Adultery The Husband’s Doubt [Completed]

[heygiwriter]

Well , This is your story . Yes , You cannot satisfy every one . .


But After that informer introduce , The story tank . The sex was as Usual great no doubt , even better . The chemistry between Aadil and NIVI was best , The plot turning to each other was great but there was no pay off .

I mean the seriousness and tension was gone . Final arc which in I expected that husbands gonna find out the truth and it is their turn because Both Husbands started to dig , So the seriousness and tension was there ,leading towards Climax but once it was cleared that nope , the story just took another turn ,it kind of became stale , no high or low points . Like Flatline , four of them just playing each other . The characters also felt like cardboard . 

That is why the ending is so pathetic , and Then you went one step forward and ruined it further . 

Why did you even introduce VIKRAM ? One phone call from ROHAN and that character just vanished ?

The setup towards the end was great but it is the pay off which ruined the whole story and left bitter taste in mouth . 

At least it ended . PREM and NITIN two brain dead zombie husbands . Just even reading their part hurts my brain . So much stupidity .  It would have been better if they were out of equation whole time and wives should have handled the whole thing , and husbands just working in office . 

Again , I am not saying the ending is pathetic , It was good but only if you had not set up the plot . 

I mean the flow of story disturbed , it scattered everywhere ultimately leads to catastrophic ending . No satisfaction , No closure , I mean nothing No body loose Anything which is good in a way . Every one just get adjusted as equal . 

But after reading your comment , I thought why did you choose to end the story this way and I kind of know why . It was great move   (Just a hunch )

Well , Now it ends .




But again The story was great , Great Writing , Fast Updates , Eroticism was highlight of the story. Some of the best eroticism i have read specially Aadil and NIVI . 


Again Kudos to you .   

( Comments are for fun , Not Criticism of the story or writer )

Thanks for the honest feedback. The pay off is little uncertain.. As for Vikram character i guess he cannot do much as he didn't do anything when Aashika got affected he detached himself from Aashika after he knows about her affair. Him revenging for Aashika doesn't make sense. May be he was just satisfying his ego. But once he realize ladies are contested he know his limit and gets back.. he was just in better position because of his friendship to Rohan's wife family who can unplug him. As for the ladies they  crossed every boundaries.. painting them saint or turning them as good is joke after a point. The balanced way can be them taking back control. So i turned it like. Its a win between flaw vs Flaw.. Rohan & Aadhil Winning or  Nivi & Vani Winning.. Imagine Rohan and aadil winning it means the affair continues.. Prem and Nitin kept in cheating loop. Them splitting up with ladies are only way.. or them playing along with ladies and become a willing cuck.. As the characters are really good i didnt wanted them to face the humiliation and tweaked it.. i just don't want Prem and Nitin to face it at least in this  first part.. When the sex between ladies and Rohan-Aadhil increases the redemption arc gets decreases. It would again look overly dramatic or unreal.. Worst part in Rohan and Adhil winning is they wont even marry them..  So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands. And they have a measure finale in sex with their alter partners. This is most balanced ending i can give without disturbing any one.. and yes for one wishing more open ending will open up :)