipti - kya? Kya bol rahe ho?

Abhishek - kaun ho tum?

Dipti- kya mazak kar rahe ho jaan? Main dipti ho... Tumpari patni.... Tumhare bacchey ki maa...

Nahin..... Chilla kar boley arun k papa. Ab ek gussa bhi tha unke under. Woh boley - tum Dipti nahi ho..... Kyunki main abhi bedroom mein check karkey ayaa..... Wahan meri biwi apne betey ke sath so rahi hai. Agar woh dipti hai... Toh tum kaun ho?

Yeh sunkar Dipti ab arun k papa ke taraf dekhkar ek vayanak muskaan diya. Kitna darawna muskan thaa woh. Abhishek ji darr gaye. Dipti bed se uthkar khari ho gayi. Badan pe koi kapra nahi, bilkul nangi hai dipti par abhi dipti ko dekhkar arun k papa ko uttejana nahi balki darr lag raha hai.

Dipti dheere dheere muskuraate huye Abhishek ke taraf barney lagi. Ab uski aank se neela roshni nikal raha tha. Thori der pehele hi arun ke papa ka jo kamras nikal ke uske pet ke upar gira tha... Us ras ko ungli mein lekey chusney lagi. 

Dipti boli - darr kyu rahe ho? Main toh aapki hi iccha puri kar rahi hoo... Aap yahi toh chahte the ke aaj apni patni ke sath milan karey.

Arey!!! Yeh awaz toh Dipti ki nahi hai... Dipti ki awaz kaise change ho gayi? Yeh awaz toh pehele bhi suna hain Abhishek ne.... Yeh awaz toh.... Yeh awaz toh!!

Abhishek ji darrte huye peechey chalte chalte deewar se peeth laga ke kharey ho gaye. Woh darrtey huye boley - tum........... MOHINI?!!!!!!

Yeh sunkey Dipti hasney lagi aur Abhishek ji ke bilkul paas akaar khari ho gayi aur boli - jee..... Main aapki Mohini..... Pakar liya aapne.

Arun k papa confused hokar boley - par.... Par yeh kaide samvab hai? Tum toh ek sapna ho..... Tum yaha kaise? Aur tum toh bilkul alaag dikhti ho.... Tum meri biwi ki tarah kaise...???

Dipti urf Mohini apna chehra Abhishek ji ke muh ke paas lakar muskuraake boli - main sapna bhi hoo.... Aur haqiqaat bhi. Aapko kya laga? Mohini ko samajhna itna asaan nahi....... Aur aapke dusrey sawal ka jawab hai main yahan aapko khush karne ayi hu. Aapko khush karna mera uddesya hai. Isliye aap jis roop mein mujhey kalpana karengey usi roop mein main aaungi aapke paas. Apko har tarikey se mujhe khush karna hai.

Abhishek ji ko biswas nahi ho raha tha jo bhi unke sath ho raha tha. Woh boley - par.... Par yeh... Kaise?

Mohini ek haat se arun k papa ke chaati pe rakhkey unkey honthon ke paas apna honth lakar boli - aaj main aapki patni bankey aayi hu..... Aaj patni ke sath jo chahey kijiye.... Apki woh patni jo sukh apko nahi de paayi..... Yeh patni woh har sukh aapko degi.

Yeh bolkey mohini...... Ya Dipti bolna chahiye..... Woh arun k papa ke honth chusney lagi. Abhishek ji darr bhi rahe the par sath mein ek ajeeb sa feeling bhi ho raha tha. Dipti honth chorkey Abhishek ji ke chaati ko chumney lagey. Chaati se hote huye dipti unke pet ko ab chumney lagey.

Aur fir Dipti neechey ghutno pe baith gayi. Uske aakhon ke samney arun k papa ka lund tha. Jo ki ab shaant tha. Mohini urf Dipti ek shaitaani nigaah se upar Abhishek ji ke taraf dekha.

Woh neeli roshni wali aankh dekhkey aur darr gaye Abhishek ji. Jee kar raha tha bhaag jau yahan se. Par ek adrishya bandhan jaise unko bandh ke rakkha tha.

