Adultery Priya Didi

[shailu4ever]

I completely get your point...and if you remember i said i can be wrong... But what i felt was that bit more interactions were required in that scene...its just like serving a dosa in platter without preparing sambar...sambar enhances the taste of Dosa... description can be monotonous in slow burn treatment..what keeps engaging is a conversation through which emotions and desires are depicted for the readers...now coming to why i don't relate somehow is all the charectors are simply falling for Ravi married or unmarried...it seems husbands have no impact left in their life and as if they are looking for a guy like Charles Shobhraj who can be like a magnet and pull them out of their marital fidelity....i completely agree its quite possible but to create such a moment a strong background is required i can agree with one women geeting attracted but all your charectors walk in same path...

I know its your story and you have full right to create anything out of the charectors but if you just add few detail conversation and dailogues amongst the charectors then the background is established before action...its just a suggestion...

I won't intrude again please continue the way you think is best... your write-up is go very good i can't Stop my self from indulging into what i feel...

Thanks again for your efforts...i truly mean it...

Hi Raj

You are not intruding, you are giving your feelings. I can understand. You are just asking for some conversation there in that scene, right?

That's what I understood from your response. I can definitely add that. If it adds the required flavor by adding some conversation, I can definitely do that. I will update that scene later today.

Please let me know is that all you are asking for? Or anything else?

Thank you for your support. I don't want to disappoint you.


With warm regards

-- Shailu