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Game4it.. if u have time and if u can why don't u try this story(knowing my wife knowing me as well )in tamil version.. i hope u have a lot of knowledge in relationship and emotional in your previous stories..That story is one of that category.. its just a wish bro..
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@game40it Bro,
I checked the stats of this story.
The story is read by 3.28 lakh+ members and members commented are just 170+
out of which,
100 commented more than 10 times. 30 commented more than 20 times. 10 commented more than 30 times
You can imagine the number of users who read the story, but not commented anything.
They are the real reader base that you need to look at. Without them, this number of views is not possible. Don't feel bad about this short number of people who commented like this. May be they are continuous readers and they had too many expectations. I have never seen someone continuously talking bad about the story. Even then, only during couple of times, these type of comments came. It is also natural that people compare the earlier stories and try to predict the next.
The comments that are given before the last update are just awesome and it looks only the last update did not satisfy the expectations of some of the readers. You cannot satisfy all the readers and no need to even consider them. keep writing and give us more wonderful stories like this. Thanks for this story. Excited to see your next story. Good luck.
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(18-11-2019, 02:11 AM)Pattaasu Balu Wrote: @game40it Bro,
I checked the stats of this story.
The story is read by 3.28 lakh+ members and members commented are just 170+
out of which,
100 commented more than 10 times. 30 commented more than 20 times. 10 commented more than 30 times
You can imagine the number of users who read the story, but not commented anything.
They are the real reader base that you need to look at. Without them, this number of views is not possible. Don't feel bad about this short number of people who commented like this. May be they are continuous readers and they had too many expectations. I have never seen someone continuously talking bad about the story. Even then, only during couple of times, these type of comments came. It is also natural that people compare the earlier stories and try to predict the next.
The comments that are given before the last update are just awesome and it looks only the last update did not satisfy the expectations of some of the readers. You cannot satisfy all the readers and no need to even consider them. keep writing and give us more wonderful stories like this. Thanks for this story. Excited to see your next story. Good luck.
Agreed bro.. there are several writers stopped writing as they have not received proper recognition..
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18-11-2019, 09:17 AM
(This post was last modified: 18-11-2019, 11:16 AM by Kamalesh Nathan. Edited 2 times in total. Edited 2 times in total.)
(03-11-2019, 07:43 AM)Aful Mohammed Wrote: பவனி விக்ரம் கூட படுத்தது அவளது புருஷன் அவளை கவனிக்காமல் விட்டதால் இல்லை. அவள் இளமைக்கு அழகுக்கு ஏற்ற ஒருவன் விக்ரம் தான் என்பதாலும் அவன் அழகன் என்பதாலும் தான்.
கல்யாண வீட்டில் பலர் இவளை ரசித்து இருந்தாலும், இவள் கவனித்தது விக்ரமை தான். அவனது அழகு அவளை மயக்கியது. அவன் மட்டும் தான் போல்ட் ஆகா இவளை ரசித்தான், இவள் அழகை இவளை போல அழகான ஒருவன் ரசிப்பது இவளுக்கு பிடித்து இருந்தது. ரொமான்ஸ் அவளது வாழ்வில் திரும்ப வந்தது போல உணர்ந்தாள். அது ஒரு குறுகுறுப்பை உண்டாக்கியது, பின்பு அதுவே அவனுடன் சேர வைத்தது. அவனுடைய ஆண்மை அவளை அடிமை ஆகி விட்டது.
Yes bro. You are absolutely correct.
"ஹ்ம்ம் ஆளு பாக்க நல்ல தான் இருக்கான். வாட்டசாட்டமாக மேன்லியாக இருந்தான்," என்று நினைத்தாள்.
Bhavani and vikram are attracted towards each other at their first sight itself. Vikram is handsome and manly. Bhavai is a super beauty. There is some chemistry between them. bhavani must have wished to have a handsome guy as her husband before marriage. Unfortunately mohan and her boyfriend did not have those looks. and when she met vikram, she must have realized he is the person that she is waiting for all these years. immediately she falled for him.
"மோகன் என்னை மன்னிச்சிடுங்க...," நான் என் மனதில் என் கணவனிடம் மனதார மன்னிப்பு கேட்டேன்.
Bhavani has felt sorry and asked apology from heart before vikram cock entering her pussy itself. She know that her action cannot be reversed after this.
"யெஸ் பேபி இந்த இரண்டு நாளில்லேயே உன் மேல் அன்பு வளர துவங்கிருச்சு."
