31-08-2025, 07:31 AM
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What an Update , CHAPTER 21 10/10 . BEST CHAPTER TILL NOW .
I totally forget that how far story has progressed . 21 Chapters . Almost 8 months .Finally The villains are revealing , and as the story unfolds we still having new twist and turns . I just guessing at what time , The third Act is gonna start .
This chapter is great , Multiple plots , All progressing together perfectly in way not disturbing the natural flow of the story .
For me the balancing in the story including all elements Romance , Drama , Grief , Flashbacks , Reveals , Suspense and Then THE ACTION at last , this all makes it One of the best chapter in the whole story .
Everything is so perfect and so concise not a single para feels out of place not too revealing , perfectly satisfying the readers curiosity but also leaves the tease in the end .
Sona
Now , this is what i call Sona's true ARC . Her backstory suddenly change the whole scenario and kind of explain her present action.
Her arc's starts from here . Lets see how she handles the problem , her enemy , and most important HER HEART . She is in very delicate place , Too much strain will break the thin rope between her and Hemant or Too much cement will solidify her bond with Her lover . I hope that her arc should focus on SONA not wife of Hemant or Mistress of VIKRAM .
I love to see more of her story during college time . I hope she is gonna see the true face of Meghna . I hope her therapy at least make her to gain some brains .
Meghna
She just pure Evil . I was rooting for her lol . But her killing Sona's 4 year old sister was too much , She is just pure evil . This is not hatred or jealousy this is pure insanity . She is mad , Even after Sona sacrifices she still has no remorse and no sympathy for her , Yes she had shown sympathy in past but Its the sympathy The predator shows for their prey. Though they want the prey to suffer but the idea that they are not the cause or reason for the suffering of their prey makes them feel bad and the act of saving them only to torture them later is not sympathy its like Feeding the goat only to slaughter them later .
SHE DESERVES DEATH . She needs to pay .
I dont know but I want see How Sona's react to all of this Her whole life She is just puppet , Her puppeteer is right in front of her . That is why she is so helpless in front of Meghna. Every act whether its Meghna degrading her husband , Meghna actively breaking her marriage ,Any normal women would have keep her distance from her but Sona cannot not because she is like her sister . ITS TRAUMA-BONDING .
I hope the Psychiatrist will not turn out as Double agent . Also I hope she does not tell Meghna about her therapy the moment Meghna knows about it she will go after her or will try to sabotage her healing process . I hope that Sona fights back to Meghna's mental manipulation as Sona therapy progress and maybe she starting to let her true self (not trauma Sona) let out to do what a normal person will do in these situation or what a wife and mother do when someone threatens to harm their family .
So but this chapter also raises New Question . Was it always the Meghna's plan to break up Sona and Hemant ( It established fact that she wants to hurt her and burn her down to ashes but why she waited so long after 10 years ? was it co - incidence ) and then Later for which she went out of city , She got new ally, Anjana Bajaj , who also shares the same interest ? Or She was the one who join the Anjana Baja ? I hope in later chapter we get our answer . Who is the Main Conspirator ? Meghna or She ?
KUNAL x RAGINI
Great Supporting Characters . They are both good people. Helping the couple to survive .
Also , I think They kind of deserve each other , after whatever they faced in their life , After reforming themselves , They will be perfect fit for each other .
This story deserves a at least One Good love story or One Normal Couple . I hope Either they get each other or They both get someone who value them and love . Specially Kunal , After going changing himself and He needs to start fresh .
These two characters are like Little Hope . A small glimmer of Hope in this AGE OF DARKNESS .
VIKRAM
Bro ab to ek Meeting set Karwa do Ek Michael King ke sath .
Now , We got to see the glimpse of His nature , I hope he will do something drastic out of desperation , After all he is her Sister's Brother . There is no way He is not gonna go after Hemant .
He saw Hemant as sheep or goat but He does not know There is reason why GOAT is associated With EVIL and SATAN .
