Adultery Betrayals & Sacrifices...

[worldlover]

Thanks to everyone who commented or liked my story. All of your comments are the earings of the writers. But to be honest I am actually dissapointed at the number of comments. I don't know my story was good enough or not but I actually expected a lot more comments.
Well, there is still a long way to go in the story. I will try to improve the quality of the storytelling so that the readers become compelled to comment in my thread. This is a challenge to myself. Lets see what happens.

[Uday]

Thanks to everyone who commented or liked my story. All of your comments are the earings of the writers. But to be honest I am actually dissapointed at the number of comments. I don't know my story was good enough or not but I actually expected a lot more comments.
Well, there is still a long way to go in the story. I will try to improve the quality of the storytelling so that the readers become compelled to comment in my thread. This is a challenge to myself. Lets see what happens.

Bro..

chill, don't worry. Every story has got its set of readers like the fans of a particular movie star. They tend to follow and give their comments. The rest are passerby's, may be some one will stay when see something he/she likes and become a fan and start commenting.

You have exceptional story telling skills (it's different than the rest of the stories) and you mastered it. It is like a jig-saw puzzle and you are placing the pieces in right places at the right moment. You are matching the past, present perfectly with the timings, places, people. You didn't leave anything unused. But the problem in this type of narration is reader may forget what happened an hour ago as the updates is irregular. Please don't get offended, I am not blaming or criticizing. If this story comes as a novel, I bet people will not leave the book until they finish.  

You know basically this is a porn sight and most of the people including me come here to read some hanky panky stuff which is lacking a little bit here ( the other day that was reason I said "something fishy between Arjun & Razia" not that I didn't follow the story).

You should learn how to cook tasty biriyani from banisha like wise this story also needs some masala to spice it up.

I don't know, but don't make Banisha a slut, going and spreading legs to anyone comes on her way or by the demands of her brother in laws.

Also you can include some naughty talking, fun at Gopal's birthday party...may be Krishna opening up, Subadra showing some interest in Arjun etc..etc...

Otherwise this is excellent, keep going.

[worldlover]

Bro..

chill, don't worry. Every story has got its set of readers like the fans of a particular movie star. They tend to follow and give their comments. The rest are passerby's, may be some one will stay when see something he/she likes and become a fan and start commenting.

You have exceptional story telling skills (it's different than the rest of the stories) and you mastered it. It is like a jig-saw puzzle and you are placing the pieces in right places at the right moment. You are matching the past, present perfectly with the timings, places, people. You didn't leave anything unused. But the problem in this type of narration is reader may forget what happened an hour ago as the updates is irregular. Please don't get offended, I am not blaming or criticizing. If this story comes as a novel, I bet people will not leave the book until they finish.  

You know basically this is a porn sight and most of the people including me come here to read some hanky panky stuff which is lacking a little bit here ( the other day that was reason I said "something fishy between Arjun & Razia" not that I didn't follow the story).

You should learn how to cook tasty biriyani from banisha  like wise this story also needs some masala to spice it up.

I don't know, but don't make Banisha a slut, going and spreading legs to anyone comes on her way or by the demands of her brother in laws.

Also you can include some naughty talking, fun at Gopal's birthday party...may be Krishna opening up, Subadra showing some interest in Arjun etc..etc...

Otherwise this is excellent, keep going.

I understand when you say people come in this site to read hanky panky stuff. I want to build up the story first and keep the nicer things for later. I like your suggestions and as I said before sex and hot erotic sex will come for the need of the story. I am going to go ahead as I have planned the story from the biginning. Hope all of you will stay with me and enjoy till the end. 
And for the record, I don't mind the criticism. I like to know people's point of view. I think I can get motivated and grow from both praises and criticism. 
Thank You Uday bro.

[Siva82]

Thanks to everyone who commented or liked my story. All of your comments are the earings of the writers. But to be honest I am actually dissapointed at the number of comments. I don't know my story was good enough or not but I actually expected a lot more comments.
Well, there is still a long way to go in the story. I will try to improve the quality of the storytelling so that the readers become compelled to comment in my thread. This is a challenge to myself. Lets see what happens.

Hi @worldlover 

I am already a big fan of ur writing but let me give u few facts on your concerns. 
Your story is very unique and awesome . It’s not pure adult story. It’s crime thriller and adult is one component of it. And amount of character is your story is so enormous not like anything seen in any other story. Usually we see max of 10 char in adult story. Why I am pointing out is ur story is complex in a unique way. your story view hit is more than 27000 which is very big. Not all people who read ur story will comment of so many reservation they might have. It took me 2 yrs to comment on story due to my reservation and it want to be anonymous.

You story is building up so nicely and it’s clearly going in good direction. 