"அப்படி சொல்லாதடி பூட்டிபுல், உன்னுடன் கொஞ்சி பேசிக்கொண்டு இருக்கணும், உன்னை அணைத்தபடி சன்செட் ரசிக்கணும், முழு நிலவை ரசிக்கணும் என்ற ஆசை எல்லாம் இருக்குடி மை டார்லிங்."
Vikram also had fallen in love with bhavani in their first meeting itself. All that had happen afterwards are just because of their love. Even if mohan or sumitha did not find their affair, At some point of time, vikram would have taken bhavani and his child along with him. May be bhavani would have told husband everything due to the guilt of second child or would have poisoned him because of her deep love towards vikram.
"ஹ்ம் ஹும் சான்ஸ் இல்லை, உன்னை போல பெண்களை வெல்லும் வசீகரமான ஆண் பிள்ளை வேணும்."
This clearly shows the kind of person and child she wished for.
"அப்பாவும் பிள்ளையும் ஒரே மாதிரி தானே இருப்போம்," தலைவலியை சமாளித்து சிரித்தேன்.
"இளிக்காதிங்க எனக்கு கடுப்பு தான் வருது."
Avinash must be like mohan and that is the reason she did not like both and not want to see them again.
Thanks you very much for this Lovely story Bro.
Enjoyed all the episodes from begining and the way you ended is just first class.
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@kamalesh nathan
Well said man. They are not only sexually attracted, but also fallen in love in the marriage hall itself. That is the reason even she tried to avoid him after that incident, she was not able to do that. The situation was same with him as well. Author is very clear with his writing on ending of this story right from the beginning that they are going to marry in the end. We only failed to notice those points that you had mentioned. Thanks for pointing out those. Cant wait to see the next story.
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18-11-2019, 01:48 PM
(This post was last modified: 18-11-2019, 05:02 PM by zulfique. Edited 6 times in total. Edited 6 times in total.)
(18-11-2019, 02:11 AM)Pattaasu Balu Wrote: @game40it Bro,
I checked the stats of this story.
The story is read by 3.28 lakh+ members and members commented are just 170+
out of which,
100 commented more than 10 times. 30 commented more than 20 times. 10 commented more than 30 times
You can imagine the number of users who read the story, but not commented anything.
They are the real reader base that you need to look at. Without them, this number of views is not possible. Don't feel bad about this short number of people who commented like this. May be they are continuous readers and they had too many expectations. I have never seen someone continuously talking bad about the story. Even then, only during couple of times, these type of comments came. It is also natural that people compare the earlier stories and try to predict the next.
The comments that are given before the last update are just awesome and it looks only the last update did not satisfy the expectations of some of the readers. You cannot satisfy all the readers and no need to even consider them. keep writing and give us more wonderful stories like this. Thanks for this story. Excited to see your next story. Good luck.
@Pattaasu balu
I think you have given an incorrect information on the views.
There are 286 pages and 329,560 views.
You need to understand how page views are calculated
If one person views all the pages, it is counted as 286 views.
You cannot say that it is read by 3.28 lakh+ members.
The total registered members in the website is only 102525
Not all members read Tamil forum stories. Many accounts not activated and many members are not active too. There can be duplicate account also.
The average number of persons read the story could only be 329560/286 = 1153
It is possible that, one person reading the story multiple times. So, It is fair to say, story is read by about 850-950 members (excluding author and guest readers) on average and 20% of readers gave their comments.
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நான் இரண்டு நாட்கள் வெளியூரில் இருந்தேன், எனது மொபைல் மூலம் மட்டுமே தளத்தை அணுக முடிந்தது, பதிலளிக்க முடியாத நிலை. நான் படித்துக்கொண்டிருந்த சில கேவலம்மான மற்றும் நியாயமற்ற விமர்சமானகளை படித்து நான் கோபமடைந்தேன் என்பதை ஒப்புக் கொள்ள வேண்டும். இப்போது கொஞ்சம் கூல் டோவ்ன் பண்ணிவிட்டேன்.
