06-10-2026, 06:15 PM
(04-10-2026, 11:48 PM)sharath841 Wrote: GIVE ME FEED BACK
I think the original author's writing style and yours are a bit different. His quickly escalated from nothing to sending a lipstick emoji after touching the cock -- all in under five small chapters.
Maybe you can streamline with same font style on your posts [that will make it look smooth and clean; also remove the "?" marks at beginning of the dialogs], and introduce sexual tension in there. Maybe something explicit. Especially since you've posted many parts already.
Slow-burn is good, but this desperately needs some action. Or else, their sex life is going to be as dry as Sahara desert.


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