Adultery Dost Ki Teacher Ammi Ko Pataya ..

[spa_jack]

Guy's do you all really want me to write story from Asma's prospective

You can keep switching the perspectives between Saurabh and Asma. As I had pointed out earlier, without highlighting whats going on inside Asma's head, one can not really justify the way she is slipping. Check out your updates 13-14. From that point, she has suddenly reached a situation where they are just about to have intercourse. There are reasons for sure, but they need to be highlighted more strongly and that will happen when Asma's inner monologue is presented. Also, there is definitely a need to develop her struggles with her husband a lot more. Let the husband come across as a villain which throws Asma into the arms of Saurabh, only for her to realise that he has been playing a triple game with 3 women in parallel.

On the other issue, you should not stop writing. There is a nice flow to the story as of now and the story itself is at a critical point. I fully understand the apparent delays in you posting the updates. But any one can see that you definitely post over the weekend. You have highlighted your work related time pressures and people understand. The best way to answer criticism is to keep posting as and when you can. Even your worst critics are not complaining about the content and you should take solace in that.This story is very promising. I can see a lot of possibilities ahead.You can have Saurabh end up with a harem of Asma, her daughter and her student, have him have threesomes and foursomes. Its all beautifully set up. Dont stop writing. Let it flow. Try to improve the backdrop even more.