4 hours ago
Read most of your stories late and here's my review even though its late.
Orchestration of wife's cheating:
Really good one, the emotional maturity at the end is too good. I liked the way husband thought out all scenarios for his wife before letting her go...though the story could extend little bit in terms of establishing the second partner and wife's chemistry well, seems their arc was rushed a bit. Husband being distant and cold to her could make her fall for other man but it was not covered in depth.
Husband's doubt:
My biggest gripe is this story, did not like it at all...the strength of this story is Rohan and how smoothly he manipulated the couple and esp Nivi..that aspect alone made me complete that story. I did not like bringing in the second couple and Rohan shifting to different woman nor the ending how ladies take control and Prem is merely a pawn at the beginning and also a pappu at the end. He should have got his credit for investigating and finding the truth and should have an emotional breakdown with Nivi but it didn't happen and story went into completely different arc with two other characters involvement. Least fav of your story for me.
Mirna: This one, yet to read, heard great things about it, will read when time permits...Usually I do not like to read stories that are completed....its like watching a movie while it is playing in theater vs watching on OTT after an yr.
100 days: This one is again one of the best stories, though at the end it was prolonged like a serial, Surya coming back and understanding things why Rahul did what he did should have been the ending...Its Rahul's sacrifice that gave him Anandi in the first place and should have recognized the efforts he put into making his wife fall for him, so everything that came after that and its credit goes to Rahul, even though he conspired and made him to go to Jail, Surya should have forgiven him and gave their life back to them....that would have been apt than this sharing between both men at the end, that screwed it up for me but overall much matured writing in this one.
Wife's Dilemma: This one I think can be finished, I liked it midway until the repetitive sessions and back & forth for Sneha with out consistency in her stand made her character weak, I am sure that is the reason you are not completing it. Suresh and Gautham are fine and its Sneha's character arc I felt is screwed up emotionally. I understand why wouldn't take it further.
Nikita: one of the best on this forum in terms of situations and screenplay writing.
~RCF
Orchestration of wife's cheating:
Really good one, the emotional maturity at the end is too good. I liked the way husband thought out all scenarios for his wife before letting her go...though the story could extend little bit in terms of establishing the second partner and wife's chemistry well, seems their arc was rushed a bit. Husband being distant and cold to her could make her fall for other man but it was not covered in depth.
Husband's doubt:
My biggest gripe is this story, did not like it at all...the strength of this story is Rohan and how smoothly he manipulated the couple and esp Nivi..that aspect alone made me complete that story. I did not like bringing in the second couple and Rohan shifting to different woman nor the ending how ladies take control and Prem is merely a pawn at the beginning and also a pappu at the end. He should have got his credit for investigating and finding the truth and should have an emotional breakdown with Nivi but it didn't happen and story went into completely different arc with two other characters involvement. Least fav of your story for me.
Mirna: This one, yet to read, heard great things about it, will read when time permits...Usually I do not like to read stories that are completed....its like watching a movie while it is playing in theater vs watching on OTT after an yr.
100 days: This one is again one of the best stories, though at the end it was prolonged like a serial, Surya coming back and understanding things why Rahul did what he did should have been the ending...Its Rahul's sacrifice that gave him Anandi in the first place and should have recognized the efforts he put into making his wife fall for him, so everything that came after that and its credit goes to Rahul, even though he conspired and made him to go to Jail, Surya should have forgiven him and gave their life back to them....that would have been apt than this sharing between both men at the end, that screwed it up for me but overall much matured writing in this one.
Wife's Dilemma: This one I think can be finished, I liked it midway until the repetitive sessions and back & forth for Sneha with out consistency in her stand made her character weak, I am sure that is the reason you are not completing it. Suresh and Gautham are fine and its Sneha's character arc I felt is screwed up emotionally. I understand why wouldn't take it further.
Nikita: one of the best on this forum in terms of situations and screenplay writing.
~RCF
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