He saw Hemant as Goat and Hemant is a Goat but The MICHAEL KING Nope . HE IS BAPHOMET
I hope some physical altercation happens between them . He needs to know and He needs to understand , He needs to swallow the Hard pill , That though He thinks Hemant is nothing in front of him that is why He is so certain that After the Divorce He can start new life with sona very easily but Michael King , He can never match THE MICHAEL KING , The Vigor , The Muscle , The confidence , He needs to get the idea that In Animal Kingdom and Hierarchy , Michael Stands so much above him and That is why Sona can never leave him Hemant . I want something like, VIKRAM will misinterpret the whole situation because He does not understand the Sona's love for Hemant and why Even after so much her hesitation to leave him Because Of course If she had loved Hemant she would have never sleep with him in first place , So He may now took it as The reason she only got involved with him for sex and excited He gave to her , But now THE MICHAEL KING is here , She does not need him now , She simply used him which will break his heart after feeling used . I hope something like this happen . I dont want him to take the Stoic route here , So my Love Sona though i love you very much but You love Hemant more than me , You two deserve each other bullshit or something . I mean I dont expect If Michael and VIKRAM ever get to meet face to face Michael just gonna suck it up like a good boy and does nothing . I mean I expect Hemant to just simply ignore him but MICHAEL nope , That will be so opposite and Then what is the point of whole transformation , If Michael and Hemant gives same reaction in every same situations .
Hemant x Sona VS Michael x Sona
I loved what you did there . There interaction and That KISS , She thought it was Hemant but It was Michael but Hemant took control because only Hemant knew that it was wrong . I dont think Michael would have care .
But Michael is also a lover , He loved many women in his past , So of course If Michael rises He is also gonna love her wife , better than Hemant if i am not wrong . Here I am confuse About Michael Character , Its like He is same Hemant but with higher Body count . lol
Though I am confused , Who was interacting with Sona there ? Michael or Hemant . The whole Transformation scene is little bit Confusing for me . Is Michael gonna wake up slowly , day by day . If Michael is rising slowly then why we cant see How Michael interact or see Sona . This Whole transformation part is little bit Confusing for me .
What i want to see . The MICHAEL treats Sona as beautiful , Sexy women , not Hemant's wife . I mean any guy like him wants to bed the beautiful women , and Specially The one who was living with him . I dont know if its good thing or bad . Sona needs to feel the change , The man she loves is not the one in front of him .
I want to leave this , see how how this unfold . But Please no meaning less sex . There should be some built up .
And Now . The Main Reveal . The First Antagonist .
ANJANA BAJAJ
To be honest that was so unexpected . After 20 Chapters , With so many characters , so many Enemy , She Stood tall in front of them .
Who is she ? A Sister who simply wants her brother to have everything , His happiness top most priority for her .
What is her past ? Who she truly is ? Why she would go to that extend just to kill HEMANT or MICHAEL KING .
The idea that Her brother loves Sona , and she simply wants him to have Sona , So He finally finds his peace and Starts his own family with the women he loves but Sona's marriage is an obstruction , So thought of removing Her husband from the equation . Perfectly Shows the EGOIST , Maniacal , and GREED of Some Super Rich people . The Natural feeling and sense of Entitlement to have simply whatever they desire .
BUT ? Is that all ? A Sister looking after her brother ? I dont think so .
Two Scenario :-
1. She went after Hemant , and maybe hired some one to get some dirt on him , His past was unknown to her , and after learning that , He is not some average Vadapao guy lol , He is The Michael King . And She got Scared after learning that What He can do and What he is capable of .So in order to protect her Brother because of course Any Michael king type of guy would butcher the guy who fuck his wife irrespective of whatever the reason , Because It is his reputation is on the line , He will act and Ruthlessly kill the guy just to send message NOT to fuck WITH HIM . So she seeks out his Enemy , who thought He is dead and colluding with them , To take out MICHAEL, Take their revenge and Maybe after learning what Meghna trying to do with Sona , She also Colluding with Meghna To take away Sona from Michael . Neutralizing him from Both Front . First Break him from inside by making her wife betraying him , Breaking his trust , making his whole life fall apart in front of him and then let his enemy feeds whatever is left .
2. There is Some History between Her and MICHAEL . Something happened in past and carved a hatred so deep which is fueling her desire to take revenge , Something so personal that She is using her own brother in her ploy . This is not some business rivaling , There must be someone MICHAEL had killed who was so dear to ANJANA . That is Why her wrath , A WOMAN' WRATH unleashing on HEMANT .
To be honest I prefer the 2nd one . We need to know more Michael's Past .
Till now the The whole Anti Hero Image is kind of suss , I mean what ever he did and he will do its like Han thik hai koi bhi karega , But not like Oh shit ,That was really fucked up thing he did But He is protagonist so its fine
. I mean I want to feel that internal dilemma like He should not have done that but So what ? Its Michael .
Love this TWIST . BEST TILL NOW . I hope its get more twisted .