Now where do I start. எடல்ட்ரி கருப்பொருளில் கதை எழுதத் தொடங்கிய முதல் நபர் நான் அல்ல, நிச்சயமாக நான் கடைசி நபராக இருக்கவும் மாட்டேன். சிலருக்கு இந்த முடிவுக்கு இந்த சீற்றம் ஏன், புரியவில்லை. மனைவிகள் வேறு ஒருவனுடன் செக்ஸ் வைத்துக்கொள்ளும் நிறைய கதைகள் இங்கே வந்திருக்கு. அதிலும் நிறைய கதைகளில் அந்த மனைவிகள் என்ற குற்ற உணர்வும் இல்லாமல் கதை முடியும் போது கூட அவர்கள் தங்கள் காதலர்களுடன் ஜாலியாக அனுபவிப்பது போல முடிந்திருக்கும். அவர்கள் கணவர்கள் ஒன்று ககோல்டு ஆகா மாறிவிடுவார்கள் அல்லது டம்மி பிஸ் ஆகா இருபார்க்ல. அப்போது எங்கே போனது இந்த கோபம்.
இந்த கதையில் தப்பு செய்யும் மனைவிக்கு இரண்டு பெரும் தண்டனை ஏற்பட்டது என்று எழுதி இருப்பேன். ஒன்று எப்போதும்மே ஆறாத காயம்' அவள் மகனை இழந்தது. அவளுக்கு இது எப்போதும் வேதனை கொடுக்கும் ஒன்று என்ற அர்த்தத்தில் எழுதினேன். அது அந்த அளவுக்கு அவளுக்கு தாக்கத்தை ஏற்படுத்தி இருக்கு என்று காண்பிக்கும் அளவுக்கு இல்லை என்றால் அது என் எழுத்து திரம்மையின் பலவீனம். அதை சாரியாக கொண்டு வரவில்லை என்று விமர்சனம் செய்தால் நான் கூபா பட்டிருக்க மாட்டேன்.
அவளை வாட்ட கூடிய இன்னொரு 'தண்டனை' அவள் குடும்பத்துடன் அவளுக்கு உறவு அற்று போய் எப்போவுமே எந்த சுப, சந்தோஷமான நிகழ்ச்சிகளில் கலந்து கொள்ள முடியாத நிலை ஏற்பட்டு தனிமை பட்டு வேதனை அடைவாள். இந்த என் நோக்கத்தையும் சரியாக எழுதி இருக்கவில்லை என்று விமர்சித்தால் நான் கோபப்பட்டு இருக்க மாட்டேன். However I will not tolerate abusive comments. Who gave you the right to be abusive to me. இந்தக் கதையை எழுதியதற்காக நீங்கள் எனக்கு பணம் கொடுத்தீர்களா அல்லது உங்களில் யாரையும் படிக்கும்படி நான் கட்டாயப்படுத்தினென்னா?
இரண்டாவது கடைசி பகுதியை நான் முடித்தபோது அதற்கு நிறைய ஆதரவு இருந்தது. மனைவி தண்டிக்கப்படுவதைக் கண்டு பலர் மகிழ்ச்சியாக இருப்பதை நான் உணர்ந்தேன். இவர்களில் சிலர், அதே மனைவி தனது கள்ள காதலனுடன் உடலுறவு கொள்வதைப் படித்து மகிழ்ந்தவர்கள். What double standards. ஆனால் மனைவியின் செயல்களுக்கு அவள் வருத்தப்பட்டாலும் அவளுக்கு மீட்பது இருப்பதை அவர்களால் ஏற்றுக்கொள்ள முடியாது. அவள் துடிதுடித்து கேவல பாடணும். I don’t know what inherent insecurities towards women that I have triggered. Misogyny seems to be well and truly alive.
இதே விஷயத்தில் கணவன் தான் தன மனைவிக்கு துரோகம் செய்துவிட்டு பிறகு வருத்தப்பட்டு திருந்தி அவர் ஒருவித மீட்பைப் பெற்றிருந்தால், அவர்களுக்கும் அதே எதிர்வினை இருந்திருக்குமா? சந்தேகமாம் தான். அதே போல விக்ரம், ஒரு ஆல்பா மேல். கடைசியில் ஏற்கனவே கல்யாணம் ஆனா, ஏற்கனவே குழந்தை பெத்தவளை கல்யாணம் செய்வது அவன் தண்டனை என்று எழுதி இருந்தேன். அவன் உறவினர், நண்பர்கள் இதை பார்த்து இழிவாக பேசும் போது ஒரு ஆல்பா மேல் ஆகா இருக்கும் அவனுக்கு கேவலமாக இருக்கும் என்று எண்ணத்தில் அப்படி எழுதி இருந்தேன். பார்க்க போனால் அவன் மனைவியாக இருப்பவள் ஏற்கனவே வேறஒருவன் அனுபவித்த பெண். இது அவன் 'ஈகோ' வுக்கு பெரிய அடி. இது போதுமான தண்டனை இல்லை என்று விமர்சித்திருந்தால் எனக்கு ஒகே. அனால் மறுபடியும் சொல்லுறேன், யாருக்கும் என்னை கேவலமாக பேச உரிமை இல்லை.
