30-01-2026, 01:22 PM
Just a small suggestion as a reader & Writer: try describing the characters first. It’s difficult to imagine them clearly right now. You’ve mentioned their clothes, but adding details about how they look, their expressions, body language, and overall presence would really help bring them to life.
Also, the scenes feel rushed—ending them in just two or three lines breaks the immersion. Take your time with each scene, let it breathe, and connect it more smoothly with the story’s plot. Complete the sentences fully and clearly so readers can understand exactly what you’re trying to convey.
If you improve the scene depth and character descriptions, the story will feel more engaging and you’ll definitely attract more readers.
Also, the scenes feel rushed—ending them in just two or three lines breaks the immersion. Take your time with each scene, let it breathe, and connect it more smoothly with the story’s plot. Complete the sentences fully and clearly so readers can understand exactly what you’re trying to convey.
If you improve the scene depth and character descriptions, the story will feel more engaging and you’ll definitely attract more readers.
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