Adultery The Swamiji: The Ashram of the Sacred Angels

[behka]

Dear Shailu4ever

Please don't take this the wrong way. I don't mean any disrespect. If you don't like this feedback, feel free to ignore.

I have seen this happen with a lot of writers on this forum who use AI to generate stories. The intro/start of the story is great, it sounds very exciting, character intros are very interesting but then the story goes nowhere. This is because AI has no sense of plot or story or narrative. In order to write story with AI, you have to constantly modify and guide it towards a core story otherwise it will just keep going in 100 different directions.

This story has introduced so many characters that I'm frankly lost. You introduced Swami ji but then for the longest time he disappeared. If Swami Ji and Rhea are your main characters, by now you should have introduced them and there should have been some early sign of a conflict that would set the story.

Then there's a repetition of Savakis para from 1st page. You have given us so much build up and background of Swami ji and his network and ashram but what is the connection so far? This thread is 10 pages long already and still there is no conflict or narrative.

Again I don't mean any disrespect. Just wanted to share my feedback. If you do not agree, feel free to disregard. I don't meant to discourage you. I know it takes a lot of time and effort to come up with characters and plot and then write a story. But just that we have to have control over AI when writing the story as AI itself is totally hopeless in story building and narrative plot. It needs constant guidance from us to keep the narrative intact.