16-05-2026, 04:25 AM
(This post was last modified: 16-05-2026, 04:30 AM by jaatrangila99. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Earlier chapter feedback:-
The sweet couple arc: that was beautiful ❤️
Friendship with Gautam arc: it was slow but detailed
Convincing the wife arc: that was main course for me. Like how Suresh convince his wife for this adulterous adventure.
Kidnap arc: masterpiece
1st sex arc: the 1st sex between Gautam and Sneha was another masterpiece. Slow but deadly.
Rule arc: seeing Suresh getting heart and trying to control the rhythm was good.
Breaking the Rules arc: another slow but detailed section. Most beautiful part of story till now
Now feedback for Mr. Author:-
(1) These earlier parts were great. But why? Not because of sex. (We have many stories where sex is more arousing, where it is more detailed, where mere gif and more hq quality pics are added). So if not sex, then what?
For me it was Logic.
Yes, Logic.
Because each part was explained very thoroughly. Sometimes it looks like author is hell bound in explaining every action of every character of story. Which was so great . Yes, I know there were some loopholes. But logic was like 80 % and they were 20 %.
So I was ready and more than willing to ignore those loopholes. But now this gift arc (point no 3). Why? It was so rushed.
(2) Meeting the Advocate arc + The Brahmastra "The Divorce arc" :
I think author has done some major blunder my introducing these 2 arcs so early in story. Now he has to justify Sneha's every adulterous adventure and why the cuck is not filing for divorce.
As the author is so hellbound to explain everything in so detailed manner (which I like the most) so he also has to somehow justify the betrayal and why Suresh is still behaving like a pimp. It will be very frustrating to see.
You should have added these 2 arcs after sneha has completed her century in body count.
(3) The Gift acr: the ultimate disappointing arc of this story:
Mr. Author you had invested so much into build-up the divorce arc that now to continue the marriage, you must normalise the sexual relationship between Sneha and Suresh. And like always you did a great job in building the hype.
But execution, that was pathetic. Utterly disappointing.
Like what the hell man.
Earlier you were writing the sex scene like some some time frame:
From xx pm to xx pm - missionary position+ gif
From xx pm to xx pm - doggy style+ gif
Gautham's feeling in scene
Sneha's feeling in scene
Their respective body movement and many more thing.
And it was completed in many paragraphs.
But gift arc was completed in few lines. What the fuck man. Feels like KLPD.
Where are the gifs, pics, details?
(4) I know it is a fictional story. I know what does the word fiction means. But you were using logic as a base and now it feels like fiction is the main thing.
(5) Office working and details:
I am here for sex. But since you are investigating so much time and energy into this ( I am saying that you are investigating not wasting), so it might be necessary for future. So I am ready for patience and will support you in this.
(6) Aaditya character:
Hello is tall. He is dark. He is handsome.
Seriously man what the fuck.
Why are you mentioning like he is another god walking in this planet every time you mention him. It is frustrating.
Future expectations:
(1) Explanations:
Since you have introduced divorce concept. So now explain why Suresh is not filing for it. I know if he file for it then story will end. But to make story logical and continue you have to make a reason for every delay.
(2) Suck the dick arc:
As you have introduced the concept that wife or gf has to suck the dick (most probably Aditya's) for proper "Submission", I am looking forward for it. But don't do it because Aaditya is some dark and handsome character and he is some kind of God and everyone has to complete his every command. It will completely shatter the character of Strong Sneha (like in recent updates) and Suresh (who is trying very hard to become a man).
(3) Further sex between Gautam and Sneha:
I don't have any problem with this. But make it interesting. Not like Gautham had destroyed the EVIDENCE and Sneha is having sex with him to find the EVIDENCE.
(4) Further adulterous adventure:
As this is a adulterous story so having more man fucking Sneha is not bad. But try to add some flavour to it. Not just sex (because that character demands respect and he walk like a dark king).
The sweet couple arc: that was beautiful ❤️
Friendship with Gautam arc: it was slow but detailed
Convincing the wife arc: that was main course for me. Like how Suresh convince his wife for this adulterous adventure.
Kidnap arc: masterpiece
1st sex arc: the 1st sex between Gautam and Sneha was another masterpiece. Slow but deadly.
Rule arc: seeing Suresh getting heart and trying to control the rhythm was good.
Breaking the Rules arc: another slow but detailed section. Most beautiful part of story till now
Now feedback for Mr. Author:-
(1) These earlier parts were great. But why? Not because of sex. (We have many stories where sex is more arousing, where it is more detailed, where mere gif and more hq quality pics are added). So if not sex, then what?
For me it was Logic.
Yes, Logic.
Because each part was explained very thoroughly. Sometimes it looks like author is hell bound in explaining every action of every character of story. Which was so great . Yes, I know there were some loopholes. But logic was like 80 % and they were 20 %.
So I was ready and more than willing to ignore those loopholes. But now this gift arc (point no 3). Why? It was so rushed.
(2) Meeting the Advocate arc + The Brahmastra "The Divorce arc" :
I think author has done some major blunder my introducing these 2 arcs so early in story. Now he has to justify Sneha's every adulterous adventure and why the cuck is not filing for divorce.
As the author is so hellbound to explain everything in so detailed manner (which I like the most) so he also has to somehow justify the betrayal and why Suresh is still behaving like a pimp. It will be very frustrating to see.
You should have added these 2 arcs after sneha has completed her century in body count.
(3) The Gift acr: the ultimate disappointing arc of this story:
Mr. Author you had invested so much into build-up the divorce arc that now to continue the marriage, you must normalise the sexual relationship between Sneha and Suresh. And like always you did a great job in building the hype.
But execution, that was pathetic. Utterly disappointing.
Like what the hell man.
Earlier you were writing the sex scene like some some time frame:
From xx pm to xx pm - missionary position+ gif
From xx pm to xx pm - doggy style+ gif
Gautham's feeling in scene
Sneha's feeling in scene
Their respective body movement and many more thing.
And it was completed in many paragraphs.
But gift arc was completed in few lines. What the fuck man. Feels like KLPD.
Where are the gifs, pics, details?
(4) I know it is a fictional story. I know what does the word fiction means. But you were using logic as a base and now it feels like fiction is the main thing.
(5) Office working and details:
I am here for sex. But since you are investigating so much time and energy into this ( I am saying that you are investigating not wasting), so it might be necessary for future. So I am ready for patience and will support you in this.
(6) Aaditya character:
Hello is tall. He is dark. He is handsome.
Seriously man what the fuck.
Why are you mentioning like he is another god walking in this planet every time you mention him. It is frustrating.
Future expectations:
(1) Explanations:
Since you have introduced divorce concept. So now explain why Suresh is not filing for it. I know if he file for it then story will end. But to make story logical and continue you have to make a reason for every delay.
(2) Suck the dick arc:
As you have introduced the concept that wife or gf has to suck the dick (most probably Aditya's) for proper "Submission", I am looking forward for it. But don't do it because Aaditya is some dark and handsome character and he is some kind of God and everyone has to complete his every command. It will completely shatter the character of Strong Sneha (like in recent updates) and Suresh (who is trying very hard to become a man).
(3) Further sex between Gautam and Sneha:
I don't have any problem with this. But make it interesting. Not like Gautham had destroyed the EVIDENCE and Sneha is having sex with him to find the EVIDENCE.
(4) Further adulterous adventure:
As this is a adulterous story so having more man fucking Sneha is not bad. But try to add some flavour to it. Not just sex (because that character demands respect and he walk like a dark king).
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