26-12-2025, 08:01 PM
Hello, author just read your story and just one word it's amazing. The Characters, the plot and the twist that you have delivered are just mind blowing. Your writing skills is amazing
However I would like to take a liberty to convey my personal feelings about this amazing story (better to call it a developing masterpiece)
As you have already mentioned that it will be a slow, seductive, cuckold, cheating wife story and as of now the story is progressing in that course only. After reading the last update the following conclusion has drawn my attention which is appended below
Prem is a caring, loving husband, overprotective husband living peacefully with his beautiful wife Nivi who slowly knowingly entered into an illicit relationship with his business partner Rohan (let's say alpha male in this story).
2. Prem is totally unaware of the fact what has happened behind his back (however xossipians are aware of that part and waiting impatiently what's coming next)
3. Prem is a doubtful husband (totally matches with the title of the story) and always monitors each and every characters behaviour(even his wife as well he sometimes questions his intentions)
Now coming back to point:-
A) Don' t try to make Prem an alpha character by banging Nivi as an act of revenge or to prove his male supremacy. Always remember there should be only one alpha male in the story and we all know who the hell he is. However Prem can play as a mere protagonist husband but there is a fine line between a bull and cuck. Don't ever make the character of Nivi as a submissive sex slut, keep the love for her husband and lust for her lover ( a dutiful wife of Prem and a lover of Rohan). Try to build up double meaning conversation/ plot or situations in between Nivi and Rohan keeping Prem in doubt and despair.
B) We can see that till now in Nivi's life Rohan is the only one who has managed to cross the barrier and reached her deep spot, the feeling of care and affection has appeared then sex happened and at last then there should be a place for love, a true love no lust (Nivi is not a sex hungry slut who need man materials to feed her sex hunger, but just a kiss on forehead to heal her pain and pull her towards a new experience of love)
C) The story will be more interesting when the husband plans to win his wife back every time but he fails and ended up being cuck (not because his planning is poor or he is cuck but there is someone along with Rohan holding his hand side by side helping her lover to win over her husband in every situation and enjoying her husband's failure and lover success )
D) Don't make the story full of sex , bang , gangbang, then it will be monotonous and become a porn story instead . You can add punches in the story like:-
(I) An outdoor office get together/ party where Rohan and Nivi had to act like newely wed couple and everyone complementing them in front of Prem( Prem gets humiliated)
(ii)A planned family tour/ vacation where Prem fails to attend and got stuck with his office meeting while Rohan is busy in mating.
(iii) Rohan comparing or joking manly matters with Prem in front of his wife.
(iv) Suddenly Prem falls sick (for some reason or maybe Rohan is behind all of this) Nivi taking good care of Prem, keeping all his needs taking care of husband all day (taking leave from the office) and taking care of Rohan behind the curtain at night. Prem knows there is no requirement for Rohan since Nivi is competent enough to care for him but why Rohan is frequently paying visit to them and staying in their flat under the same roof at night in the pretext to care for Prem(or actually taking care of Nivi at night and Prem is just the audience of their romance but still he is unsure because he is sick not able to move) and he is so weak to take any action against them.
D) One thing I would strongly advise is that adding too many characters sometimes dilute and divert the story from the origin. As you have mentioned few characters that will be coming in the story as the story progresses further, it should not happen that there are a bunch of dogs fighting for one bone to pick up(you have already understood whom I am referring to) since there was a character Prakash who had well played his role in this story and now there is no point to revive his character in their story because in my POV it will create a unnecessary drama and chaos in Prem as well as Nivi's life (already Rohan is a silent volcano which will erupt in near future that will shattered their pious marriage life), same goes for the character Adhil, Rohan friend is there a requirement for him..????
E) And lastly don't make it a cheap cuckold story.
All these points are just from my point of view, I have no intention to dilute your ideas (you are excellent in your field we all know)
Waiting for more updates....
However I would like to take a liberty to convey my personal feelings about this amazing story (better to call it a developing masterpiece)
As you have already mentioned that it will be a slow, seductive, cuckold, cheating wife story and as of now the story is progressing in that course only. After reading the last update the following conclusion has drawn my attention which is appended below
Prem is a caring, loving husband, overprotective husband living peacefully with his beautiful wife Nivi who slowly knowingly entered into an illicit relationship with his business partner Rohan (let's say alpha male in this story).
2. Prem is totally unaware of the fact what has happened behind his back (however xossipians are aware of that part and waiting impatiently what's coming next)
3. Prem is a doubtful husband (totally matches with the title of the story) and always monitors each and every characters behaviour(even his wife as well he sometimes questions his intentions)
Now coming back to point:-
A) Don' t try to make Prem an alpha character by banging Nivi as an act of revenge or to prove his male supremacy. Always remember there should be only one alpha male in the story and we all know who the hell he is. However Prem can play as a mere protagonist husband but there is a fine line between a bull and cuck. Don't ever make the character of Nivi as a submissive sex slut, keep the love for her husband and lust for her lover ( a dutiful wife of Prem and a lover of Rohan). Try to build up double meaning conversation/ plot or situations in between Nivi and Rohan keeping Prem in doubt and despair.
B) We can see that till now in Nivi's life Rohan is the only one who has managed to cross the barrier and reached her deep spot, the feeling of care and affection has appeared then sex happened and at last then there should be a place for love, a true love no lust (Nivi is not a sex hungry slut who need man materials to feed her sex hunger, but just a kiss on forehead to heal her pain and pull her towards a new experience of love)
C) The story will be more interesting when the husband plans to win his wife back every time but he fails and ended up being cuck (not because his planning is poor or he is cuck but there is someone along with Rohan holding his hand side by side helping her lover to win over her husband in every situation and enjoying her husband's failure and lover success )
D) Don't make the story full of sex , bang , gangbang, then it will be monotonous and become a porn story instead . You can add punches in the story like:-
(I) An outdoor office get together/ party where Rohan and Nivi had to act like newely wed couple and everyone complementing them in front of Prem( Prem gets humiliated)
(ii)A planned family tour/ vacation where Prem fails to attend and got stuck with his office meeting while Rohan is busy in mating.
(iii) Rohan comparing or joking manly matters with Prem in front of his wife.
(iv) Suddenly Prem falls sick (for some reason or maybe Rohan is behind all of this) Nivi taking good care of Prem, keeping all his needs taking care of husband all day (taking leave from the office) and taking care of Rohan behind the curtain at night. Prem knows there is no requirement for Rohan since Nivi is competent enough to care for him but why Rohan is frequently paying visit to them and staying in their flat under the same roof at night in the pretext to care for Prem(or actually taking care of Nivi at night and Prem is just the audience of their romance but still he is unsure because he is sick not able to move) and he is so weak to take any action against them.
D) One thing I would strongly advise is that adding too many characters sometimes dilute and divert the story from the origin. As you have mentioned few characters that will be coming in the story as the story progresses further, it should not happen that there are a bunch of dogs fighting for one bone to pick up(you have already understood whom I am referring to) since there was a character Prakash who had well played his role in this story and now there is no point to revive his character in their story because in my POV it will create a unnecessary drama and chaos in Prem as well as Nivi's life (already Rohan is a silent volcano which will erupt in near future that will shattered their pious marriage life), same goes for the character Adhil, Rohan friend is there a requirement for him..????
E) And lastly don't make it a cheap cuckold story.
All these points are just from my point of view, I have no intention to dilute your ideas (you are excellent in your field we all know)
Waiting for more updates....
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