[shdas]

its your story ..pls write it in manner you want ... i love the changes done ..Iqbal now being a bit dominant is natural and that is the character arch i always thought he had ...given what he has seen he is now changing... Personally dream sequence of a prolonged sex scene does not make sense .. I have no credentials to advice you as i have not written any story but one thing i can vouch for a lot of ppl who give gyaan here for slow seduction / lets get all of it - have just made stories incomplete - pls read - "Anita ... " ..200 plus pages , discontinued and same slow seduction for nothing.

I am super interested in the chnages you did .. nevertheless will read/appreciate if you revert it but ofcourse will have trust issues :-) :-).... take a chill..you dont own anyone anything here including their interest in the story ..