Adultery No One Dies a Saint (Completed)

[Ramesh_Rocky]

EDIT: Added a few more words in the morning.

haha Rocky I finished the entire story :P . Yep, I finished what took 16 months for the author to write in just 3 days, so people should stop complaining when updates are delayed. It is not easy to write. (but it is also easy for me to say this since I never had to wait and I noticed he left you people with cliffhangers many times causing you frustration :D ) 

Krish, you are a genius man. The way you created all these characters, put life into their stories and the way you managed to tie up all loose ends are evidences for your brilliant writing capabilities. I have not slept for more than 15 hours in total in the last 3 days. I also skipped office so that I could completely lose myself in this fictional world you have created and I have no regrets for skipping work. I really loved that way you wrote the conversations between atul and other women. I wonder what you are like in real life. I bet you make women orgasm just with your words  :D

I have both pros and cons. I'll start with the former. 

Flirting between Atul and Ankita, and Atul's first date with ridhima are my favorite parts of the story. They were wholesome. The confidence of Ankita impressed me a lot. She was a mature woman(unlike anvita), she knew what she wanted and seemed like a joyful woman to be around. I wish she had went on more dates with Atul who can make anyone sleep with him with just his charm. Please try to write a character like her in your future stories if possible..

My fav characters are Rajyavardhan and of course Ankita lol. Rajyavardhan was a unique person, he was a ray of hope and he fit really well in the story. His unpredictable behavior and his way with words kept me hooked.
I think Radhika is one of the most underrated character. She was unpredictable and at the same time cunning. She also showed lot of confidence. But in my opinion the most well written character goes to Shreyas. He was the real wolf in sheep's skin. He wasn't stupid, he didn't rush. He consciously made his every move. Played it like a chess and he would have arrived as a champion if Rajat hadn't knocked on the door. Moreover he was also the most believable character. A wealthy boss in an unhappy marriage who wanted to screw his employee's extremely beautiful wife. His character was meticulously written, and nowhere did it feel like he would lose. I don't think anybody could have written it like this.

Although there weren't as many sex scenes in the story as one usually finds in an erotica, most of the them were really well written and did their job if you know what I mean.  ;)


Now coming to the cons...
The biggest con in my opinion is in the last chapter and to my surprise everyone is happy with the last chapter. I think last chapter is the weakest chapter in the whole story.
When Anvita revealed all her secrets to Atul, I was eagerly waiting for Atul's reaction. I mean, this was the moment we all had been waiting for, but I felt like I was let down again. I was waiting for him to break down, instead he did a U-turn and told her that he still loved her. I just couldn't believe it, since just a few hours ago he was in a very painful condition looking at George's video. Whether cucked or not, western liberal or himalayan monk, 99.999% of men in the world would be shattered at such revelations. Atul is no saint I agree(he almost fucked Radhika), but you can't just say Atul is also a cheater and hence he was righ in forgiving her. There is a degree to it. You might think I'm favouring Atul(because I'm a male) but I'm not. IMO Atul's affairs are understandable. Both Ankita and Ridhima were in desperate conditions and their encounters with Atul changed their life for better and it was also a one time thing for both of them. But Antia slept or had sexual encounters with others purely for pleasure. Atul's inability to make her orgasm doesn't allow her to go on dates with any man who compliments her beauty. This is 2019, there are multiple ways to treat that.(I am aware this is an erotica, and this is how it happens but I'm ignoring the erotica part for now) she also lied to him by assuring him that everything was alright when it wasn't. Communication is the key in any relationship and she simply sucked at being a wife. Her sexual adventures weren't just normal betrayals, she betrayed in a big way by going on dates with people whom Atul trusted. Atul respected Shreyas and had huge trust in Pruthvi. When he learned about her secret dates with shreyas or her secretly inviting Pruthvi to her house it should have ripped his heart open. It would have been understandable if she cheated him by accident one or two times. She was lying straight to his face all the time, she would have made out with shreyas with her husband sleeping beside her if Rajat hadn't knocked on the door at the right time. Later she phone sexed with him and he stole her panty which actually aroused her even more. And Atul didn't even have the slightest hint that there was something going on between his wife and Shreyas. Atul felt that he had won over Shreyas by exposing him to stock holders but now Atul should have thought that when he was getting Shreyas fired, Shreyas must have been laughing by thinking "But I almost fucked your wife and I still have her party, unwashed, Atul". Any sane person would have such thoughts.