Mohini urf Dipti arun k papa ko dekhte huye boli - apki woh patni shayad is khoobsurat ling ko muh mein lekar mehsoos nahi kiya. Kaisi patni hai woh? Pati ka ling jo nahi chusti woh kaisi aurat? Jo pati ka sukh nahi deti woh kaisi biwi? Lekin chinta mat kijiye aap...... Ab main aa gayi hoon...main aapko woh sab sukh dungi. Ummmmmm.. Ummmmm... Mmmmmm..

Arun k papa dekhne lagey Dipti unkey lund ko muh mein lekey chus rahi hai. Aajtak jo sukh nahi mila, aaj wahi sukh unko mil raha hai. Unki patni khud us lund ko zor zor se chus rahi hai.

Haa... Ho sakta hai yeh asliyaat mein unki patni nahi hai... Par chehra aur jism toh usi kaa hai. Yeh roop toh Dipti ka hi hai. Iska matlab yeh Dipti hai. Ahhhhhhhhhhhg.... Yeh sukh ka mazaa aaj unko mil raha hai...... Aaj pehlibaar unka lund unki patni chus rahi thi. Asal ho yah jhoot... Ab farak nahi parta.

Abhishek ji ka darr dhire dhire gayab ho gaya... Aur firse unke under hawas uttejana barney laga. Unka soya hua ling firse lund mein badal ne laga.  Mohini ke muh ki garni aur jiv ki sparsh se Phir se woh uttejit tagra lund ban gaya. Mohini kabhi pura lund muh mein lekar chus rahi thi, toh kabhi sirf lund ke topa ko jiv se ghis rahi thi.

Uttejana, hawas itna powerful hota hai ke uske samney Darr bhi zyada der tik nahi pata. Yaha bhi wohi hua. Ab Abhishek ji ke under se darr pura chala gaya aur hawas woh jagah le liya. Yeh jo bhi ho raha hai us situation se darrna chahiye ya kya karna chahiye ab yeh sab unke deemag mein nahi tha. Ab sirf unke under ki mard ko ek hi chis chahiye.... Aur woh tha kaam sukh.

Jis Mohini se thori der pehele tak Abhishek darr ke bhagney ki soch rahe the... Ab usi Mohini ke baal muthhi mein pakar ke usi aurat ke muh mein zor zor se dhakka dene lagey.

Ahhhhhh.... Chut chudai ka maza toh asadharan hai hi.... Par aurat ki muh chudai ka mazaa sabse uttejak hota hai. Isliye sab kuch bhoolkey arun k papa besharam hokar zoron se mohini ke muh ko chodney lagey.

Okkkk.. Okkkk... Okkkkkkkkkk..... Karke mohini ke muh se awaz nikal ne laga. Uske muh ke corner se ras nikal ke girney laga. Par Abhishek ji rukey nahi..... Aaj pehelibaar biwi ki muh chodney ka mauka mila hai. Toh kya hua asli biwi nahi.... Yeh roop toh unke biwi ka hi hai.

Dipti urf Mohini ab Arun k papa ka lund khud zor se ashlil tarikey se chusney lagi. Pura lund uske muh ke ras se gila ho gaya. Ab balls ki baari thi.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhh........ Balls ko jab koi aurat chusti hai tab kitna sukh milta hai yeh sirf woh hi Mard samajh sakta jisko aisa sukh mila ho. Ufffffffffff...... Mohini jab un penis balls ko kheech kheech ke chus rahi thi tab Abhishek ji ka pair hil raha tha uttejana se. Lag raha tha kharey hi nahi rahe payengey woh. Uffffff aaj tak is asadharan sukh se woh anjaan thei.

Ek haat se lund hilate huye mohini urf Dipti arun k papa ke balls ko ek ek karkey chus rahi thi aur Abhishek ji ka haal dekhkar man hi man has rahi thi. Mard ko aise behaal karne mein hi aurat ki jeet hoti hai. Mard shayad sharir se taqatwar hota hai par ek aurat ke kamuk roop ke samney mard kuch bhi nahi... Tab aurat se zyada taqatwar koi nahi.

Bahut der tak balls chusney ke baad Mohini urf Dipti khari hui aur Arun k papa ke muh ke paas apna muh lakar boli - kyu? Ab bhi darr lag raha hai mujhse? Abhi bhi   asli biwi ki yaad aa rahi hai ya fir.......

