Adultery The Husband’s Doubt [Completed]

[DeanWinchester00007]

Thanks for the honest feedback. The pay off is little uncertain.. As for Vikram character i guess he cannot do much as he didn't do anything when Aashika got affected he detached himself from Aashika after he knows about her affair. Him revenging for Aashika doesn't make sense. May be he was just satisfying his ego. But once he realize ladies are contested he know his limit and gets back.. he was just in better position because of his friendship to Rohan's wife family who can unplug him. As for the ladies they  crossed every boundaries.. painting them saint or turning them as good is joke after a point. The balanced way can be them taking back control. So i turned it like. Its a win between flaw vs Flaw.. Rohan & Aadhil Winning or  Nivi & Vani Winning.. Imagine Rohan and aadil winning it means the affair continues.. Prem and Nitin kept in cheating loop. Them splitting up with ladies are only way.. or them playing along with ladies and become a willing cuck.. As the characters are really good i didnt wanted them to face the humiliation and tweaked it.. i just don't want Prem and Nitin to face it at least in this  first part.. When the sex between ladies and Rohan-Aadhil increases the redemption arc gets decreases. It would again look overly dramatic or unreal.. Worst part in Rohan and Adhil winning is they wont even marry them..  So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands. And they have a measure finale in sex with their alter partners. This is most balanced ending i can give without disturbing any one.. and yes for one wishing more open ending will open up :)

I get it , Your explanation is fine for the story and ending . 

But , again , I dont agree with balanced ending thing . It would be much better Prem turning into willing cuckold than live his life under a lie . If Prem character was based on abusive husband or something bad characteristic , then this ending would have been  some what acceptable but this is overly dramatic or unreal   . You went to extreme at the end . .They knew the truth , You took us too close even when they were fighting inside the secret room , you pulled back hard . Complete 180 hahaha . 

Again I was not saying that I expected a good ending , The ending i expected based on written material , not on your mood hahaha which of course We as reader wont get to  know  what were going on in your mind at that time when you were writing . 

First I was thinking your were too sympathetic Towards Rohan character but nope I was wrong , You were sympathetic towards NIVI character , Whatever Rohan did , He did it for NIVI . Even at the end you turned the whole situation which was going against NIVI completely in her favor . She won at both front , Her family and Her affair . She won her husband trust , Her economic independency , and satisfied her sexual curiosity and found herself a lover . 

The title is wrong ( which i think you had said in your first story) . lol . The Mention of husband in the title made me think Prem as a central character, the way his character fleshed out at the starting the ending was pretty much expected but nope IT WAS NIVI , It's her story . So ending was in her favor is completely understandable , Prem is irrelevant here . So I think It does not matter if he lives rest of his life under complete lie with who does not even love him . He was a side character which settled most of things .

And again , When both of them finally got what they wanted , Why they did not leave ?, NIVI even confessed that she does not love Prem any more , Why did not she just leave ? She has her business , She found herself , Empowered then why stay in marriage ? 

This is will not be seen as redemption arc but NIVI's getting evolved .


So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands.

....... in their eyes .   

 but here Why  A happy ending for PREM expected  , which means PREM finds about the betrayal . Prem got the house on his name, sent her daughter to hostel and He was talking about some business plan or idea  . So I thought when the battle starts between Prem and NIVI , Prem would eventually get most of their assets . A house and then A new business plan for his new life . Why would you even drop these crumbs if you dont want readers to follow it then He went to Kerala,  . So you changed the direction of the plot from here or it was always the plan ? 

Few things that i wanted to say earlier . 

But the story ends , I mean not . KEY IS STILL WORKING . 

But Ending is really good , something unexpected. 

I just wonder , How do you write so fast ? and you already shared the teaser of your new story 

I am excited and waiting to read your next story . 





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