நகைச்சுவையான விஷயம் என்னவென்றால், ஒரு செக்ஸ் கதை தளத்தில் சிலர் தார்மீக பாடங்களைத் தேடுகிறார்கள். They don’t seem to have the basic intellect to discern between life and fiction.
ஜாதி மல்லி என்ற கதையை வேறு மாதிரி எழுதுவதாக இருந்தேன். அப்படி செய்தால் இந்த கதை முடிவுக்கு வந்த அட்வெர்ஸ் விமர்சனங்களால் நான் அந்த கதையை அப்படி கொண்டு செல்கிறேன் என்று சிலர் சொல்வேர்கள். இந்த காரணத்துக்குக்கா அதை எழுதாமல் இருப்பதே நல்லது. நான் ஒரு பொழுதுபோக்காக, மற்றவர்களை entertain பண்ணுவதுக்காக என் நேரத்தை செலவழித்து கதை எழுதுகிறேன். இபோது என் கோபம் சற்று தணிந்தாலும் இனி எதற்கு எழுதுனம் என்ற முடிவில் இருக்கேன். I could definitely use my spare time more productively.
எனக்கு ஆதரவு கொடுத்த எல்லோருக்கும் நன்றி சொல்லி விடைபெருகுறேன். நிச்சயமாக உங்களை மகிழ்ச்சிப்படுத்த புது புது எழுத்தாளர்கள் இந்த தளத்துக்கு வருவார்கள்.
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Only this update gave a clarity for me of what kind of punishment both actually got.
I am very sure that many did not understand the last update clearly or they did not read it properly. That is why they misunderstood and reacted that way.
Completely respect your decision. Thanks again for the story.
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I have read many stories. I have never seen these type of reactions anywhere.
I also wrote couple of stories. But did not get enough support/appreciation like this story. I therefore stopped writing. I am not a great writer and therefore, no one really cared about it.
I still do not understand what made few people comment like this. This is atrocious. Who gave the right for them to abuse the other readers and writer.
I apologize for the inconvenience caused by those stupid people who reacted like that. It is very sad and difficult to see a great writer like you take this decision.
Even when i was giving comments, many reacted in such a way that i had to stop commenting. You are aware of it.
Please reconsider your decision for the majority of the other readers who read and appreciate your work always.
After seeing your last post, I strongly believe that people who gave bad comments think about it and will not give comments like that for any of the stories in future.
Please continue the jadhi malli story and only you can do justice to that story. This is my humble request on behalf of the people read this story and others that did not comment.
I hope you understand and accept the request.
Thanks so much for this story and waiting to see more of your work in this website.
Please come again and soon. Waiting for your reply on this.
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That's true.. commenting is every ones right.. but no one have right to abusing the readers and authors.. that makes them to stop their writing.. here no authors are getting paid for their stories.. likes and comments are credit they are receiving.. so stop using horas words ..
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பவனி மோகனிடம் மன்னிப்பு கேட்கவில்லை என்றாலும், உங்கள்
முடிவுரை பதிவை மோசமாக விமர்சனம் செய்தவர்கள் மன்னிப்பு கேட்பார்களா இல்லையா என்று தெரியாது என்றாலும் நான் உங்களிடம் எனது தவறான புரிதலுக்கு மனதார மன்னிப்பு கேட்டு கொள்கிறேன்.
உங்கள் கடைசி பதிவை படித்த பிறகு தான் பவனி, மோகன் இருவரும் எததகய தண்டனையை பெற்றார்கள் என்பதை என்னால் புரிந்து கொள்ள முடிந்தது. பெற்றோர், உறவினர், நண்பர்கள் போன்றவர்களை இழப்பதை விட ஒரு கொடிய தண்டனை இருக்க முடியாது. அதை ரெண்டு பெரும் பெற்றார்கள் என்று உணர்ந்து கொண்டேன். பவனி தன்னோட அன்பு மகனை பார்க்க கூட முடியாமல் மோகன் தடுத்தது அவளுக்கு ஓர் ஆறாத காயம் தான். நீங்கள் முடிவுரையில் அதை விவரித்த விதம் முழுதாக சென்று அடையவில்லை என்று நினைக்கிறன். மீண்டும் நீங்கள் சொன்ன பிறகு தான் அது தெளிவாக விளங்குகிறது..