Baaki ki baat nahi bol paayi Mohini. Kyunki Abhishek ji usko neechey se upar kandhey pe uthaake bed ke taraf jaane lagey.

Mohini vayanak shaitaani hasi hasney lagi. Par ab bilkul bhi darr nahi lag raha tha arun k papa ko. Ab toh bhookh aur bar gayi hai. Puri raat baaki hai.

Udhar arun aur Dipti gehri neend mein soyi thi. Dipti ko pata bhi nahi chala ke usi ke roop ki Dusri aurat is waqt uske pati ke upar uchal rahi hai aur bol rahi hai - haaan.... Aise hi mujhey istemaal kijiye..... Main aapki hi hoon.... Sirf aapki..... Ahhhhhh..... Main aapko sukh dunga.... Badle mein aap meri pyaas bujhaiye..... Main bahut pyasi hoo.... Meri hawas ki bhookh shaant kijiye. Har fin mujhey shaant karna parega aapko. Yeh raaz sirf aapke mere beech rahega. Kyun malik..... Aap meri bhookh har din bujhayenge naa?

Mohini ko chodtey huye uski un neele roshni wali aankon ko dekhte huye Arun k papa boley - haaaan...... Jo bologi.... Woh karunga main.

Yeh sunkey Mohini hasney lagi. Ek vayankar pisachi shaitaani hasi.


To be continued......



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These Updates are good. But to be very honest,  the Original... I mean this same story in Bengali was a Killer. Damn Good. Just Awesome.   

I personally Love to read your written stories; be it in English, Hindi or Bengali.

Please.. Please Don't mind me saying this; this Hindi version is not matching that mark... and the taste.


Am very Sorry if this statement hurts you, brother.

You're doing a pretty good job. Carry On.
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Superb awesome mind blowing update bhai
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(20-01-2021, 08:15 AM)Dark Soul Wrote:

These Updates are good. But to be very honest,  the Original... I mean this same story in Bengali was a Killer. Damn Good. Just Awesome.   

I personally Love to read your written stories; be it in English, Hindi or Bengali.

Please.. Please Don't mind me saying this; this Hindi version is not matching that mark... and the taste.


Am very Sorry if this statement hurts you, brother.

You're doing a pretty good job. Carry On.

Thanks Dark soul.. You liked my story upobhog (bengali version)

Lekin main bengali aur hindi same to same nahi rakhta. Bahut changes karta hoo. Isliye story ek tarah se alag hi hota hai. Aapko ek baat poochna thaa... Aap ko meri stories acchi lagti hai isliye thanks. Lekin ek baat batao... Jab aapko meri bengali version itni pasand aayi toh wahan aapne positive koi feedback kyun nahi diya? Ek writer hamesha chahta hai ke unke readers ko agar story accha lag raha ho toh feedback de.... Lekin tab aapne kuch nahi bola aur ab aap is story ko compare kar rahe ho. Yeh toh sahi nahi hai bhai. Aap agar kharab mein feedback dete ho toh acchey lagne par bhi feedback do.

Dont mind..... Sab ka apna apna style hai. Sath jurey rahiye Heart

Lekin bahut readers ko yeh Mohini acchi lag rahi hai isliye thanks friends Namaskar
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(20-01-2021, 12:32 PM)Baban Wrote: Thanks Dark soul.. You liked my story upobhog (bengali version)

Lekin main bengali aur hindi same to same nahi rakhta. Bahut changes karta hoo. Isliye story ek tarah se alag hi hota hai. Aapko ek baat poochna thaa... Aap ko meri stories acchi lagti hai isliye thanks. Lekin ek baat batao... Jab aapko meri bengali version itni pasand aayi toh wahan aapne positive koi feedback kyun nahi diya? Ek writer hamesha chahta hai ke unke readers ko agar story accha lag raha ho toh feedback de.... Lekin tab aapne kuch nahi bola aur ab aap is story ko compare kar rahe ho. Yeh toh sahi nahi hai bhai. Aap agar kharab mein feedback dete ho toh acchey lagne par bhi feedback do.

Dont mind..... Sab ka apna apna style hai. Sath jurey rahiye Heart

Lekin bahut readers ko yeh Mohini acchi lag rahi hai isliye thanks friends Namaskar

First of all, Saadar Pranaam..