And the BEST PART OF WHOLE CHAPTER *THE LESBIAN LOVE MAKING *
Who wrote that part , Did you seek out some help , Or its just imagination with some with Porno .
So erotic and domination part was so perfectly written sensual but rough , loved every part of it . This could easily be on TOP . Now , I think We need more of Women lovemaking scenario . You said you insert the erotic part later , So Insert More .
Also I like the Couple , One is the enemy of Hemant and Other One is totally in awe of Hemant . I hope their will be conflict between them when she came to know that the guy she idolizes is getting destroys by the women she loves . Now We finally have some one who can shows Who Meghna truly is . This is good .Or I hope she is not gonna join her .
And one more thing that deserves the ROUND OF APPLAUSE , Even after 21 Chapters you still holding out most of the secrets and like I am still confuse little , How Sona's father is responsible for Meghna mother's death by his father's hand , Am I missing something ? Later she got adopted or Sona's father became her Legal Guardian ? Right ? How old was Sona and Meghna When she killed Sona's sister ? May be it was explained and might have missed some Information here .
AND NOW THE the PART THAT DESERVES THE ROUND OF APPLAUSE .
The Last Paragraph . 11/10 . BEST PARA IN WHOLE STORY TILL NOW , At least for me .
The whole reveal , The Action sequence . The whole Back and Forth between Shanghai and Azerbaijan . In one scene we can see ourselves what other is describing in the other scene .
Perfectly written . What I could say more , THAT IS SO EASY FOR YOU .
Some Men Never learns. ZARIR . Man i just feel pity for him . He is blind fool .
THAT was Some ABSOLUTE CINEMA .
Perfectly written . I am just keeping it Simple . Its was beautifully written and I loved that part . The felt excited while reading that . I read it in awe , The whole scenario was playing in my mind , Michael , His rings Walking down in Rain . I dont know what to write more . I love that part so much that's it . I always say this the same line ,
Its just so exhilarating The way you wrote the whole action sequence from setting the atmosphere , Character's appearance , The action , The dialogue and then ending with cliffhanger and followed by ONE LINER to end . The Perfect Format . I Simply love this .
Its like 8 Months and 21 Chapter , And you never disappoints . The consistency that you have maintained , You out done yourself again again again with New updates .
Thanks for this wonderful update , Harry . You are Best .
.
I totally forget that how far story has progressed . 21 Chapters . Almost 8 months .Finally The villains are revealing , and as the story unfolds we still having new twist and turns . I just guessing at what time , The third Act is gonna start .
This chapter is great , Multiple plots , All progressing together perfectly in way not disturbing the natural flow of the story .
For me the balancing in the story including all elements Romance , Drama , Grief , Flashbacks , Reveals , Suspense and Then THE ACTION at last , this all makes it One of the best chapter in the whole story .
Everything is so perfect and so concise not a single para feels out of place not too revealing , perfectly satisfying the readers curiosity but also leaves the tease in the end .
Sona
Now , this is what i call Sona's true ARC . Her backstory suddenly change the whole scenario and kind of explain her present action.
Her arc's starts from here . Lets see how she handles the problem , her enemy , and most important HER HEART . She is in very delicate place , Too much strain will break the thin rope between her and Hemant or Too much cement will solidify her bond with Her lover . I hope that her arc should focus on SONA not wife of Hemant or Mistress of VIKRAM .
I love to see more of her story during college time . I hope she is gonna see the true face of Meghna . I hope her therapy at least make her to gain some brains .
Meghna
She just pure Evil . I was rooting for her lol . But her killing Sona's 4 year old sister was too much , She is just pure evil . This is not hatred or jealousy this is pure insanity . She is mad , Even after Sona sacrifices she still has no remorse and no sympathy for her , Yes she had shown sympathy in past but Its the sympathy The predator shows for their prey. Though they want the prey to suffer but the idea that they are not the cause or reason for the suffering of their prey makes them feel bad and the act of saving them only to torture them later is not sympathy its like Feeding the goat only to slaughter them later .
SHE DESERVES DEATH . She needs to pay .
I dont know but I want see How Sona's react to all of this Her whole life She is just puppet , Her puppeteer is right in front of her . That is why she is so helpless in front of Meghna. Every act whether its Meghna degrading her husband , Meghna actively breaking her marriage ,Any normal women would have keep her distance from her but Sona cannot not because she is like her sister . ITS TRAUMA-BONDING .