 He also had trusted in Pruthvi(Atul is a grade-A chutiya though, no doubt about that) but she took advantage of that and used him for her favor. She also fucked him the day before their anniversary. These are not ordinary betrayals. These are huge things. Not just Anvita, everyone around Atul was playing a game, making him a fool, was getting intimate with his wife, with her permission. "Was she like this even before marriage?" he should have thought when she revealed her secrets. He should have questioned himself in his mind whether she really loved him or not like he did when he saw George's video. His heart should have exploded. Look at Mohit, he fucking killed Rajat as soon as he learnt that his wife was cheating. Mohit's action was 100 times more believable than Atul's. Atul at least should have called Ridhima himself and told her to have his child right in front of Anvita as a revenge and then could have calmed down. But he says, "You are truly an Angel, Anvi". I don't understand how he could say he loves her no matter what after all this. What is love when there is no trust? what is his definition of love anyway? Each of them were just trophies for each other. What is it that still made him love her? was it her beauty? or the praises he received for having such a beautiful wife? He didn't love her, he loved her body, he loved the idea of having the most sought after girl as his wife. He loved the compliments he received for other people for being her husband. This is why I think this chapter was poorly written and rushed.

Another thing I was hoping for was that Ankita would confess that she thought Atul was a cuck. Man, this would have been very interesting and I was very looking forward to it. But she didn't tell him about the naughty things she did with pruthvi when she had invited him to dinner thinking that her husband was a cuck. She was a slut and no man accepts a slut as his wife. Everyone deserves a second chance but giving another chance is different from simply accepting everything in an instant. Another thing I was hoping was that she would think about those threesome and other dirty thoughts she had when she had believed that he was a cuck. I wanted her to have a moment of enlightenment that she made it all up in her mind, that her husband was not a cuck, and she almost allowed Rajat to sleep with her because of her stupidity. I wanted her to realize that she was beauty with no brains.

We didn't get to witness Anvita's reaction when she found out that Atul saw George's video.

My another complaint from the last chapter is Mohit's role. It simply felt forced. I mean, what are the odds of Mohit finding out about his wife's adultery on the same day that Pruthvi knocks Rajat out to unconsciousness? It seems like you wanted to give an happy ending but an ending that was not too predictable either.

I also think Pruthvi's character was weak. I didn't find Anivta and Pruthvi's interactions(except sexual situations which were great) as entertaining as say Atul and Ridhima's. Anvita was a goddess but was neither as funny nor as interesting as Atul. Except in some situations, Prutvi's talks were boring and his repeated compliments were getting me annoyed. The pace was a bit slow in the middle of the story(I understand this happens when you have a lot of characters). Whenever a new character was introduced, I was like "Oh man.. Not again". I felt like Anvita's office characters were a bit boring, Of course you had to introduce new characters to keep the storyline open to different possibilities since nobody knew the entire story. So can't really complain much. Also Manjot getting bused exactly at the right time just as he was about to bang Anvita felt it was straight from bollywood.

 Reading comments about cuckold, I also have an interesting fantasy. What if Sahil saw Atul and Ankita fucking and seeing her wife moan like that turned him on which improved his performance with his wife? And then a threesome?  I think it would have been very erotic(at least for me, since I love Ankita). It would have made Atul's acceptance to Rajat's idea of allowing Anvita to go on dates with other men to improve his performance in bed more believable. It would have also made Atul more guilty and also Ankita would have found happiness. 

Also you made Atul's character too stupid. It kills the fun since everyone could manipulate him. Rajat was never shown in good light but Atul still believed him. It doesn't take a Rajyavardhan to know that Rajat was a wolf in sheep's clothes.

I may have missed something or misinterpreted something. If that's the case, I'm sorry, I read the whole story in 3 days. For now, these are my honest thoughts and I hope my criticisms would be taken positively if they are valid.
Pros obviously heavily over weigh the cons and it is one of the best Indian stories I have read. These characters touched my heart and I don't know if I will be able to fantasize about married women in my neighborhood anymore lol. Can't believe I have written 1700+ words lol, I have never done something like this. Finally, thanks for giving us this story Krish. We should be grateful that in a world where nothing is free and most of the stories are shit, a talented writer like you chose to spend his time on entertaining us and more importantly you finished the story as promised even if it took you 16 months( I can't exercise straight for a week  :D ). That takes strong will.1

Hi,

Everyone thinking Atul point of view that is why everyone feeling Atul reaction was not right. This is just because Krish explain Atul mind & heart completely to us in the story but he explained anvita mind completely not her heart.he did it to keep our mind focus and interest on story. In Varun episode she keep saying about Atul to Varun yes she did some mistakes and just like that Atul did the same mistakes too. Anvita has soft Conner towards Prithvi and Atul has towards ridhima.george blackmailed and forced anvita.atul suduced by ankitha. Krish driving both  anvita and Atul characters parallely.but we understand atut better than anvita.

Note:- I really can't remember this did Krish explain the night party situation anvita with Shreyas and Atul staying with ridhima in hotel room.