23-08-2025, 05:21 AM
Hi,
I came across this story, and I must say, it’s really gathering attention for all the right reasons.
First a note to you, dear Author:
I noticed in one of your comments, you called yourself an amateur and compared yourself to a porn producer. Please don’t do that. No one is born a storyteller. Everyone starts somewhere. What matters is your ability to evolve and clearly, you have what it takes. Your story has emotional layers, sex, excitement, innovative angles, tension and most of all 'a couple in Love'. That’s more than what many can manage. So I'll suggest, don't under estimate yourself.
It takes real brains to plot something like this and you are going good till now. Just try to take the comments in a positive way, it would make you sound more mature.
Now the Story:
Right from the beginning, the plot has been engaging and fresh. The CCTV angle was a brilliant out of the box idea. That initial moment where Dhristi had to quickly slip into her nightie while still wet was totally unexpected and incredibly realistic. It didn’t feel staged at all, which made it that much more intense and natural. I wish we could experience more of such natural exciting scenarios in future.
However, things took a very dark and disturbing turn with the incident where Lakhan bangd Dhristi the first time. I was praying if some event could have stopped that from happening but alas. It was difficult and uncomfortable to see her go through such a traumatic encounter. The energy changed completely, and I genuinely felt pain for her. (Thankfully, the narrative showed that her body started liking his brutality which kind of saved the day to little extent showing how the body sometimes reacts independently of the mind). But yeah, such incidents are tend to happen as its a reality so can't call it completely unrealistic, hence it didn’t feel totally implausible.
(I initially had imagined a different direction, Maybe someone trying to approach Dhristi slowly & carefully while she was home alone . It would have been really interesting to see someone trying to woo a woman who is so much devoted to her Husband)
(On a second thought, being a woman like Dhristi & how carefully a village woman remains in real, wouldn't she have checked if Lakhan has already left and to quickly latch the door before undressing? Just a thought
)
What I truly appreciate is how well you've captured emotional complexity, especially from Manav’s perspective. His pain, love, and confusion are portrayed so well that it shows the depth of his feelings for Dhristi and how broken he is by her suffering.
A lot of people may not understand or agree, but I personally feel Dhristi has shown remarkable strength. She's been fighting a war within herself, battling her body’s involuntary reactions during these forced acts. She has never willingly encouraged Lakhan, and yet, her poor body betrays her, which adds another tragic layer to her experience. And each time, after the act, her breakdowns show how deeply it affects her. She's not weak or characterless, she’s enduring something emotionally devastating, and her strength lies in surviving it day after day.
She is new to this kind of raw sex with such a big cock which she never thought existed and its like, her body never thought such wild make outs could have such an affect on her. Still each day, after Lakhan leaves, she goes into this depressive state which CCTV shows without a capture doubt which can't be a lie as she is not aware of CCTV.
Many readers are questioning Manav’s manliness, but I disagree. Like one of the readers already explained very clearly that he went to confront Lakhan right away after seeing the footage, even knowing his influence. That takes courage. The scene where he frantically calls the previous house owner, thinking maybe someone is spying on them, shows a man who's desperate, afraid, and trying to protect his wife. He acted out of love.
Readers need to understand that, all he has, at the moment is the CCTV footage and with time, things are becoming confusing for him. At first, he was understandably furious and was going through all kinds of emotions and still is, but as he observes more footage, he’s entering a complex mental state where emotions like confusion, anger, guilt, and curiosity mix. He now is in analyzing state where he's even questioning himself when he finds arousal creeping in while watching footage.
Important to note here is that, he never got hard when he saw Drishti getting brutally bangd .He started getting hard only when he felt, may be Dhristi's body also liking it. His hardness somewhere is linked with Dhristi's unwanted happiness.
Just like Dhristi, he also is seeing for the very first time how raw and wild sex can be.
It’s not about perversion, it’s about the raw truth of how our minds and bodies can react when placed in unthinkable circumstances.
He sees that despite everything, Dhristi hasn’t become someone who’s chasing Lakhan or betraying her marriage. He sees the truth, the raw, painful reality of a woman who cries when she’s alone. This is at least comforting to him.
People forget that human physiology isn’t always under our control. Our minds might say one thing, but bodies don’t always comply. Similarly, Manav's cock is not in his control and sometimes in life things can shock you and make you question your morals when doing unthinkable things.
In a painful way, he’s learning more about himself, his limits, and his desires and so is Dhristi though unwillingly.
BUT, the most beautiful thing author has managed to preserve is the love between Manav and Dhristi. Despite everything, that love still breathes through the cracks of trauma. Maybe Dhristi hasn’t spoken up yet because of guilt, shame, or fear of how her husband might see her. I hope we get to see her perspective soon.....
*****
- One suggestion, you don't have to explain your plot and reasons to each and everyone here. Also, you should restrict yourself from revealing story plots about what could happen in future. Let it remain a mystery. That’s part of the charm.
- Some readers claiming that Manav is slowly turning cuckold. I see no problem in that. It your story, write it in your way. One of the best stories on xossipy 'Knowing my wife...." was also based on cuckold, yet the character husband in there was more of a man than most of the men who claim to be one. He was a perfect husband in every way.
Being a cuckold doesn't make anyone less of man. Being a cuckold doesn’t strip a man of love, strength, or character. It all comes down to how the story is told. So i suggest, please go along with the plot you have in mind.
But please, don’t ever take away the love between Manav and Dhristi. That’s the heartbeat of the story. The moment she becomes just another “characterless” woman, you risk losing the emotional weight you’ve built so carefully. Let love persist because that's what’s making this story shine despite the darkness.
Love should always perspire and i think till now, you are doing that beautifully.