I hope the Psychiatrist will not turn out as Double agent . Also I hope she does not tell Meghna about her therapy the moment Meghna knows about it she will go after her or will try to sabotage her healing process . I hope that Sona fights back to Meghna's mental manipulation as Sona therapy progress and maybe she starting to let her true self (not trauma Sona) let out to do what a normal person will do in these situation or what a wife and mother do when someone threatens to harm their family .
So but this chapter also raises New Question . Was it always the Meghna's plan to break up Sona and Hemant ( It established fact that she wants to hurt her and burn her down to ashes but why she waited so long after 10 years ? was it co - incidence ) and then Later for which she went out of city , She got new ally, Anjana Bajaj , who also shares the same interest ? Or She was the one who join the Anjana Baja ? I hope in later chapter we get our answer . Who is the Main Conspirator ? Meghna or She ?
KUNAL x RAGINI
Great Supporting Characters . They are both good people. Helping the couple to survive .
Also , I think They kind of deserve each other , after whatever they faced in their life , After reforming themselves , They will be perfect fit for each other .
This story deserves a at least One Good love story or One Normal Couple . I hope Either they get each other or They both get someone who value them and love . Specially Kunal , After going changing himself and He needs to start fresh .
These two characters are like Little Hope . A small glimmer of Hope in this AGE OF DARKNESS .
VIKRAM
Bro ab to ek Meeting set Karwa do Ek Michael King ke sath . Now , We got to see the glimpse of His nature , I hope he will do something drastic out of desperation , After all he is her Sister's Brother . There is no way He is not gonna go after Hemant .
He saw Hemant as sheep or goat but He does not know There is reason why GOAT is associated With EVIL and SATAN .
He saw Hemant as Goat and Hemant is a Goat but The MICHAEL KING Nope . HE IS BAPHOMET
I hope some physical altercation happens between them . He needs to know and He needs to understand , He needs to swallow the Hard pill , That though He thinks Hemant is nothing in front of him that is why He is so certain that After the Divorce He can start new life with sona very easily but Michael King , He can never match THE MICHAEL KING , The Vigor , The Muscle , The confidence , He needs to get the idea that In Animal Kingdom and Hierarchy , Michael Stands so much above him and That is why Sona can never leave him Hemant . I want something like, VIKRAM will misinterpret the whole situation because He does not understand the Sona's love for Hemant and why Even after so much her hesitation to leave him Because Of course If she had loved Hemant she would have never sleep with him in first place , So He may now took it as The reason she only got involved with him for sex and excited He gave to her , But now THE MICHAEL KING is here , She does not need him now , She simply used him which will break his heart after feeling used . I hope something like this happen . I dont want him to take the Stoic route here , So my Love Sona though i love you very much but You love Hemant more than me , You two deserve each other bullshit or something . I mean I dont expect If Michael and VIKRAM ever get to meet face to face Michael just gonna suck it up like a good boy and does nothing . I mean I expect Hemant to just simply ignore him but MICHAEL nope , That will be so opposite and Then what is the point of whole transformation , If Michael and Hemant gives same reaction in every same situations .
Hemant x Sona VS Michael x Sona
I loved what you did there . There interaction and That KISS , She thought it was Hemant but It was Michael but Hemant took control because only Hemant knew that it was wrong . I dont think Michael would have care .
But Michael is also a lover , He loved many women in his past , So of course If Michael rises He is also gonna love her wife , better than Hemant if i am not wrong . Here I am confuse About Michael Character , Its like He is same Hemant but with higher Body count . lol
Though I am confused , Who was interacting with Sona there ? Michael or Hemant . The whole Transformation scene is little bit Confusing for me . Is Michael gonna wake up slowly , day by day . If Michael is rising slowly then why we cant see How Michael interact or see Sona . This Whole transformation part is little bit Confusing for me .
What i want to see . The MICHAEL treats Sona as beautiful , Sexy women , not Hemant's wife . I mean any guy like him wants to bed the beautiful women , and Specially The one who was living with him . I dont know if its good thing or bad . Sona needs to feel the change , The man she loves is not the one in front of him .
I want to leave this , see how how this unfold . But Please no meaning less sex . There should be some built up .
And Now . The Main Reveal . The First Antagonist .
ANJANA BAJAJ
To be honest that was so unexpected . After 20 Chapters , With so many characters , so many Enemy , She Stood tall in front of them .
Who is she ? A Sister who simply wants her brother to have everything , His happiness top most priority for her .