Coming to concern part

1. Since the story is so complex with multiple character if u delay the update it become problem for reader to follow correctly. Let me explain my problem here I think most of them might be able to relate it. If the story update is delayed more then 2 weeks I don’t remember all the char relationship and i had to go back and read previous update to come up to speed. 
Solution : if you could give update at least in 2 weeks it will help tremendously 

2. Adult component is little on leaser side on ur story. Since u treat adult as one component of this complex story.to be very frank with you I don’t view this as issue. Other reader might expect this little eloborate
I would let u to decide if I want to eloborate it or not

As an writer u have the complete freedom and decision making capability to go which route is fine with you.

u r one of the finest writer. I love ur writing

Don’t forgot ur update today. We are still
Waiting to see how binisha outing turn out

Thanks

[Doom]

Ur excellent writter

[worldlover]

Hi @worldlover 

I am already a big fan of ur writing but let me give u few facts on your concerns. 
Your story is very unique and awesome . It’s not pure adult story. It’s crime thriller and adult is one component of it. And amount of character is your story is so enormous not like anything seen in any other story. Usually we see max of 10 char in adult story. Why I am pointing out is ur story is complex in a unique way. your story view hit is more than 27000 which is very big. Not all people who read ur story will comment of so many reservation they might have. It took me 2 yrs to comment on story due to my reservation and it want to be anonymous.

You story is building up so nicely and it’s clearly going in good direction. 

Coming to concern part

1. Since the story is so complex with multiple character if u delay the update it become problem for reader to follow correctly. Let me explain my problem here I think most of them might be able to relate it. If the story update is delayed more then 2 weeks I don’t remember all the char relationship and i had to go back and read previous update to come up to speed. 
Solution : if you could give update at least in 2 weeks it will help tremendously 

2. Adult component is little on leaser side on ur story. Since u treat adult as one component of this complex story.to be very frank with you I don’t view this as issue. Other reader might expect this little eloborate
I would let u to decide if I want to eloborate it or not

As an writer u have the complete freedom and decision making capability to go which route is fine with you.

u r one of the finest writer. I love ur writing

Don’t forgot ur update today. We are still
Waiting to see how binisha outing turn out

Thanks

Thanks for your overview and the compliments. I am not finished with the update. Today I was catching up to the stories that I like in this site. Then I got working on my story. Still have not finished it yet. So, not sure if I will be avle to post it tonight. It's not my fault, Binisha is doing some very naughty things here on her day out hence the delay in my update. #its_all_binisha's_fault.

[Siva82]

Thanks for your overview and the compliments. I am not finished with the update. Today I was catching up to the stories that I like in this site. Then I got working on my story. Still have not finished it yet. So, not sure if I will be avle to post it tonight. It's not my fault, Binisha is doing some very naughty things here on her day out hence the delay in my update. #its_all_binisha's_fault.

As always looking forward to your update. take care

[Odb69]

Sorrymnan, dont comment because i dont like too much gap between the content. Will stop taking good content for granted. Sorry if u feel like we dont keep up with ur updates. 

After a long time we are having a story with so much characters. It must be stressing keeping in trace of all the motivation. Hatts off. 

And please dont stop

[Jayam Ramana]

Once a slut is always a slut. Waiting for more sluttiness if binisha... awesome narration

[mindhunter11]

waiting for todays update

[mindhunter11]

come on bro...cant wait more... eagerly waiting for binisha's adultry

[kamdev99008]

Thanks to everyone who commented or liked my story. All of your comments are the earings of the writers. But to be honest I am actually dissapointed at the number of comments. I don't know my story was good enough or not but I actually expected a lot more comments.
Well, there is still a long way to go in the story. I will try to improve the quality of the storytelling so that the readers become compelled to comment in my thread. This is a challenge to myself. Lets see what happens.

just wait and watch......... do whatever your are doing...... let the others identify according to their own interest and will

look at some figures : 
you posted 63 post all total on this forum
out of 63, 61 posts got 152 likes......... more than double of your posts
your story is viewed 27,925 times till now
and out of 291 posts just 63 is yours

look positively on these figures...........
think positive and be positive 

why are you expecting some miracle

[Eswar P]

Sir waiting for wonderful update

[axma55]

Waiting, post next update please.

[Siva82]

When are planning for the next update ? Pls let us know

[zulfique]

Binisha has already opened her holes for unlimited access for her brother in laws. She is not going to lose anything by extending to others. Waiting to see her turning into a complete whore. Come soon.

[Santhosh Stanley]

[Santhosh Stanley]

What will happen when binisha gets pregnant with twins from the twins ??? 
Great narration.

[xavierrxx]

Superb story. Waiting.

[LustyLeo]

Eagerly waiting for naughty Nisha