Adultery Dost Ki Teacher Ammi Ko Pataya ..

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Lagta hai ab AP logon ko ye story interesting nahi lag rahi. Sayad Story plot se bored hogaye hoge. Isliye like and comments sab reduce hotel ja rahe hai.. it's really sadd..

Not at all. The story is very nicely written and developing at a reasonably good pace. I, for one, am okay with the pacing as well. Initially, I was a bit circumspect about the entry of the daughter and the other girl student- I was afraid of the story digressing and losing focus. But, you have managed it very well and the new characters are also adding positively to the story line. One suggestion that I would like to give is to perhaps write about the inner monologue of the central character. She needs to have an inner monologue on the differences between her student and her husband. The husband needs to be shown to be acting rudely and ignoring her more and more. Perhaps she finds out that he is cheating on her. As of now, the husband is coming across as having done nothing to deserve this. The final call is yours, but it would be nice if Asma has a proper set of reasons in place so that she can justify her affair with her student. Otherwise, the sudden lack of reluctance and dropping of resistance from her side will seem a bit too artificial. Eg, after the first time she has sex with Saurabh, let her feel extremely guilty and try to get closer to her husband. But then she finds that she doesnt get the same level of intimacy in the bedroom from him, his behavior becomes worse and then she finds out that he is having an affair with someone else. All this completely drives her into the arms of Saurabh. And by that time, let Saurabh start a physical relationship with the daughter as well. And then, when Asma finally divorces her husband, let her daughter disclose her desire for Saurabh to her mother. I am sure you have some sort of a story line already in mind which is very good. But this is a small suggestion, in case you are wondering about it anyways. Overall, this is one of the best stories on the site. Keep writing, you are doing very well.