Adultery Priya Didi

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I have been on vacation for a while so couldn't respond much but have also been investing what little time I have on one another story.

Having said that, Things that keep readers hooked here is speed in story telling. Read my notes below which can help you not just here anywhere else too....

Fast story telling is the key. Genres doesn't matter but adultery is important, you already know that but if story doesn't move its not a page turner. Feelings are very important but at the same time, feelings and expressions for every scene drag the scenes longer hence people will lose interest.
Imagine you are telling a scene where a man seduces a woman in a train while he is standing behind her, the touch, seduction and whispers and feelings all combined should be completed in 2 updates is necessary, In your case given the same premise you extend it to 10-12 episodes so solution is either write it yourself but consolidate into two episodes when you think the purpose is achieved then post it or small updates should move fast.

Another thing I noticed is your story doesn't have lot of depth as much as depth you show in writing it especially the thoughts of the characters and that's commendable and unique about your writing but without a story that engages the writing won't shine even if it is excellently written...take this story for example, Ravi befriends Priya, then two other women comes into his life and he learns many things from them, then he comes back to Priya and now gets her...story might have lot of other things in future but the rate at which it is written so far this is the story...Blend your unique style of writing thoughts into a story that moves fast and moves with a purpose then see how you will become a star with one story here....I insist that you have great talent and its unique as well, I have never seen a writer here who wrote some one's thoughts to such perfection..and I have been here for ages...even old site also taken into consideration.

So do not take my suggestions negatively but think please... easiest solution to in summary

1. Strong story with a screenplay already fixed
2. Longer updates, even though you write short, you keep accumulating it in your notes to take it until you have at least to an extent what 2-3 posts length wise xossipy allows you.

~RCF

Bro, even though the question is not directed to me, let me share my views as this is a common issue for many writers ...

Why you become a writer in first place ? You like certain way of story telling character building which you might have not seen much in other writers..so you will start writing for yourself ..you are the first reader of everything you write...many times you write for yourself but not for others . You know others may not like this way but you have almost become addicted to your style you can't come out ..

If I don't enjoy what I am doing I won't like any profession...writing is also like that...as writers we can't change our style and hope readers will start aligning with our style ...when we both are not aligned we get frustrated..but can't help it

This is my 2 cents on this