Adultery Sanskari Lilly - Vitamin Bhabhi! ( Daily diary of lily's fantasy world)

[Baburao12]

First thing first, there is nothing wrong with writing. Characterization , situations, seduction is written with amazing clarity, one of the best writing currently going on xossipy. But the length of the update should be uniform , some updates are bigger while some are hardly paragraph long. Also there is little happening in terms of story.With every situation ( which are written with genius) story should move forward. Cheating wife by kk is great example of this. Each episode moves the story forward.
Don't take it as criticism brother. You are one of the finest writer ever to grace the xossipy.
Couldn't thank you enough for amazing time you give us with your writing, that too for free of cost. Words can't describe my gratitude.
One another suggestion, lily should try to get more close with birju so kalu can get jealous. Maybe she does some sexual thing which she hadn't done yet with kalu , that really makes kalu upset. Just a suggestion though, you know your story and characters better