19-07-2025, 09:36 PM
(This post was last modified: 19-07-2025, 09:38 PM by khemucha. Edited 2 times in total. Edited 2 times in total.)
(19-07-2025, 12:24 PM)tharkibudda Wrote: A) ... We ate in silence, the air thick with unspoken words and unshed tears.
B) ... but there was a sadness in the way her eyes searched the space where he had so often loomed over her. Was she disappointed? Was she hoping for another confrontation to somehow prove something to herself or to him?
C) ... Or was she plagued by the emptiness his absence had left behind? Dhristi lay on her side, one hand curled into a fist under her pillow, the other resting limp on the bed. Her breathing was even, but the tension in her body told a different story.
Nice story progression, but I find a few sentences her and there out of synch. they are mentioned above. Manav obviously loves his wife, has full trust in her and is anguished and angered by her violation by Lakhan. There is also a sense of fear about what more violations of his beloved will have to endure and he will have to witness. Its noteworthy and commendable that through out all this, his dick never stirred, a kink that only a few writers here can resist. His anguish and anger reflect the general middle class morality we see around us.
Then what explains -
A) why in silence ... the busy husband has the weekend off with his lovely wife ... surely he would try to converse ... she might avoid or answer in monosylables, but I dont understand why Manav is silent ... he did not know anything then ... even if he is a workahololic, this silence is weird.
B) Did this thought really cross his mind - was she disappointed. Why would he think that in his current state of mind. The following sentence make more sense as a thought triggered in response to the sadness he detected as he tries to decipher her expression.
C) Again this(was she plagued by the emptiness his absence had left behind?) is a incongruous thought given the evidence he has so far uncovered. I would imagine he would be more relieved than anything else.
Or has his inferiority complex kicked in (in the first encounter her he did envy Lakhan wrenching two orgasms out of her) now, and her body's responses during the two acts, responses he just narrated but did not dwell upon have begun gnawing at his consciousness, planting seeds of a sense or inadequacy and betrayal. If so, nothing apart from simply observing her responses has been narrated so far. As a Manav POV are we not supposed to know his mind? To this limited extent, I feel the update was incomplete.



![[+]](https://xossipy.com/themes/sharepoint/collapse_collapsed.png)