Looking forward to the next update.
love,
❤️
I came across this story, and I must say, it’s really gathering attention for all the right reasons.
First a note to you, dear Author:
I noticed in one of your comments, you called yourself an amateur and compared yourself to a porn producer. Please don’t do that. No one is born a storyteller. Everyone starts somewhere. What matters is your ability to evolve and clearly, you have what it takes. Your story has emotional layers, sex, excitement, innovative angles, tension and most of all 'a couple in Love'. That’s more than what many can manage. So I'll suggest, don't under estimate yourself.
It takes real brains to plot something like this and you are going good till now. Just try to take the comments in a positive way, it would make you sound more mature.
Now the Story:
Right from the beginning, the plot has been engaging and fresh. The CCTV angle was a brilliant out of the box idea. That initial moment where Dhristi had to quickly slip into her nightie while still wet was totally unexpected and incredibly realistic. It didn’t feel staged at all, which made it that much more intense and natural. I wish we could experience more of such natural exciting scenarios in future.
However, things took a very dark and disturbing turn with the incident where Lakhan bangd Dhristi the first time. I was praying if some event could have stopped that from happening but alas. It was difficult and uncomfortable to see her go through such a traumatic encounter. The energy changed completely, and I genuinely felt pain for her. (Thankfully, the narrative showed that her body started liking his brutality which kind of saved the day to little extent showing how the body sometimes reacts independently of the mind). But yeah, such incidents are tend to happen as its a reality so can't call it completely unrealistic, hence it didn’t feel totally implausible.
(I initially had imagined a different direction, Maybe someone trying to approach Dhristi slowly & carefully while she was home alone . It would have been really interesting to see someone trying to woo a woman who is so much devoted to her Husband)
(On a second thought, being a woman like Dhristi & how carefully a village woman remains in real, wouldn't she have checked if Lakhan has already left and to quickly latch the door before undressing? Just a thought
)What I truly appreciate is how well you've captured emotional complexity, especially from Manav’s perspective. His pain, love, and confusion are portrayed so well that it shows the depth of his feelings for Dhristi and how broken he is by her suffering.
A lot of people may not understand or agree, but I personally feel Dhristi has shown remarkable strength. She's been fighting a war within herself, battling her body’s involuntary reactions during these forced acts. She has never willingly encouraged Lakhan, and yet, her poor body betrays her, which adds another tragic layer to her experience. And each time, after the act, her breakdowns show how deeply it affects her. She's not weak or characterless, she’s enduring something emotionally devastating, and her strength lies in surviving it day after day.
She is new to this kind of raw sex with such a big cock which she never thought existed and its like, her body never thought such wild make outs could have such an affect on her. Still each day, after Lakhan leaves, she goes into this depressive state which CCTV shows without a capture doubt which can't be a lie as she is not aware of CCTV.
Many readers are questioning Manav’s manliness, but I disagree. Like one of the readers already explained very clearly that he went to confront Lakhan right away after seeing the footage, even knowing his influence. That takes courage. The scene where he frantically calls the previous house owner, thinking maybe someone is spying on them, shows a man who's desperate, afraid, and trying to protect his wife. He acted out of love.
Readers need to understand that, all he has, at the moment is the CCTV footage and with time, things are becoming confusing for him. At first, he was understandably furious and was going through all kinds of emotions and still is, but as he observes more footage, he’s entering a complex mental state where emotions like confusion, anger, guilt, and curiosity mix. He now is in analyzing state where he's even questioning himself when he finds arousal creeping in while watching footage.
Important to note here is that, he never got hard when he saw Drishti getting brutally bangd .He started getting hard only when he felt, may be Dhristi's body also liking it. His hardness somewhere is linked with Dhristi's unwanted happiness.
Just like Dhristi, he also is seeing for the very first time how raw and wild sex can be.
It’s not about perversion, it’s about the raw truth of how our minds and bodies can react when placed in unthinkable circumstances.
He sees that despite everything, Dhristi hasn’t become someone who’s chasing Lakhan or betraying her marriage. He sees the truth, the raw, painful reality of a woman who cries when she’s alone. This is at least comforting to him.
People forget that human physiology isn’t always under our control. Our minds might say one thing, but bodies don’t always comply. Similarly, Manav's cock is not in his control and sometimes in life things can shock you and make you question your morals when doing unthinkable things.
In a painful way, he’s learning more about himself, his limits, and his desires and so is Dhristi though unwillingly.
BUT, the most beautiful thing author has managed to preserve is the love between Manav and Dhristi. Despite everything, that love still breathes through the cracks of trauma. Maybe Dhristi hasn’t spoken up yet because of guilt, shame, or fear of how her husband might see her. I hope we get to see her perspective soon.....
*****
- One suggestion, you don't have to explain your plot and reasons to each and everyone here. Also, you should restrict yourself from revealing story plots about what could happen in future. Let it remain a mystery. That’s part of the charm.
- Some readers claiming that Manav is slowly turning cuckold. I see no problem in that. It your story, write it in your way. One of the best stories on xossipy 'Knowing my wife...." was also based on cuckold, yet the character husband in there was more of a man than most of the men who claim to be one. He was a perfect husband in every way.
Being a cuckold doesn't make anyone less of man. Being a cuckold doesn’t strip a man of love, strength, or character. It all comes down to how the story is told. So i suggest, please go along with the plot you have in mind.
But please, don’t ever take away the love between Manav and Dhristi. That’s the heartbeat of the story. The moment she becomes just another “characterless” woman, you risk losing the emotional weight you’ve built so carefully. Let love persist because that's what’s making this story shine despite the darkness.
Love should always perspire and i think till now, you are doing that beautifully.
Looking forward to the next update.
love,
❤️
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