Misc. Erotica అమ్మ తో సంతుగాడు

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Coming to the story narration, there's a bit Miss(catching from the previous scene where it has left ) and story suddenly jumped into a whole new scene which created an advanced level of the closeness between hero and heroine...
I strongly feel and firmly believe that there should have been some more explanation to the bathroom scene continuation and how they have behaved there and come out what are the repercussions faced by this boy who is in his early puberty ( doesn't understand everything) .
The episode narration is quite dramatic than engaging and connecting which is what I felt after reading the story. Could have improvised in few areas and could have done way more better which you usually do( in your writings) but this is something that you have written donno what made you think in such a fashion.  Ending was purely satisfactory..  

Thanks. Happy Reading and Happy Commenting.

నాకు మూడ్ లో ఎలా రాయాలని అనిపిస్తే అలా రాసేస్తాను bro... ఒక ఆలోచన పాడు ఉండదు.. ముందు స్టోరీ ఎం రాసానో కూడా చూడలేదు కనీసం.... Edo main scene మధ్యలో చిన్న drama అంతే... మనుషులు అన్నాక వాళ్ళ మధ్యలో చాలా జరుగుతాయి గా... అలా జరిగిన సీన్ అనుకో