[steverichi]

The story is really amazing. Great build up and then the main part. The sudden transformation for Bhola is slightly rushed but I am sure that it would be part of larger game. You should continue the story centered around simran and make it more like an awakening for her. Priti should be someone who pushes her towards this by showing that she is selfness and wants her friend to be really happy and prosperous explore. Before making it cuckold story, I suggest send Ravi to South Korea for a week or so and let both simran and bhola be completely free. That time to be used in unleashing there desires not just at home but outside. Keep the fear of getting caught as that will make it more exciting. Let them behave like teenagers in love. Keep the pregnency and jeevdhatu at the back. Let her have fun and be happy. And then she should offer bhola to priti. Then bring the cuckold story and close the loop on mother jeevdhatu and other things.