நான் தவறாக புரிந்து கொண்டது போல மேலும் பலரும் புரிந்து கொண்டு இருக்கலாம் அல்லது புரியாமல் முட்டாள்கள் போல விமர்சனம் மட்டும் செய்தும் இருக்கலாம். யார் அறிவார்.
இனி இவர்கள் இருவரும் தனிமரமாக ஒருவருக்கு ஒருவர் ஆறுதல் கொண்டு வாழ வேண்டி இருக்கலாம். அவர்களது பிள்ளைக்கு அவினாஷுக்கு கிடைத்தது போல தாத்தா பாட்டி அன்பு கிடைக்காது. பவனி தங்கை திருமணத்துக்கு அவளால் போக முடியாது. அவளது தாய் தந்தை மரணம் அடைந்தால் அவளால் போக முடியாது. அவினாஷ் எப்படி இருக்கிறான், தன்னை முழுவதும் மறந்து விட்டான் என்பது அவளுக்கு பெரிய இடியாக தான் இருக்கும். எந்த ஒரு தாய்க்கும் தன முதல் பிள்ளையை போல விஷேஷம் வேற எதுவும் இருக்க முடியாது. பவனி காம செயல்கள் அவளை அந்த முதல் பிள்ளையை, பெற்று வளர்த்த தாய் தந்தையை, அன்பு தங்கையை காலம் முழுக்க காண முடியாத படி செய்து விட்டது. இந்த நினைவுகள் காலம் முழுக்க அவளை ஏதேனும் ஒரு வகையில் துன்பம் கொடுத்து கொண்டே இருக்கும்.
விக்ரம் அவனது குடும்பம், நண்பர்கள் எல்லாம் அசிங்கமாக பேசி, கேவலப்படுத்தி இருந்தாலும் எங்கே தான் பவானியை ஏற்று கொள்ளாவிட்டால் அவள் குழந்தையுடன் தற்கொலை செய்து கொள்வாள் அதற்கு முழு காரணமும் நானாக தான் இருப்பேன். அந்த குற்ற உணர்ச்சி என்னை கொன்று விடும் என்பதால் அவளை மணந்து கொண்டான். பவானிக்கு ஒரே ஆதரவு விக்ரமின் அன்பு மட்டும் தான். தன்னால் துன்பப்பட்ட பெண்ணுக்கு விக்ரம் வாழ்க்கை கொடுத்து தான் செய்த தவறுக்கு பிராயச்சித்தம் தேடி கொண்டான். இதன் மூலம் அவனது ஆண்மகன் என்ற ஆணவம் ஒழிந்து இருக்கும். அது அவன் ஆண்மைக்கு பெரிய சாட்டை அடி தான். எந்த பெண்ணையும் பார்க்கும் போது அவனுக்கு இனிமேல் பவானிக்கு செய்த துரோகம் தான் மனதில் வந்து செல்லும்.
உங்கள் கதையை ஆரம்பத்தில் இருந்து ரசித்து படித்தேன். மற்றவர்கள் ஒரே பாணியில் எழுதும் போது நீங்கள் எழுதும் பாணி மிகவும் பிடித்து இருந்தது. கதையின் நானும் ஒன்றி விட்டேன். அதால் ஏற்பட்ட விளைவு உங்களை பாதித்துள்ளது என்பதை அறிந்து மனம் நொந்து விட்டேன். மீண்டும் என்னை மன்னித்து விடுங்க. உங்களை போல ஒரு சிறந்த எழுத்தாளரின் மனதை நோக செய்த கமெண்ட்ஸ் பதிவுகளை ஆதரித்ததுக்கு நான் மிகவும் வருந்துகிறேன். இனிமேல் தவறி கூட இப்படி செய்ய மாட்டேன். மற்றவர்கள் இதை உணர்வார்கள் என்று நம்புகிறேன். தயவு செய்து உங்கள் அற்புத எழுத்தை தொடர்ந்து கொடுங்கள்.
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நான் இந்த கதையை ஆரம்பத்தில் இருந்து படித்து வருகிறேன், பின்பு கதை போன பேக்கில் அதை படிக்க மனம் இல்லை, உங்கள் கடைசி பதிவு, மோகன் மறுமணம், பவானி மறுமணம்.. நல்ல தீர்ப்பு ஆனால், துரோகம் செய்தக்கு தண்டனை பத்தாது.. பவானி விக்ரம் இருவருக்கு குழந்தை இல்லம் இருக்க செய்து முடித்து இருக்கலாம்.. Xossip ல என்னோட முதல் comment.
