Ek Anokhee Love Story

[Deepak.kapoor]

Hi Val,

Congrats on starting the first story. I read your update 1.

The plot is nice; you asked for my suggestion on how to make it better. I think you need to include the physical details of your Main characters. Like how Sandy and Anupriya look. Some GIFs might help you. Find a good one.

Make the scene more emotional and erotic. Like he's giving a packet of one lakh for the marriage. ( emotional) First encounter with Anupriya ( erotic): what both felt, what happened in their minds. Your first post is much better than my first work. Please do not take my perceptions negatively. I want you to succeed and enjoy writing. You can always edit your work here. Develop a profile of your character, like Sandy: is he a Playboy? Helpful? etc., the story ultimately revolves around those inbuilt emotions. If Sandy is a friend of the keeper, he should be torn internally about how he feels for Anupriya. -- just a few suggestions. Read my other story in my signature to see how I developed the main characters like Sartaj, Meera, and Sher.