A Banana Muffin Saga

[Aavesh9]

Humiliation is a huge turnoff, It started well but now its torture.

Hi Sir,

Of course, I totally get where you're coming from, and with all humbleness I do agree that humiliation angle isn't everyone’s shot of espresso. 

But here’s the thing, you’ve gotta look at the bigger picture of the arc. This isn't just random "torture"; it’s the systematic breaking of a "perfect" housewife. Khurram is meticulously dismantling Tanvi’s ego and forcing her to forget her marriage to transform to become an unapologetic slut that he knows is buried under all that repressed feelings of the young mother.

This is my take of this 'saga' and eventhough I get your point, I am humbly declining to agree with it.

On a side note, for me, who cannot even imaging writing a good paragraph without mistakes, it is so easy to judge the entire work when the intensity hits the ceiling, but honestly, I try with full honesty to capture the entire saga, from where it started, and where it is now, and the potential of where YLTS is taking us through a 'trademark' of dark erotica with a wild balancing act -- this is what I have seen when I read the past stories of YLTS...and possibly the same happening to this...or not...I don't know...and I don't want to judge.

The goal is to make the reader feel exactly how Tanvi does...completely overwhelmed and pushed to the edge. 

If it feels like "too much," then the writing is doing exactly what it's supposed to do (again, this is my take).

The "breaking" phase is always the roughest part of the ride, but it’s exactly what makes the eventual submission actually hit us...the poor readers...and push us into the very edge of excitement...I am sure you'd agree to this.

Read thru dude...let's all enjoy this amazing work together!