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19-11-2019, 08:47 AM
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(16-11-2019, 02:23 PM)Joseph Rayman Wrote: Yes. not happy with the final episode. She should have suffered for few months for her deeds at least. She cried for few minutes and went away happily with vikram. what the hell punishment is this. Mohan must have suffered a lot before getting married to amutha for no fault of his. very bad.
I am not supporting the few members who had used unethical words in comments. In an adultery story, it is not mandatory that person who is unfaithful has to be punished. This story has somehow created an expectation like punishment is needed for the Bavani and Vikram that and that is the main reason for the issue. Agree that everyone enjoyed the sex portions between the pratagonists.
I beg to differ with you telling the marriage of vikram and bavani as a punishment for them. you told that she lost her son and parents and he is punished with alpha image got affected and big hit for his ego. Two reasons.
1. Bavani once told that when she is with vikram, she will never think about her family. So, she will never ever think about her son or parents in future anyway and how it can be called as punishment for her.
"நீ ரொம்ப மோசம்டா, நீ இருந்தால் எல்லாற்றையும் மருந்துடுறேன். அம்மா என்னை திட்டுறாங்க."
2. You never spoke about vikram family or friends anywhere in the story from the beginning and telling that they are against his marriage is not in acceptable manner. Also, marrying a beautiful girl looking better than sumitha cannot be a punishment. Infact you had done good for both.
If vikram had to marry Bavani, and take care of Avinash like father also, then it would have made some sense to understand that his relatives scolding him or alpha image/ego getting affected. Because he was made to father another person child. it would have really hit his ego.
If vikram did not love Bavani and only want to prove his alpha image defeating mohan, but had to marry her due to circumstances and his deeds would have been some sort of punishment for him. You had made him fall in love with her already during the course of story. So, this did not well with the ending and you calling them as punished.
Vikram had already tied the knot to Bavani. He has enjoyed her fully and impregnated her as well. He must have just registered the marriage for the sake of it. Anyone seeing bavani that time knows that she is pregnant. I dont see a point that he can go for a grand wedding and his family, friends and relatives rejected him. Why do they going to seek their blessings after all. Are they marrying the first time?
Again, i would reiterate that it is only Mohan who got punished or really suffered. I am very sure that most of the readers will agree with me. He had to be single father for avinash before marrying Amudha. His social status would have definitely got affected and his family, relatives would have scolded him citing the reason for divorce and friends would have teased him saying that he cannot live with beautiful wife properly.
Many of his relatives have seen Bavani and vikram talking together in the marriage including one of vikram friend for whom Bavani is Anni. Vikram friends know about his character and when they come to know that Vikram and Bavani got married, they will say that she had affair already with vikram, became pregnant and eloped with him because Mohan cannot satisfy his wife properly and he is now giving different reason for divorce. Sadly, The punishment is ONLY for Mohan. There cannot be a big humiliation for a man than this.
The last portion where you had told that they are attending a relative marriage is something confusing. When there is no relatives supporting/inviting both which relative marriage they are in.
Secondly, when vikram asked Bharani to seduce another woman and identified one for her, it clear that his character has not changed.
Bavani acting as if she is not happy with what vikram did to Bharani also did not go well.
Bavani using more respectful words to vikram like "avuru, neenga" like calling mohan did not look good.
Thanks for giving a wonderful story. Except the epilogue, everything else is good and i enjoyed reading it.
I understand that you are affected by the words of few comments. Considering the involvement of readers, you can forgive them for the mistake that they did in the last minute/part and continue with your new story.
If you still feel that you do not want to continue, all that i can say is respect your decision.
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(19-11-2019, 04:58 AM)Harish raj Wrote: நான் இந்த கதையை ஆரம்பத்தில் இருந்து படித்து வருகிறேன், பின்பு கதை போன பேக்கில் அதை படிக்க மனம் இல்லை, உங்கள் கடைசி பதிவு, மோகன் மறுமணம், பவானி மறுமணம்.. நல்ல தீர்ப்பு ஆனால், துரோகம் செய்தக்கு தண்டனை பத்தாது.. பவானி விக்ரம் இருவருக்கு குழந்தை இல்லம் இருக்க செய்து முடித்து இருக்கலாம்.. Xossip ல என்னோட முதல் comment.
