[heygiwriter]

Hi yaar,

I have all the adjectives and adverbs to describe you, but your biggest flaw is your pacing. I could skip ten or fifteen chapters, come back, and feel like I hadn't missed anything. 

The words change, but the story barely moves. There's no real sense of progression, growth, or transformation—just different versions of the same chapter. Consistency is your strength, but without momentum, it starts to feel like stagnation. 

A great story makes every chapter feel indispensable. Yours often makes them feel interchangeable.

And I started to think, how this is anywhere near to eroticism? Where is adultery? (Adultery is my favourite theme)

Simple dont read it, ignore this story and move on.