Adultery First Fire in Abhiram's Erotic Journey - Part 1

[shailu4ever]

KAVI9

Excellent narration, love the yoga chemistry -take it forward  without much breaks or diversions like her sister or building Aunties to dilute his character. You are excellent in creating a beauttiful love story with huge romance ..maintain that way. Keep his santity alive instead of bringining in some cheap sex. You narrate story much realistically, congrats. This one and Priya Didy story both narration is great n story too. Maintain same class. Love/romance/tease much sought than cheap sex, seduction/sex shall be top class to but between the main two  characters. Otherwise what is the differene between you and others who write hero f'ing n number after starting a good story.  - Vish

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Hi Vish
 
Thank you for reading so closely and for taking the time to share such honest and detailed feedback. I truly appreciate the care with which you’ve engaged with the story.
 
I’m really glad the narration, the yoga chemistry, and the romantic flow worked for you. That emotional and relational build-up is the core of the story, and knowing it resonated means a lot to me.
 
I also hear you clearly on maintaining class, sanity, and depth, especially when it comes to the main characters. For me, love, tease, and emotional intimacy must always come first. Any physical element should earn its place. Yes, I will keep your suggestions in mind.
 
Just to let you know this is my first story I ever wrote. This happened a little above 6 months and it is my pleasure to see your feedback on this story.
 
There is the continuation for this story and the link is in the same page. For your convenience I am giving the link for the next part of this story here:  Antarvasana: The Forbidden Fire – *** Varnika's First Surrender ***
 
Your mention of Priya Didi’s story and your trust in my ability to tell a beautiful, realistic love story is very encouraging. Thank you very much for your compliments.
 
Thank you once again for the encouragement, clarity, and straight talk. It’s feedback like this that helps a writer stay aligned and grounded.
 
With warm regards
 
-- Shailu