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Adultery Mrs.Roshni - Buddhon Ke Jaal me Phasi
(12-11-2025, 10:31 AM)Blackdick11 Wrote: Shanthi ji,

update overall kaafi achha laga, par thodi si disappointment bhi hui.
kuch spelling mistakes thi, lag raha tha jaise thoda jaldi-jaldi likha gaya ho. aapki writing ki quality toh hamesha top-notch rehti hai, bas wahi standard maintain rahe toh maza aa jaaye.

AUR haan, aslam ka POV thoda off laga, mera chhota sa suggestion hai ki roshni ke alawa baaki characters ko 3rd person point of view mein hi rakho.

Or meenal ko dubar dekh kar achha laga...

update has been edited ... hope ab mistakes kaafi kam huye hain ..
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RE: Mrs.Roshni - Buddhon Ke Jaal me Phasi - by ShanthifrmSingapore - 12-11-2025, 12:44 PM



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