What is her past ? Who she truly is ? Why she would go to that extend just to kill HEMANT or MICHAEL KING .
The idea that Her brother loves Sona , and she simply wants him to have Sona , So He finally finds his peace and Starts his own family with the women he loves but Sona's marriage is an obstruction , So thought of removing Her husband from the equation . Perfectly Shows the EGOIST , Maniacal , and GREED of Some Super Rich people . The Natural feeling and sense of Entitlement to have simply whatever they desire .
BUT ? Is that all ? A Sister looking after her brother ? I dont think so .
Two Scenario :-
1. She went after Hemant , and maybe hired some one to get some dirt on him , His past was unknown to her , and after learning that , He is not some average Vadapao guy lol , He is The Michael King . And She got Scared after learning that What He can do and What he is capable of .So in order to protect her Brother because of course Any Michael king type of guy would butcher the guy who fuck his wife irrespective of whatever the reason , Because It is his reputation is on the line , He will act and Ruthlessly kill the guy just to send message NOT to fuck WITH HIM . So she seeks out his Enemy , who thought He is dead and colluding with them , To take out MICHAEL, Take their revenge and Maybe after learning what Meghna trying to do with Sona , She also Colluding with Meghna To take away Sona from Michael . Neutralizing him from Both Front . First Break him from inside by making her wife betraying him , Breaking his trust , making his whole life fall apart in front of him and then let his enemy feeds whatever is left .
2. There is Some History between Her and MICHAEL . Something happened in past and carved a hatred so deep which is fueling her desire to take revenge , Something so personal that She is using her own brother in her ploy . This is not some business rivaling , There must be someone MICHAEL had killed who was so dear to ANJANA . That is Why her wrath , A WOMAN' WRATH unleashing on HEMANT .
To be honest I prefer the 2nd one . We need to know more Michael's Past .
Till now the The whole Anti Hero Image is kind of suss , I mean what ever he did and he will do its like Han thik hai koi bhi karega , But not like Oh shit ,That was really fucked up thing he did But He is protagonist so its fine
. I mean I want to feel that internal dilemma like He should not have done that but So what ? Its Michael .Love this TWIST . BEST TILL NOW . I hope its get more twisted .
And the BEST PART OF WHOLE CHAPTER *THE LESBIAN LOVE MAKING *
Who wrote that part , Did you seek out some help , Or its just imagination with some with Porno
. So erotic and domination part was so perfectly written sensual but rough , loved every part of it . This could easily be on TOP . Now , I think We need more of Women lovemaking scenario . You said you insert the erotic part later , So Insert More
.Also I like the Couple , One is the enemy of Hemant and Other One is totally in awe of Hemant . I hope their will be conflict between them when she came to know that the guy she idolizes is getting destroys by the women she loves . Now We finally have some one who can shows Who Meghna truly is . This is good .Or I hope she is not gonna join her .
And one more thing that deserves the ROUND OF APPLAUSE , Even after 21 Chapters you still holding out most of the secrets and like I am still confuse little , How Sona's father is responsible for Meghna mother's death by his father's hand , Am I missing something ? Later she got adopted or Sona's father became her Legal Guardian ? Right ? How old was Sona and Meghna When she killed Sona's sister ? May be it was explained and might have missed some Information here .
AND NOW THE the PART THAT DESERVES THE ROUND OF APPLAUSE .
The Last Paragraph . 11/10 . BEST PARA IN WHOLE STORY TILL NOW , At least for me .
The whole reveal , The Action sequence . The whole Back and Forth between Shanghai and Azerbaijan . In one scene we can see ourselves what other is describing in the other scene .
Perfectly written . What I could say more , THAT IS SO EASY FOR YOU .
Some Men Never learns. ZARIR . Man i just feel pity for him . He is blind fool .
THAT was Some ABSOLUTE CINEMA .
Perfectly written . I am just keeping it Simple . Its was beautifully written and I loved that part . The felt excited while reading that . I read it in awe , The whole scenario was playing in my mind , Michael , His rings Walking down in Rain . I dont know what to write more . I love that part so much that's it . I always say this the same line ,
Its just so exhilarating The way you wrote the whole action sequence from setting the atmosphere , Character's appearance , The action , The dialogue and then ending with cliffhanger and followed by ONE LINER to end . The Perfect Format . I Simply love this .
Its like 8 Months and 21 Chapter , And you never disappoints . The consistency that you have maintained , You out done yourself again again again with New updates .
Thanks for this wonderful update , Harry . You are Best .
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