Second thing bhai, am not comparing. I'm no one to "Compare". I don't want to.

Actually, after reading Pervert, i had decided long back that I won't comment on your stories ever; it was so full of nasty things.

By that time i was  already reading your other 2 Bengali stories.. Nishir daak was one of them. Have to say that you really did a good job with those two stories. Then came Upobhog; it was good too. But now this... Hindi version, except the sex part, there's nothing much to make readers (some) connect with it. (Though there's not much changes). Feels like little bit of injustice is happening with this story (version). Guys who haven't read or not able to read the Bengali version would certainly and definitely love the Hindi version.  Undoubtedly, you have a good hand in writing in Bengali.

Now, it's up to you..how you take this..

I'm not a critic.; definitely not yours.

Thank You Namaskar
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Thanks dark soul.... Being a bengali.... I feel happy ke hindi forum mein bhi readers mujhey itna pasand karte hai. Mere har ek story ko itna appreciate karte hai. Us waqt main ek writer hoo... Naki koi hindi / bengali person.. Bus ek writer.

Har ek ka taste alag hota hai.. Aapko mere Bengal zyada pasand hai... Obviously main ek bengali hoon toh mera writing aur thinking bengali mein zyada accha hai. Lekin aaj jab main dekhta hoo mere hindi stories bhi hindi readers ko itna accha lag raha hai... Dil se khusi nikalti hai. Aapko mere pervert story acchi nahi lagi. For some nasty scenes... Lekin isi liye us story ka naam pervert tha.

And I repeat again... Jo stories aapko pasand aayi... Unmein aapne koi positive comments kyun nahi kiya tab? Its ok.... Main koi gussa nahi hoon. As i told before har ek ka apna apna taste hota hai... Aapko bengali zyada accha laga is liye thanks. Lekin jinko bengali nahi aati... Unsab ke liye, un sab tak apni kahaani pahuchaane ke liye hindi mein likhta hoo. Ab aapko accha nhi lag raha itna theek hai... Par bahut readers enjoy kar rahe hai. Let them enjoy❤ main bengali version ko bengali sentiment's ke hisab se likha hoon aur hindi ko aoney hisab se.


Aaj jab dekhta hoo... Bengali ke sath Hindi readers bhi mujhey itna respect dete hai.. Mera respect bhi unke liye bahut bahut bar jataa hai. Aap logon ke wajah se hi main ek successful writer ban paya. Thanks frnds❤
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#91
(20-01-2021, 07:18 AM)vat69addict Wrote: baap re....aise kaise sex kar payega...ek bhoot k saath...kahin ussse gussa aa gaya to...khoob bahut khoob...

Thanks vat69addict ❤
Sath rahiye aur intezar kijiye agey ke liye
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#92
(20-01-2021, 09:37 AM)Shabaz123 Wrote: Superb awesome mind blowing update bhai

Thanks Shabaz123❤
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#93
Erotic Ke Sath Sath Horror, Bahut Hi Deadly Combination Hai.
Bahut Hi Hot Update.. yourock
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(20-01-2021, 09:17 PM)Lovecraft Wrote: Erotic Ke Sath Sath Horror, Bahut Hi Deadly Combination Hai.
Bahut Hi Hot Update.. yourock

Is Deadly combination ka mazaa hi alag hai. Sath jurey rahiye❤
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#95
Wow Darr bhi aur Mazaa bhi. Pehele toh Abhishek ji ko darr laga par phir Mohini ka khel shuru ho gaya. Matlab yeh kisibhi roop mein aa sakti hai... wow. Yeh ladki ko jitna sexy hai utna hi khatarnak ! Agey ka intezaar hai.
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(21-01-2021, 02:53 PM)Avishek Wrote: Wow Darr bhi aur Mazaa bhi. Pehele toh Abhishek ji ko darr laga par phir Mohini ka khel shuru ho gaya.  Matlab yeh kisibhi roop mein aa sakti hai...  wow.  Yeh ladki ko jitna sexy hai utna hi khatarnak ! Agey ka intezaar hai.

Thnx❤ sath baney rahiye.....
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#97
Naya update jald aa raha hai!!
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#98
SUNDAY
New update coming
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#99
Update coming.....
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