17-04-2026, 08:21 PM
(17-04-2026, 08:09 PM)cool.smart2 Wrote: Bro…
Your writing skills is amazing…the way you create scenes, looks so real.
Though as per you story has ended…
But you could have delayed the final sex part by adding erotic scenes frequently between them..
Like sucking her boobs, eating her pussy, fingering her, blowjob, rubbing her pussy with his cock etc.
Could have added sex chats, chat video etc.
Now I feel you can still add above erotic scenes..
Sex at different place of house…
Different positions..
She cooperating with all his wishes…
Also she can question her hubby what if she goes all the way with Raj and judge her reaction…
Tell him details of what all she did with raj and make the readers more enjoyable…
I think you know much better than us how to proceed ahead bro..
I liked your thoughts. I think before Holi celebrations all these could have added and definitely few more episodes would have created full of romance. But now I need to see how to.

Venkatesh
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