Adultery HAWAS KI AAG

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Story ka plot jabardast chuna hai, Anupama ka charectar bhi badiya hai aur raka ki entry bhi achhi dikhai gai but kuchh kumi dikhi jinme sudhar ki zarurat hai. If u ask my suggetion.
1- Story me pics ki absence hai pics story ko jada kamuk real aur readers se jada connect bana dete hai. Kai baar readers pics dekhkar hi story ki taraf akarshit ho jate hai. Story ke main charectars ko bhi pics ke madhyam se ek face diya ja sakta hai isse bhi readers un kirdaar se jada relate kar leta hai.
2- Raka ghar ka main seciurty incharge hai aur usne jo bhi kara wo bina kisi plan ke kara aur bachhe ko marne ja raha tha bina kisi plan ke. Agar ghar me bachhe ka murder hota to pehla sawal security incharge se hota. To thoda preplan hona zaroori tha. Sex scene dene ki jaldi me Raka ke kirdaar ko khulne ka mauka kum mila. Aur story ke jo main jamidaar hai unke baare me bhi jada nahi bataya gaya.
3- Sabse jada weakpole Anupama ke kirdaar me laga ki usne badi jaldi samarpan kar diya. Pehle use ek achhi maa dikhaya gaya jo apne bachhe ko batane ke liye sex karne ko tayar ho gai aur agle hi page jab uske saamne uske bachhe ko maarne ki baat kari ja rahi hai to bajae uspar kuch kehne ke wo keh rahi hai aur zor se andar dalo aaahhh aaahhhh,  ye thoda sex ki jaldbaazi ho gai. Agar waha par sex scene ki jagah ek bang scene hota to jada realistic hota par waha par anupama ka maza lena thoda galat laga. Ya to anupama ko ek charectarless shatir aurat ke roop me pesh karna tha jise apne bachhe ki bhi parwah nahi.

Bhai agar tum sex scene ke hisab se dekho to sahi hai par agar story ke hisab se dekho to thoda jaldbaazi hai.
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