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(Yesterday, 11:07 PM)seansean007 Wrote: I have never asked nor do I like readers begging for the updates. No reader should do that. Wait for the story to be updated and provide your thoughts. It's very simple.
As far as stretching is considered, if any reader can volunteer to rewrite chapters 119 to 122 in a way to keep it erotic but without dragging it into 4 chapters then that will be great. Let me learn from the readers. I am open for it. So any volunteer?
I don't think they need to be shortened. You are very descriptive but the situation itself is repetative. Situation like going shopping with hariya, eating ice cream, rickshaw ride or bus ride was done more than once so even if the story is good it will feel repetative. I think you should try some new scenarios like going on a vacation with hariya, shopping but for clothes, aeroplane ride insted of bus ride where aeroplane is partially empty and hariya tries to seduce air hostess,cuckold angle but with another girl who tries to seduce hariya and anita gets jealous, going to gyms but while they are empty as you can put anita on gym clothes which many readers will like.There is also the cuckold husband angle as many readers like cuckold stories.


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