(19-11-2019, 08:47 AM)Joseph Rayman Wrote: I am not supporting the few members who had used unethical words in comments. In an adultery story, it is not mandatory that person who is unfaithful has to be punished. This story has somehow created an expectation like punishment is needed for the Bavani and Vikram that and that is the main reason for the issue. Agree that everyone enjoyed the sex portions between the pratagonists.
I beg to differ with you telling the marriage of vikram and bavani as a punishment for them. you told that she lost her son and parents and he is punished with alpha image got affected and big hit for his ego. Two reasons.
1. Bavani once told that when she is with vikram, she will never think about her family. So, she will never ever think about her son or parents in future anyway and how it can be called as punishment for her.
"நீ ரொம்ப மோசம்டா, நீ இருந்தால் எல்லாற்றையும் மருந்துடுறேன். அம்மா என்னை திட்டுறாங்க."
2. You never spoke about vikram family or friends anywhere in the story from the beginning and telling that they are against his marriage is not in acceptable manner. Also, marrying a beautiful girl looking better than sumitha cannot be a punishment. Infact you had done good for both.
If vikram had to marry Bavani, and take care of Avinash like father also, then it would have made some sense to understand that his relatives scolding him or alpha image/ego getting affected. Because he was made to father another person child. it would have really hit his ego.
If vikram did not love Bavani and only want to prove his alpha image defeating mohan, but had to marry her due to circumstances and his deeds would have been some sort of punishment for him. You had made him fall in love with her already during the course of story. So, this did not well with the ending and you calling them as punished.
Vikram had already tied the knot to Bavani. He has enjoyed her fully and impregnated her as well. He must have just registered the marriage for the sake of it. Anyone seeing bavani that time knows that she is pregnant. I dont see a point that he can go for a grand wedding and his family, friends and relatives rejected him. Why do they going to seek their blessings after all. Are they marrying the first time?
Again, i would reiterate that it is only Mohan who got punished or really suffered. I am very sure that most of the readers will agree with me. He had to be single father for avinash before marrying Amudha. His social status would have definitely got affected and his family, relatives would have scolded him citing the reason for divorce and friends would have teased him saying that he cannot live with beautiful wife properly.
Many of his relatives have seen Bavani and vikram talking together in the marriage including one of vikram friend for whom Bavani is Anni. Vikram friends know about his character and when they come to know that Vikram and Bavani got married, they will say that she had affair already with vikram, became pregnant and eloped with him because Mohan cannot satisfy his wife properly and he is now giving different reason for divorce. Sadly, The punishment is ONLY for Mohan. There cannot be a big humiliation for a man than this.
The last portion where you had told that they are attending a relative marriage is something confusing. When there is no relatives supporting/inviting both which relative marriage they are in.
Secondly, when vikram asked Bharani to seduce another woman and identified one for her, it clear that his character has not changed.
Bavani acting as if she is not happy with what vikram did to Bharani also did not go well.
Bavani using more respectful words to vikram like "avuru, neenga" like calling mohan did not look good.
Thanks for giving a wonderful story. Except the epilogue, everything else is good and i enjoyed reading it.
I understand that you are affected by the words of few comments. Considering the involvement of readers, you can forgive them for the mistake that they did in the last minute/part and continue with your new story.
If you still feel that you do not want to continue, all that i can say is respect your decision.
I can accept a difference of opinion and criticism that the guilty duo did not really suffer and they should have had a greater punishment. I have also no issue with Mr. Harris Raj's comment that he did not like the direction the story was going and did not subsequently follow the story. That is his prerogative. What was not acceptable was the abusive tone of some. To be fair that was only a minority of the many readers to comment but nevertheless it was upsetting. I on a personal level had very consciously made an effort not to offend anyone as I view that as unacceptable behavior. It is easy to hide behind a keyboard and be abusive. That is a classic example of cowardice. I too read many stories here in the genre of Adultery, Fantasy, Misc. Erotica Thriller but avoid incest stories as that's not my cup of tea. However I only comment when I find the writing or story to be good. That does not mean everyone should avoid criticism of any kind, but there is a way to do it. Let it be constructive and with proper propriety. Anyway thank you both and others who have taken the effort to reply on my last post.
