Adultery The Husband’s Doubt [Completed]

[DeanWinchester00007]

Well , This is your story . Yes , You cannot satisfy every one . .


But After that informer introduce , The story tank . The sex was as Usual great no doubt , even better . The chemistry between Aadil and NIVI was best , The plot turning to each other was great but there was no pay off .

I mean the seriousness and tension was gone . Final arc which in I expected that husbands gonna find out the truth and it is their turn because Both Husbands started to dig , So the seriousness and tension was there ,leading towards Climax but once it was cleared that nope , the story just took another turn ,it kind of became stale , no high or low points . Like Flatline , four of them just playing each other . The characters also felt like cardboard . 

That is why the ending is so pathetic , and Then you went one step forward and ruined it further . 

Why did you even introduce VIKRAM ? One phone call from ROHAN and that character just vanished ?

The setup towards the end was great but it is the pay off which ruined the whole story and left bitter taste in mouth . 

At least it ended . PREM and NITIN two brain dead zombie husbands . Just even reading their part hurts my brain . So much stupidity .  It would have been better if they were out of equation whole time and wives should have handled the whole thing , and husbands just working in office . 

Again , I am not saying the ending is pathetic , It was good but only if you had not set up the plot . 

I mean the flow of story disturbed , it scattered everywhere ultimately leads to catastrophic ending . No satisfaction , No closure , I mean nothing No body loose Anything which is good in a way . Every one just get adjusted as equal . 

But after reading your comment , I thought why did you choose to end the story this way and I kind of know why . It was great move   (Just a hunch )

Well , Now it ends .




But again The story was great , Great Writing , Fast Updates , Eroticism was highlight of the story. Some of the best eroticism i have read specially Aadil and NIVI . 


Again Kudos to you .   

( Comments are for fun , Not Criticism of the story or writer )