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(19-11-2019, 01:08 PM)game40it Wrote: I can accept a difference of opinion and criticism that the guilty duo did not really suffer and they should have had a greater punishment. I have also no issue with Mr. Harris Raj's comment that he did not like the direction the story was going and did not subsequently follow the story. That is his prerogative. What was not acceptable was the abusive tone of some. To be fair that was only a minority of the many readers to comment but nevertheless it was upsetting. I on a personal level had very consciously made an effort not to offend anyone as I view that as unacceptable behavior. It is easy to hide behind a keyboard and be abusive. That is a classic example of cowardice. I too read many stories here in the genre of Adultery, Fantasy, Misc. Erotica Thriller but avoid incest stories as that's not my cup of tea. However I only comment when I find the writing or story to be good. That does not mean everyone should avoid criticism of any kind, but there is a way to do it. Let it be constructive and with proper propriety. Anyway thank you both and others who have taken the effort to reply on my last post.
The story was interesting , so only comments exceeded and flow. As I told already everybody involved into the story and thought it really happening. It is an GREAT ACHIEVEMENT for you "game40it". REPPS added.
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Thank you @game40it bro.
Sorry for the inconvenience caused by few readers to you.
Completely understand your feelings and accept the decision taken by you.
Got that you can spend your time in much better manner and more productively.
Have a good time and life.
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Game40it how can you say that being hidden behind the keyboard and commenting is an cowardice would you tell your family that you are a sex story writer... Are you brave enough for that...
First understand one thing...
Nenga pana thapa realize panunga....
Bhavani nenachu irundha avanga husband Sona place la irundhu adikadi avanga husband aa family aa paka try pani avanga kooda sera nenachu irukalam Ana Ava adha panala Vikram vandhadhu udanae avankoodavae poita
Is that right Vikram ala Ava family oda manam mariyatha iva husband iva vazhka yellam pochu ...
Inimae ivaanga appa Amma yentha function ponalum odipona ponoda appa Amma nu yevlo kevalama pesuvanga
Mohan veliya pona pondatiya pathuka vakku ilathavan nu yevlo kevalama pesi irupanga....
Avinash Mohan ku kalayanam agara varaikum pathuka Amma ilama yevlo kasta patu irupan...
Ana bhavani Vikram vandha udanae avankoodavae poita keta Ava punishment am..
Avaluku sex mattum tha mukkiyam aa irunduu iruku ilana Vikram kooda poi iruka nata
Nayaym aa Ava family husband kozhanthaiya Ava family oda gowravam idhu yellam azhicha Vikram mela kovam tha varanum Ana avan mela ivaluku kadhal varudhu yen karumam...idhu...
Bro oru small request ungakuku vena intha mathiri sex kaga petha pullaiya vitutu pora Amma mathiri character normal aa irukalam bt yengaluku appadi ila
Intha bhavani character aa pakra Apo sex kaga rendu kozhanthaiya Kona abirami tha nayabagam varudhu...
Inimaalaevadhu kanavan manaivi uravil waste kala kadhal tha vazhai la sirandhadhu kala kadhal tha best nu story write panathenha
Ungalala husband and wife relationship ku mariyatha thara mudiyala na kooda paravila adha asinga paduthu kocha paduthi adhula santhosam padathenga
Nenga valara vazhra situation vena husband and wife relationship ku mariyatha ilatha place aa irukalam Ana Inga iruka palar peroda life style Vera ok
Inimaalaevadhu kala kadhal tha best husband and wife relationship waste ndra mathiri story aa ezhythatnega....
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(30-08-2019, 07:30 PM)game40it Wrote: The answer to that would be 'not really'. Apart from his weakness in bed he has been a good husband and certainly deserves better. However life is not always fair. Will just have to wait and see if he gets a fair deal in this story in the future.
The weakness in bed has finally given a deserved punishment for Mohan. He was not able to get any fair deal.
The message is loud and clear that
"A husband needs to be strong and good in bed. Otherwise, he don't deserve a good life.
His wife will surely fuck, sleep and marry with another person keeping her happy in bed.
She will humiliate the husband and family to any level for her sexual needs. "
Thank you for the story and message.
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@game40it:
Thank a ton for this story. Sorry if any of my comments had hurt you.
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(19-11-2019, 04:14 PM)xossipyenjoy Wrote: Thank you @game40it bro.
Sorry for the inconvenience caused by few readers to you.
Completely understand your feelings and accept the decision taken by you.
Got that you can spend your time in much better manner and more productively.
Have a good time and life.
(19-11-2019, 05:12 PM)naughty2hotty Wrote: சில பேரு தானும் எழுத மாட்டான் எழுதுறவங்களையும் விட மாட்டான்.
@game4it : My sincere request to you as a fellow author and fan to reconsider your decision
Hi to the both of you. I am in a bit of an agitated state of mind now. It is best I take a week off to see if I would want to reconsider my decision. Probably I will be much calmer then. I'll see how it goes.
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